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03 March 2006, 03:40 PM
Jerome Moo Wen Han is entered in the "The Journey Begins Challenge" update: View Challenge Page (

Latest Update: Final Image: Final Image for sure! (just touched it up) (

03 March 2006, 12:05 AM
Whats up mate. Good to see you again. What happen last challenge, you didn't get the finish your entry. Well, i hope you have more time for this one. Cant wait to see what you come up with.

Goodluck and have fun bro

03 March 2006, 07:56 AM
Thanks Archie! I hope I am able to finish this challenge. Last challenge was bad timing because its when all the heavy work comes in. This time I hope to be more free for it. The theme is so exciting, and I have ideas!

03 March 2006, 08:04 AM
yeah~u made it here!goodluck mate and all the best~.i'm anticipating for what u'll come up with:thumbsup:

03 March 2006, 01:55 PM (

Landscape plays a really big part in this contest, so I want it to have a strong character in my entry. I like to have some purposeful interaction between the 'journeyman' and the environment, and a clear reason why they both exist for each other.

I have an idea about a child killer, who murdered his whole family. Then the spirits of his family came and brought him to a strange and different world (inside his mind?) where the island is made up of the bodies of his family. Surrounding them is the sea of blood and beyond that there's nothing else.

On top of each of the bodies is a place/building where they were murdered. The ghosts of his family brought him to this world so that he can revisit his past, and the scenes of the murders and to question his motives. His family still loves him no matter what he has done to them, so they are helping him to find his path to sanity and ultimately, his own salvation.

I am inspired by a phrase from the PC game "Sanitarium"-
Demons from the past can torment you, or set you free.

03 March 2006, 02:46 PM (

Changing the angle and positions of the corpses of the family. Still not satisfied with the positions, but I like this angle. I am trying to form an island with the bodies, but it is easier said than done! :(

03 March 2006, 05:35 PM (

Taking my one of the pencil concepts with the angle that I like, I start to fill in the colours to find out the feel of the overall piece. Here I roughly painted out the 'Mother', the central figure in the picture with her dead palm facing up towards you. 'Mother' is murdered at the family home, so I placed the house on her head with its top half gone. This way, you can see the extent of her wounds at the same time know where she was killed. Below her, I have not finished the concept for the 'Father', for I am still thinking of the manner of his death and location. Same with the kid and the baby.

I have not added in the child killer yet. That will wait for now.

03 March 2006, 06:03 PM
I like your drawings. You have a very strong idea. I can't wait to see your next sketch.
It looks great.

03 March 2006, 08:47 PM
What a strange idea. Jerome, you´re a sick man :D
But seriously, perspektive and colors are looking very promising.

03 March 2006, 10:00 PM
He is in finally good luck dude!:thumbsup:

03 March 2006, 10:06 PM
You finally posted an update. cool, i like the idea. Its the first that i've seen of all the entries, that has a more horror and psychological theme added to it. Keep going with the idea man. No critzs for the moment :D


03 March 2006, 01:31 AM
wow... this concept made me stop and think. Really love the idea of the family as the 'landscape' and very curious to see how you'll add the journeyman in to it all and make it readble to those who don't look at descriptions. Great imagery though, the house merging into the head is exceptionally well done... shall be keeping an eye on this one!

03 March 2006, 02:23 AM
The thumbnail caught my eye, but I love the concept. Very different approach... morbid, but interesting. I'm looking forward to see where you take this. :)

03 March 2006, 03:16 AM
snowan: Thanks for liking my concept! I really took a long time coming up with this idea.

artvandeley: Heh heh. Maybe I'm really a sick person. I have alot of thoughts like this one. Either I'm a psychopath or I've been watching too much C.S.I. :D Thanks for your kind comments.

beelow: Hey, thanks for dropping by!

Arc80: I like psychological horror. The atmosphere it evokes is surreal and creepy like Silent Hill, Sanitarium, among others. This is what I'm going for.

