View Full Version : First short-film - Sssh, Doll!

07 July 2008, 07:54 PM
Hello, this is my first short-film, its about a boy and his doll...
Was more to practice and I always wanted to make a short, i have much to learn...
The audio is in portuguese but it have subtitles in english!

Some images:

Link to download in rapidshare:

Link for youtube:

Thanks, I hope u like it.

07 July 2008, 07:59 PM
Great first!

I'd try to work more on giving your models a sense of mass. A lot of the animations seem very floaty.

Do you know what your next short will be about?

07 July 2008, 10:05 PM
I agree that the animation is floaty. It needs more "snap". More fast movements. A combination of fast and slow movements is what I mean by snap. Also the eyes need to deform in the corners. The emotions seem to be attempting to come from the brow movement, this isn't as effective if the shape on the eyes doesnt change. Emotion is stronger when it comes from the eyes. So if he is surprised his eyes may get wider and more circular and if he is laughing they would get more squinty and acute as his face makes a smile. Also Im not particularly keen on the purple saturation that this has. I think there should be more variance in light/shadow and colors in your scenes. The shadows should deffinitly be stronger if he is watching TV in a room with no lights on.

But this is your first short film and it is a good start. With the crits from people here you can do nothing but improve.

07 July 2008, 06:48 PM
Oh reaaaaally, reaaally thanks for u dudes!
I mean, its a good thing u come here and critique me, I only will grow up with this!
Chewky: After u said that, I re-look my animation, and saw the same thing. I think its the rig I made for the characters, I'd not so much freedom to move the butt, when he is sitted, but on the doll, I had more, because he stays up a good part of the animation...

hey kandyRabbitz! Thank u to you too...
The first scenes was made on the last year, I was not so much good in the time ago... Even now, lol. Lightining is not a good part on me... =[
I like ur critiques about the eyes! They are so usefull!

Really thanks again!
Keep watching! =]

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