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10 October 2009, 04:58 AM
I make it from imagination, NO photo or other images as reference.

C&C = welcome. Though is not finished yet.

10 October 2009, 01:56 AM
Well it's not too bad, but at the moment it does look relatively drab and uninteresting. The tree very much confuses me. What type of tree is it supposed to be? It seems like branches are only coming from two opposite sides of the tree, which is odd.

But really, at the moment, just seems uninteresting. Maybe tilt or curve the horizon a bit. Exaggerate the proportions or perspective on the canal thing, etc.

Keep at it, either way.

11 November 2009, 12:43 AM
Here is an update :

I want suggestions to really make future compositions better. Suggestions about mood, colors, composition, etc and be as explicit as you can... please, I need help.

11 November 2009, 09:50 AM
This is great techincally, but as for the composition I don't know where to put my eyes at this point. Position your motive at the roots of the tree and blur the background city a bit more, it would give better focus i think.

11 November 2009, 01:15 PM
In a short time I will create the focus on something (maybe the roots).
One thought still seems uninteresting?
If yes, tell me what strike the most ? I mean,what is make the uninteresting part ?
If no, tell me what is making things ok, compared with previous one?
Thank you.

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