Zepyhri: Thank you for liking my idea! I am not so sure about the house on the head. I am thinking of making it an Asian setting with an asian family. The movie that comes to mind is A Tale of Two Sisters. Thanks for dropping by!

navate: Thank you! Morbid? What till you see I finish this... heh heh heh heh heh heh

03 March 2006, 03:51 AM
strong concept idea, as for the angle i preferred your initial sketch, things merge awesome in it and ... well i like faces. they have a strong weight on leaving an impression that lasts, so far, the faces were much better visable in sketch 1, and also, the composition itself was very nice.

of course thats just my own point of view. keep up the great work. looking forward to your next update!:thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 03:15 AM (

Gaahhh, I am starting to hate this composition. But progress is progress, so here it is. I'm working on a new one next. Wait for my next update please.

Sacha, you are right! Working on that!

04 April 2006, 06:52 AM (

Alright folks, here's my final concept sketch. Too much thinking about this concept will drive me insane, so I decide to stop the conceptual process and move on to the painting part. So far, this concept is close enough to the way I wanted it and I will add more to it as I move along in the next following stages.

By the way, the child Killer is riding on a Knife Boat, a vehicle taking after his murder weapon.

Onto the painting part I go!

Feel free to comment!

ramy badie
04 April 2006, 07:06 AM
Wow this is so awesome, I really can't wait for this one to progress. Such incredible imagery, and I've seen your artwork so I know the painting will be wonderful as well. Great start, so much hidden that I had to look for in order to find. Good luck, I'm sure this painting will exceed my expectations.

04 April 2006, 08:27 AM
Nice stuff so far jerome! Keep it up dude!:thumbsup: Very eerie dude!:eek:

04 April 2006, 09:17 AM
looks great, I loved the lighting!!

04 April 2006, 01:15 PM
the latest is a good one!... I dunno u can draw bizzare stuff~~..impressive!

keep coming to us!

04 April 2006, 02:02 PM
ramy badie: Thank you! I hope I have enough drive to keep pushing on this one. Too many distractions keep me away from this cgchallenge! But I feel this concept is too good to waste, so I will try my best!

beelow: Hey there bryce, thanks! Eerie feeling is the point! ;)

bandro: thanks, mate!

dinodog_Jr: hey there, thanks! Are you participating in this contest?

04 April 2006, 07:56 PM
Nice, that last comp is definately working a lot better. I'm not too sure about that lighthouse giving a direct light towards that character, but i'll wait and see what you come up with. I do love the design and idea behind that figure with the house on top of its head... wicked :thumbsup:

keep it up man. its looking very cool.

btw: have you seen the preview for silent hill the live action movie

04 April 2006, 09:10 PM
here is mine (

04 April 2006, 07:12 AM
Wow. Really deep concept. Will be interesting to see how you develop this till the end. You've got the most bizzare and therefore awesome concept in this challenge man. Keep it up :scream:

04 April 2006, 04:15 PM (

I don't have any lineart stage in my painting process, so I'll just use the final concept as my lineart stage. All the same, this also acts as my underpainting.

04 April 2006, 04:23 PM (

Finally I reached the most enjoyable part of the process- painting! Here I painted the sky and a bit of "The Mother", the mountain corpse. I also worked on the house on the top of her head, but I am not yet satisfied with how it looks. Will work some more on that later. I also extended the height of the painting so that I can enlarge "The Mother" to make her presence more imposing and creepy at the same time.

Time to retire for the night!

04 April 2006, 04:27 PM
this is a great piece of twisted surreality, i love it and shall be following it closely, just the kind of art that i like to see, original, demented, emotional :-) keep it up!

04 April 2006, 04:42 PM
Arc80: hey Archie! Yeah, I will do something about the lightbeam coming from the lighthouse. Will have to experiment more on that later. Yes, I have seen the trailer for Silent Hill so I think I might have been inspired by it. No, make that motivated instead. I really can't wait to see the movie, but I don't think its going to be screened in Malaysia for quite a while :(.

