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03 March 2006, 04:10 PM
WIP seaport crash
First, I'm not sure to really understand what's the process to submit work in progress...
So, hope it's the right place and method.
This sketch deals with my flying machine theme called "aerobase" (if you want to know what it is, there are 10 posts in the 2D finished section)
This wip is a mix between three of them.
It's describe the crash of a flying bus on a seaport...
Crits and comments most welcome!!

03 March 2006, 07:47 PM
I don't know how to show here my image without attaching it...can someone help me?
Because I have something to post...

03 March 2006, 09:11 PM
I like where this sketch is going :) great perspective, please post on going drawings


03 March 2006, 09:58 PM
a new step with study of caracters...
C&C welcome
Can someone answer to my question?

03 March 2006, 01:13 AM
No comments?
another step...

03 March 2006, 03:24 PM
Hi there,
I'm coming back with a new step...
I resized the canvas...
Could you give me some comments please?

03 March 2006, 06:05 PM
No really different, but there is an horizon. I think it's better to express de-stabilisation...
And I begins to re-work the balloons, because it's to "busy".
Can I have some comments?

03 March 2006, 07:19 PM
Hmm I love the style u use in your pictures, this one has a nice atmosphere too!

The background need some more dept I think, it looks like if the aerobase was on the sea..
BTW the painting look cool, the composition is looks nice for me. Nothing to say... keep it up!

03 March 2006, 07:37 PM
really nice so far. it seems you solved your problem with attaching pics :-)

03 March 2006, 08:58 PM
I like it but imo it needs more contrast. It would also benefit from some kind of anchor to direct the eye. You could put emphasis on a certain section with higher contrast lighting.
Sorry if this sounds somewhat vague but it's really up to you where to put that emphasis.

03 March 2006, 09:53 PM
Thanks a lot for your replies...
I agree with the background (the sea should be more flat, cause of the distance)
In fact, this image is hard to do for me,
I am not sure of a lot of elements, and maybe I'll draw anothers sketches to study.
But, here is another compo vari. the caracters sketch
bye bye

03 March 2006, 05:26 AM
Another variant for the compo...but
at this step, I notice that I had lost the energy of the sketching base (the compo is not enough strong and balance for the effect).
I think the precedent (006)is better.
I'll draw a totally new one ( with a better sensation of weight and altitude ) and stops this one!
Critics welcome !!.

03 March 2006, 06:05 AM
Finally, I re-work on this one...
that's a work in progress!!
Actually, I think colors balance is not OK...
Some suggestions?

03 March 2006, 05:28 PM
hi. nice work. love your colour and enviroment.

Just one thing is, your seaport looks too(?) stable(not falling down to the sea) in air.
I love to see some dramatic angle...

03 March 2006, 07:17 PM
Sturmkim : thanks a lot!for your reply
I am not in a desert, alone!
Here is another step...

03 March 2006, 11:58 AM
I really like this piece arnocob. I have to agree with the others about the colors, amazing :)

03 March 2006, 05:57 PM
Terro : thanks a lot!
Sturmkim : here is a sketch with a drama angle, I think.

03 March 2006, 08:40 PM
i like last sketch comp.
keep it up..

03 March 2006, 04:40 AM
Hi there!
I'm starting a series of sketches or quick paintings...
Same subject, but with more dramatics points of view.
The first piece is a perspective base.
It could be inverse and rotate to express differents feelings...
Hope you enjoy!

03 March 2006, 07:48 AM
I want to stop the "crash on the seaport" painting, so here is the last one.
Could i have your critics please?
I am not ok at 100 % with this version, but I like it...
In the two images after "the crash", there are to 2 new ideas, based on the image called "empty perspective", sent yesterday.
So, hope you enjoy!

03 March 2006, 08:16 AM
And the two others...

It was for practise. It's a little bit often, but I took pleasure.
The base is the "empty perspective" sketch send by lyself yesterday or two days ago in this thread.
I wanted to show you how came some of my ideas.
Hope it's clear.

This is an evolution of the same structure, it becomes a Station, maybe for a strange halting place...this is the coloring progress, and there will be some changes..

03 March 2006, 03:05 PM
I have decided to finish the painting "crash on the seaport".
In this update before final, I have decided to precise some elements (characters etc)
and "polish" the sea.
I am trying to render a sense of depth (differents grounds)
Some new elements will be drawn ( fog and details)

The station will be continued after this one...
Hope you enjoy!!

03 March 2006, 10:47 PM

i love this atompsphere! i want see more about 'taxi'
good work!

03 March 2006, 03:38 PM
very interesting work here. What I could suggest, though I think you've already moved on, would be to try and exaggerate the pose of your characters. Something's falling on their heads, they've got to be more surprised than that.

Really like your style btw!

03 March 2006, 05:54 PM
Thanks guys!
Sturmkim : I am trying to finish the crash now, and then work on the concepts (taxi, station) based on the perspective..
DanVL : Yes, I agree about caracter pose. It's not my speciality, but I'll try to change it a bit...
Here an update with some details of the wip.
I'll smooth some areas, it's not finished!

03 March 2006, 07:52 PM
I love your style man! This whole thing going great, i see much more dept and a huge concept, really nice work, lightning, characters.

The other sketches are soo coooool! More :twisted:

03 March 2006, 03:50 PM
Brutal Monk, thanks a lot for your kind comment...
Here is another step...and maybe I need your crits before going on.
If you have a little time, it'll help me a lot!
I choose to insert dust/fog, and actually it's to clean, but there'll be some little elements in the air

03 March 2006, 07:58 PM
Oh well then i drop a few line to crit :thumbsup:

First of all the idea of the fog is cool, effective and nice, i would use it!
In other hand, there is too much empty space on this air-base, i mean you should add some extra things to the 'dock' like barrels, more boxes, you know what i really mean!
I love that dirty rope in the top left part of the painting, thats a great thing, maybe you could use more dirt for the picture! What do you think?

Keep it up, really nice

03 March 2006, 09:39 AM
Thanks a lot Brutal Monk, You are keeping crits active for me, and I appreciate a lot, cause it's help me to adjust things.
I think you are right about dirt and boxes (or similar)...
The fog / dust is actually to bright and not enough transparent, equal in all of the surface...
Others crits are welcome...
Thanks for viewing this thread.

06 June 2006, 11:27 AM
For those who were interested by this wip, I ve just post on the finished section the final step of the scene.
It will be nice to have your comments...
bye bye

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