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05 May 2010, 06:05 PM
hey guys, this is smt i started workin on today, tackin advantage of some free time; feel like i could use some help

05 May 2010, 07:58 AM

05 May 2010, 11:19 AM

05 May 2010, 02:31 PM
First of all I'd like to know if her hand is to be transparent? That was the first thing that pop out for me. And I suppose you will paint her feets right? I like the colours in this drawing, her face is quite adorable - but you could try to make her more... catching... if you know what I mean. I don't know exactly how - but you could make her eyes more sexy/agressive.

05 May 2010, 07:04 PM
maybe some tips on chromatics

05 May 2010, 10:37 PM

05 May 2010, 11:49 PM
Becausm not very experienced don't take everything I say at face value, but personally, I think the breasts should be lower on her chest.

05 May 2010, 12:11 AM
thanks, good observation

05 May 2010, 02:05 AM
Couple of things:

Finish the hands - they tend to really stick out when they're not done or wrong. Her left hand is looking a lot better, I'd add some more shadow to define her knuckles a little?

Her left eye looks droopy. I think you have it centered too much to the left.

The only other thing is color - her skin tones look flat, and need more color and value. You have her backlit, which gives you wonderful opportunities to make the cloth of her robe translucent, and then reflect the color of the robe onto her - especially in the lower edges of her face. I'd also add more reds and greens, especially in the shadows, and in her lips, eyes, and face.

I'd also really pick out the contour lines on her body, robe, and head, with all of that great back light. You have some really interesting areas to play with that! For example, between her legs - the robe should be translucent, and you could have some cool lit areas on her inner thigh that you could use to sculpt the shape of the thing, and draw the eye to.

The lighting isn't exactly accurate, but for this piece, it's good enough. Backlighting gives you all kinds of interesting shadows, that you're not adding, but at this point, it maymean overworking the piece.

I like this piece, I think you have the foundation for something really nice!

05 May 2010, 08:10 AM
thank you, a very useful comment.

05 May 2010, 07:49 AM

05 May 2010, 05:42 PM
Sorry, but I have to say this is a huge step backward.
Her facial expression before was a cool, mature, and confident...
and I think that's what this piece is all about. There was nothing wrong
with her face at all, and the lighting was great.

The expression on the new version is more of boredome, and her head position
looks less natural. Her face also looks more fake now.

The skin color before was perfectly fine in that lighting, but this new red tone is just completely wrong.

My remaining comments will relate back to the previous version since it was far superior
in my opinion.

As noted before her breasts look too high. They could be moved down a tad but the real reason they look high is actually because her torso is too long.

05 May 2010, 07:10 PM
thanks mate, i think i ll make a combination of the two, colors are really givin me a headache

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