APHA: Hi there, thanks for dropping by. I have posted at your thread and I hope it is helpful.

ahbeejieh: Thank you! I hope to pull this one off well.

Vitreous: Thanks for your comments!

Time to zzz!

04 April 2006, 05:21 PM (

Working on the Mother, the mountain corpse. Still got more stuff to add on her being. Will continue in the morning. Feeling sleepy and tired....zzzzzz.

04 April 2006, 09:44 PM
I dont know, This picture is so dark and spooky, I hope you dont get nightmares from it!
It's clearly well done, but perheps you can make it a little less disturbing? Maybe a smile on
the woman's face...HO NO! I just made it worse! I'm gonna have my own nightmares!

04 April 2006, 09:50 PM
I love it this dark way! :twisted:

Awesome, very original piece, I realy love it cause It excellently tells realy horrorful story of our lives (at least I interprete it this way :D ) :thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 09:53 PM
Wow, this is really good! I love the atmosphere...very spooky! I also really like the color palette and the fairground in the background- nice touch there!

The only crit is that it doesn't look like the journey is beginning- rather, that he is coming to the end of his journey....

04 April 2006, 10:02 PM
I see story about leaving home.. mother doesn't want to have her little girl leave, but there she goes... hehe I know i missed it :D , but i love the story just as i imagine it to be :cool:

04 April 2006, 07:03 AM (

Full steam ahead! Working on The Mother, the mountain corpse, and The Father , the lighthouse corpse. There's still more props to add such as stone lanterns and deity stones among other things. But right now, I rather finish the important parts of the painting first.

04 April 2006, 07:14 AM
Srulo: No, I won't have nightmares because... I'm a natural *grins EVIL LOOKING GRIN* Bwhahahaha. Yeah, making her smile will make her even more creepy, but.... they are supposed to look shocked and puzzled because after all, the child killer, their own son, killed them. So they have the "why did you do this?" expression. Thanks for your comment!

elgrozni: Ah, a fellow 'natural' *grins EVIL LOOKING GRIN* ! ;) Actually, the child killer is a HE, unless the majority of the people here wants a SHE! The boy is not coming home here because, this place is too weird and scary to be a home. I try to live up to your expectations, though!

paperclip: You may have a point. However, this is really the beginning of the child killer's search for salvation. Like Alice through a looking glass, he entered a world of madness where he has to face off the demons from his past and the ghosts of his victims.

04 April 2006, 08:55 AM
Great updates, Jerome! There are a few little niggles though, mostly with the lighting:

First, I have a feeling that the girl on the boat should be turned around, AWAY from the house. That would reinforce the concept that she is fleeing her home....
Are the corpses supposed to be sad or angry? It's hard to tell.

The woman's face and upturned hand seem to be recieving a different light to the lighthouse and the father corpse's face & hand- the mother's is from 'above' whereas the father's is from the top left (not the top left of the image as it's slanted.)

The father's face looks too bright for where it is- darken it a bit, it'll glow all the more menacingly! :twisted:

Also, the water is recieving none of this light. Is it some sort of ethereal light? Even so, I would expect to see a bit reflected in the water (and lighting up the father's face a bit) Don't forget to add these swirly water reflections on the face!)

Aside from that, VERY nicely detailed! You're really getting there....

Also, thanks for the crits on mine, I changed the building to make it much more functional. Cheers! :thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 09:04 AM
very original. Don't think I understand everything but I like it anyway :)

04 April 2006, 01:22 PM
Hey, Jeromoo, this is looking great! What a bizarre concept - very original.
Paperclip has a good point about the lighting: The sun looks like it's setting on the right, and the whole right side of your image seems to be lit from that... but I can't figure out any of the light sources from the left half.

