|11 November 2012||#46|
Join Date: Jan 2003
Amazing work! I thought Holbein right away.
I did notice the sleaves to though. And the way the alpha on the feather makes the sleave look pasty white is odd.
The face is amazing though! A good example of how a-symmetry can bring a face to life.
|11 November 2012||#49|
Join Date: Nov 2012
great work. The face looks particularly good.
I would add one thought that things are a bit too neat. The lace around the neck and hands, the quill, all look to symmetric. I think some folds and gravity on the lace, and the quill have typical unevenness and clumping too, would make it look A+
|12 December 2012||#52|
Join Date: Aug 2006
Very ambitious, quite successful
It truly is great work!
Is there a reference painting toward which you were aiming?
That said, let me add some notes, since a critique was requested:
The candle is putting out very little visible light, as seen in the reflections-- or lack of them. Yes, its possible that the window might preclude a need for the candle, but it would be nice "IF."
Overall, the lighting seems dimmed, given the two sources. Is the rendering perhaps too few in ray levels and/or samples? More would "up" the reflected light, but what you have shown is verrrry-like a 1500 painting.
The pearl or topaz ring seems to be gathering light; is the face reflecting a lower light source that the window?
The wet reflections in the eyes seem reduced from matching the white of the collar. Though a minor point, those collars were made to be conspicuously-white (thus, not a laborer), and usually contained more undulations (try just bunching it together at the neck, and avoid piercing thru the collar). IF it is indeed (as most were) a LACE collar, then an alpha channel would make that clear-- it looks like brocade so far.
Both arms seem a bit too low at the shoulder, especially if his left elbow is resting on a book or something.
Tho it seems importune that the key is on top of his document (and lit), that is exactly the kind of artifice that Rennaissance painters included. However, the white buttons would more than likely have been hidden.
the velvet seems to have a very short "nap." IOW, perhaps a wider choke on the renderer there.
The skin renderer is quite good-- but remember that a man of the time would have worn a hat outside, thus have little reason for age-mottling above the cheeks.
Just my .02 ....
--- on a very remarkably scene! Please keep it up and keep posting-- I'm learning a lot from this.
"Your real duty is to keep your dreams alive."
|03 March 2013||#56|
Senior CG artist
Sarajevo, Bosnia and Herzegovina
Thanks again for all the flattering comments and constructive inputs. I made a new render where I tried to fix a lot of issues that were raised. I fixed his clothes, quill and some other stuff. The biggest change is in the lightning since the previous render didn't make sense to a lot of people.
Thanks for all your support
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