View Full Version : Senior Project!!! Critique needed!!!

05 May 2008, 04:26 AM
Well, my teacher said my animation skills was bad. I have to pass this class to graduate. I'm a modeler so I don't care that I suck, but I do care that I pass the class.

Please give me input... This is my worst shot so far:

If my animation is soo bad you can't tell whats happening. He gets up jumps up into the air happily. Starts walking, and clicks his heals and continues walking.

Any advice would be great.

This is just roughed out so it is missing a lot of motion.

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05 May 2008, 05:48 AM
When is this due?
Please don't tell me it's in a couple of days :)

There's a lot of work to do here, the motion is only one problem.
Why is he getting up? What's making him so happy? You need to show
that he is actually alive and is thinking.

Right now he looks like a marionette puppet operated by a drunk hobo.
Just kidding, give us an idea of what his motivation is, and we can start
working out some direction. Or let us know what are the requirements to
pass the animation side of things, because you may be able to come up with
something a little more achievable.


05 May 2008, 02:14 PM
I have three weeks left. My other animations still need cleaned up but that ones the worst!

His motivation is the fact that he just caught a lion in a net. He gets up from the position he was in to walk over to it. That is why he's excited.

It has to show him walking away mostly because a door has to open behind him. I mean I could cut to the door opening so I can cut out a lot of the walking.

the script is online at . If you need to look ati t.

05 May 2008, 12:04 AM
Three weeks? Plenty of time to fix this. Your script is saying the
character is elderly, so there is a start. Define quickly the traits an
elderly man may have. I don't know if he would be able to jump any
where near as high as you have him at present.

Film yourself acting it out, if you can't act, get someone who can. Act
it out 20-30 times and keep the camera rolling all the time. Get a take
your happy with and post it up. We can get the key poses and timing
from this and proceed from there.


05 May 2008, 01:20 AM
I agree with Lewis. Try videotaping yourself, and use that as reference. That'll not only speed up your process, but it'll look more realistic. Second, FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, stop using IK hands! :surprised That'll make it way easier and look way better instantly. Good luck!

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