Also, just as a suggestion, have you considerred turnign the knife-boat upside-down, so the pointy part is on top? It might read more like a knife, and it might also more resemble the prow of a boat that way.

Good luck with it!


04 April 2006, 01:32 PM (

VRROOOMM VRROOOMMM Full steam ahead!

Been working on this all day today. Need to stop now and take a breather! What I've done here is painting the rest of the corpses: The Sister, The Carnival Corpse, and The Baby Brother, the Half-Sunk Corpse. Again, all the corpses are not completed yet as more stuff needs to be added to them.

The Mother's palm 'glows' because the lightbeam from the lighthouse shone on it. I have yet to add that effect. The water area is not completed because there's going to be alot of stuff happening in the water later on, so the water reflection is just a placeholder.

That's it for the night!

04 April 2006, 01:41 PM
Hi Jerome, this piece is looking great! Gets creepier and creepier the more you add. The latest addition is super weird. Lovely work on rendering so far, evrything looks nice and solid. I'd agree perhaps with Walrus' suggestion that you turn the knife-boat upside down so we can see the point of the knife more. Will you be adding some kind of blood trail in the water? That make it more obvious there was something very evil happened to the 'island'. Love the addition of the fairground stuff on the right, that really spooks me out. Good stuff.. keep it up!

04 April 2006, 02:01 PM
Be careful about this funfair big wheel.. It might look too interlaced with that hand, be sure to separate them.
Nice progress :bounce:

04 April 2006, 02:09 PM
I can't sure waht i would like to say on ur progress! U r a speed painting monster now!
This is faster and the details is so charming & delightful!.

I dun know wat happend to the lighting problem. To me, a bizzare abstract art like this, anyhting could happend.
If you keep thinkin how to get thing logically & straight closer to real world, it will be torturing ur mind again.

Maybe u can Fix the light source later on. U are having a very tremendous worthy painting class here.

I like wat u had done so far. No comment only jealousy~.

p/s: btw, i am not in mood to join the contest yet.

04 April 2006, 02:13 PM
This is very different from the rest of the entrys, wich ofcourse is a good thing.
Very creapy, but not that creapy after reading your story.
Have no crits for now. Keep up the good work!

04 April 2006, 02:22 PM
BEST thing to happen to zombies since shawn of the dead!! :bowdown::bowdown:
this just might be my favorite post yet. (sorry 1st angel and walrus)

only crit i can offer is a minor little one that you prob already know about. but if the hand and the head under the ferris wheel are from the same body, then the hand needs to be much further forward. otherwise it's coming out damn near perfect.


PS - i'm definately doing horror for the next challenge. you've called me out. :beer:

04 April 2006, 02:40 PM
I'm posting this from behind my chair- the corpse in the water is the creepiest thing I've ever seen!

This is one of my favorites...quite high up the list, yes indeedy...and I love your detailing! Do you have any tips for me regarding detailing?

04 April 2006, 08:04 PM
i dont really want to critique you on any point (even tho you know aswell as i that there ALLWAYS are things to point out)

i just want to say that this is one of the coolest ideas for a picture i have seen! I
(allmost ^^ ) hope you win!

all that matters is the respect and admiration of fellow artists, wich you allready have earned for my part :)

04 April 2006, 09:35 PM
Man that is pretty grotesque, haha! I think u need some help.:D Having nightmares lately?:rolleyes:

I love it so far, so good! As u have said that there will be some more work on, paint on, rest first then paint on, hehe!:D

04 April 2006, 10:39 PM
This is the scariest entry I've seen. Are all your pictures like this?

It's hard to tell who the victim of the horror is. Should there be a character with blood on his hands about to fall into the lake off the jetty?

The quality of your work is superb. Best of luck.


04 April 2006, 05:14 PM (

I did this step by step specially for Theresa aka Paperclip! :) And also for those of you who are curious about the way I work.

