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01 January 2007, 08:02 PM
I've been trying to spend the spare time in my life to get in some character acting practice. This is still a work in progress and I'd like a few comments on the animation just to get a more objective view on the character's motion.
Rob-Bot dances to Queen (http://www.nanimator.co.uk/Vids/LPR_WIP/LPR_SomeBodyToLove_012mb.avi)
I would appreciate any comments and I hope to have the finished article asap...
01 January 2007, 09:37 PM
Robot Dancing to queen (http://www.nanimator.co.uk/Vids/LPR_WIP/LPR_SomeBodyToLove_014mb.avi)
This is just an ongoing animation and I'm always interested in what others have to say, it always helps to improve my work. Any comments would be useful.
01 January 2007, 02:33 PM
Do u mind posting the actual lyrics here? English is not my 1st language- am having a little trouble understanding the words.
Just 1 thing- I really dont like the part when he puts his right hand on his forehead as if he's looking for something. Nothing wrong but that pose just doesnt seem to be a part of the song.
It kindda looks strnge fr the song esp when compared to the other poses.
Ignore me if u think I'm wrong.
01 January 2007, 10:33 PM
In resopose to the last comment, I have fixed the bad poses and replaced it with something that fits a bit better with the music.
There is still some tweaking to be done and some additional keys to be added towards the end but overall this is feeling a little better than the previous versions.
Also in respose to the last post, the lyrics are "Can anybody find me somebody to love?"
any comments again would be usefull.
01 January 2007, 08:30 PM
I can understand the song now.
Theres nothing wrong technically as I said last time.
And again mind u- what I'm saying is just what I feel will make ur work better. U r a far better animator than I am.
Where he is looking: Is he singing that to an audience in front of him? I dont think so.
Its more like he is singing to himself and kind of putting the questions to the sky/ heavenly bodies/ God etc. If thats so- then perfect cause he keeps looking up evertime. Also the motion of his hands sweep towards the sky.
But if he is singing to someone in front of him- then change his head position and make him face the audience directly. And as far as the sweeping motion of the hands is concerned , rather than sweep towards the sky , have him sweep him hands in the direction of the people in front of him.
When he is on 'sommmebody toooo' :his hands start from the bottom and keep going up.
Thats not bad. But rather than the from down-to-up-position , how about a sweeping motion? If he is singing to the skies sweep while pointing skywards. If he is singing to an audience sweep while pointing to the guys in front of him.
And in either case dont make it a full sweep with his hands completely extended. Keep a bend in his elbow. And pin his elbow to his sides.
Then 'toooo llllllove' :U've just continued the motion of his hands and they keep going up.
I just cant feel the word love with that pose.
When he is on 'llllllove' why not put his hands on his heart?
Like- left hand is a fist on the heart -with his fingers touching the body. And his open right hand covers the fist.
01 January 2007, 12:50 PM
I've cleaned up the animation a bit more, any comments regarding the overall animation would be appreciated. The main changes include:
1. Smoother secondary motion in the arms and hands
2. Subtle overlap motion in the head and the hands to to create some anticipation as the robot moves through the key poses.
01 January 2007, 11:02 PM
I've been working on this for the last few weeks, as you can see from the previous posts. The animation has moved on since the last post, it still needs sound and I'm hoping that when that's added it might strenghten the scene.
Since I am the only person who has seen this, some objective comments would still be good.
hope you enjoy,
01 January 2007, 11:02 PM
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