I used custom brushes that I created myself entirely. I usually lay out blocks of colour to shape the object. After that I add some simple details to draw out the shape and design of the object. Next, I added some lighting to enhance the form. When the 3D dimensional appearance has been brought out, I began to lay on the textures with another specially made custom brushes accordingly. Last, but not the least, I touched it up some more and add the final effect.

04 April 2006, 05:25 PM (

My latest update. Now I've cleared up a bit of my light placing problems. There are still more light related matters to attend to, but that will wait for another time!

I've started painting the Knifeboat. Not sure what Michael (Walrus) and Zephyri meant about the knife with its pointed end at the top part. Is what I did the way you meant? Zephyri, I really like the idea of blood trailing from the Knifeboat. Its like the knife is cutting through water as if it is made of flesh. Thanks for such a cool idea!

I thought of having many hands coming up from the surface of the water to push the knifeboat towards the dock. I also thought of making the hand a combination of human hand with Koi fish tail. Should be super weird, no?

elgrozni and anzibon, I fix the parts which you thought are off. Is this version better now?

04 April 2006, 05:52 PM
paperclip: Should the child Killer be a boy or girl? I think I shall hold a vote here! :D Actually I intended for the child killer to enter this world because he/she is seeking his/her own personal salvation. It is here that the child killer will face his/her own demons. That's where the whole journey begins thing come in, courtesy of the KnifeBoat. Haha, Glad you find the Sunken Baby Corpse truly creepy because that's my intention! *grins EVIL LOOKING GRIN* Thanks for really liking my entry, so I dedicated one section on my technique to you!

authentic: Thank you very much! I'll explain the story when I've finished it!

walrus: Thank you, Michael! Check out the KnifeBoat: is that what you mean? Maybe we thinking of a different type of knife here? Fixed the light problem. Will work some more on that later on. Lots of time left!

Zephyri: Thank you! Your blood trail idea is a cool one!! Like it alot! What do you think of the hands in the water by the way?

elgrozni: Fixed the ferris wheel. Alright now? Thanks for pointing that out!

dinodog_Jr: Hahaha. Thanks man! Don't be jealous. Be inspired instead! Now start working on your entry. Your mood will come later :D

Norberg: Yes, you got that right. Creepy on first glance, but once you know the story behind it, things takes on a different emotional note.

anzibon: I love SHAUN OF THE DEAD!!! Funny thing, I didn't think of the corpses as zombies at first. Fixed the hand of the corpse at the funfair. Looks alright to you now?

Bierberg: Thanks so much for your respect! I appreciate it! I hope to continue providing inspirations.

beelow: I didn't have any nightmares whatsoever. Instead, I almost couldn't sleep at all because I'm too excited about continuing this painting! *grins EVIL LOOKING GRIN*

EdP-Art: Thank you! No, the Child Killer will be riding on that KnifeBoat heading towards the dock. The whole piece you see here is where the child killer's journey begins.

Need sleep now or else I turn into one of those corpses.

04 April 2006, 07:38 PM
Dedication just for me! :love: Thanks so much- I really enjoyed seeing that mini tutorial and it was very helpful- thanks a million *runs off to steal technique*... I really appreciate the effort, especially since you're one of my favorite artists on cgtalk (I loved your dragon carriage!).

As for the sex of the murderer, I think a boy would be the less obvious choice (taking into the fact that The Ring and other such movies spurred a female scary heroine trend) but I think it might improve the overall pic if you had a more dramatic body pose- right now, it looks as if he doesn't mind floating towards huge corpse houses at all.....I'd expect at least a tense looking back, even turning away..

I LOVE the hands in the water, fantastic touch there!! :thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 04:08 PM
Nice going, good luck to you.


04 April 2006, 05:32 PM (

I have made some changes to the props on the top of The Baby's head. My colleague at work pointed out that the previous one doesn't fit well into the picture. So I modified it into some kind of navigational buoy. I think it makes perfect sense to have a buoy on the head of the sunken corpse because it is out in the sea, in front of the lighthouse, guiding the the KnifeBoat to the dock. You can see that I still retain the Stone Lantern by assimilating it into the structure of the buoy itself.

04 April 2006, 05:55 PM
Great idea, except it doesn't really look like a buoy, but more like some sort of tripod for something...? However, that could be regional. I'd suggest adding red and white stripes around the base to make it clearer what it is.

Aside from that, great work!

04 April 2006, 06:25 PM
this "buoy" reminds me a liittle bit at the old coal-towers here in germany.

Maybe its an idea to make it a little bit more like this. Crazy idea to put a coal-tower on a corpse head :)

04 April 2006, 06:31 PM
Hehe that seems cool as hell! bouy works better!;)

04 April 2006, 06:40 PM
hi Jerome, I really like your's very nice, in a creepy kind of way. Excellent paint job too. However, I think that it might benefit from some cropping, as the left edge feels a bit empty and is leading the eye out of the is the top and bottom, just a bit. Keep it up dude! :)

04 April 2006, 08:46 PM
man your work is insane (in a very good way)

i love horror themes and you made a real good one but the hardest part about your picture is understanding the beginning of a journey its not very clear.

but awesome concept awesome work (im saying this for each of your threads)

good luck:buttrock:

i'll be watching your every thread:)

04 April 2006, 08:59 PM
wow........... just wow. im totally in love with this one :). the new update you did is really great and the use of colours too.

soooooo creepy and great :).

my only crit is the mens hand. the womans hand is so illuminated by the lighthouse but the back of the mans hand isnt at all. maybe you should highlight it a bit more to fit it better in the piece and give it a better contrast.

keep up this awesome work :). will subscribe now :)

04 April 2006, 04:30 AM
very cool surreal image man. keep up the outstanding work.


04 April 2006, 04:46 AM
holy cow! this is an incredible piece already! keep it up!

ramy badie
04 April 2006, 05:01 PM
This is hands down my favorite entry in this challenge, The concept is absolutely awesome, I am so excited about this one. The lighting is perfect, as are the color choices and composition. Just wonderful work, good luck with this one.

04 April 2006, 09:25 PM

Incredibly original! I can't wait to see the final.

04 April 2006, 04:52 PM (

Blocking out the Child Killer. I always like to work quickly, trying to establish the pose and composition in one shot.

04 April 2006, 04:58 PM (

I spent the WHOLE day today trying to get as much done as humanly possible. Here, I've completed the Child Killer, the KnifeBoat and the many corpse hands that push the boat. I've added some new things like the fog and tweaked the sky a bit. Oh, I modified the Buoy Corpse as well. I wonder if this new version is any better?

I'm thinking whether or not I want to add some crows and paperboats carrying candles. Crows signify death and paperboats that carry candles.. not sure if this is right, signify sending the souls of the departed to heaven.

Man, I'm so exhausted now. Oh by the way, I just got myself a DS lite and I'm enjoying Animal Crossings: Wild World! :D

04 April 2006, 05:06 PM
wow jeromoo this is quite an interesting approach you have here! i like the overall look. i'll be sure to check up on ur progress from now on

04 April 2006, 05:13 PM
WOW... this is the wierdest thing I have ever seen! It has an awesome mood and a creepy aura, what more could you want? FANTASTIC!!!

Good luck!

04 April 2006, 05:40 PM
I wish I had a house like that O_O. I suppose my only crit is that upon first glance it's hard to read as a journey, but the fact that you did something so different makes this peice stand out a lot. Fantastic job my friend. ;)

04 April 2006, 05:41 PM
paperclip: Hey Theresa, no problem about helping you out! Not a big deal, really, Thanks also for liking my lion dog painting. In fact, you will see it in Expose 4! :D Alright, I have finally settled on a BOY for the gender of the Child Killer. I've also improved on the body pose. How do you like this new version? The many hands are killing me in terms of painting them! I thought of adding more hands but I am too tired now. haha :P

APHA: howdy, I've commented on your thread already. As usual, I hope you find it useful.

paperclip: How's the latest buoy look now? The red and white stripes as you suggested. Is it working?

wueste: Whoah, coal tower? I found the ref for my buoy by googling "old buoy". Most of the buoy doesn't have the shape I want (tripod like shape) except the ones used for tsunami detection. I found one perfect ref of it, but this ref shows the buoy resting on land and used as an historical artifact or some sort so I guess it is not used anymore. All in all, I still need a tripod like buoy... gotta take some creative license here :P

beelow: Yeah, thanks!

Pat-Piper: Thanks for the advice! When I finished everything, I will see if cropping is still necessary because I always keep adding stuff in.

individium: I guess you might be right about whether or not the theme is apparent in this picture. Even my brother asked me that! But I am sure that this is the way I want. The boy killer is brought to this strange morbid place, to face his own demons, revisit the crimes of his past, find his reasoning and ultimately seek his own salvation. That is a form of psychological journey.

Llynna: Thank you very much for your kind comments! :) I haven't added in the backlighting on The Father's hand because i usually put proper lighting and shadows at the very last stage of painting. But thanks for pointing that out in case.

Slav: Thanks man!

gigantron2999: Thanks to you too, mate!

ramy badie: That's high praise indeed! So thank you! I am having alot of fun with this concept and painting. That to me is very important.

OliveBeard: Thank you. I am nearing final now. Don't hesitate to give me some more ideas! :)

cok3: Thank you!

Mason Roberts: Thank you very much. What more could I want? I can't think right now... my brain is too tired. Need sleep...zzzz. All I want is to make a really cool painting so that I can have a new wallpaper for my office PC. :D Now you see why all my paintings have the wallpaper-like size. :D


HAPPY EASTER to you, everyone!

04 April 2006, 06:06 PM
I cant believe someone who paints stuff like this actually likes to play "Animal Crossing" on their DS :P Hehe... Kidding aside... You max out the freak factor with this man. This is just rocking with everything in it.

Some suggestions that's just based on personal taste: It might be cool to get it a bit darker... Kinda hide those faces a bit to shock the viewers when they realize that those things are heads that's kinda hidden in the dark. They're looking a bit too "revealed" for me. The overall mood looks a bit friendly too in contrast to it's visual elements.

But you know what? I look at it again, and it looks great already... I think it's the light on that lighthouse that's bothering me. It kinda doesnt serve a purpose since it's still bright outside for that thing to be turned on. Yep. That's it.

04 April 2006, 06:14 PM
Congrats on the EXPOSE 4 entry! I also entered ( :blush: ) but obviously didn't get in- tis all because of youuuuu!! Seriously though, I really loved it and I'm pleased that it's been recognised like that!

Your latest update is fantastic- I really like the buoy (pun on boy? either way, I like it!), love the way the red and white is coming out through the hair, maybe a bit more hair would be better though, keep the red and white, I recognise it much better now.

The hands are really turning out wonderfully. I think you should put little trails in the water behind them though, it'd also lighten up that area a bit.

Also, I would try to make the silhouette of the boy's hand/knife clearer to see- at first, I thought his hand WAS a knife. Separate the colors a bit more?

Aside from that............NO CRITS. To be honest, I'm envious! You've put a fantastic piece together in such a short period of time. I really, really hope you place.

04 April 2006, 06:39 PM
Looks great Jeromoo, I love the buoy boy. It looks like it's planted in his head with blood uusing out. With the knife boy in now the story is coming together. it looks like a winner to me.


04 April 2006, 11:31 AM
very interesting stuff. I like how sharp everything is turning.
Good work even though its hard to understand :thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 01:01 PM
:eek:shocking work man!:eek:

one update and it gives the journey feeling now, your update makes me want a movie for this one no an anime or an adventure game with the taste of silent hill and suffering,:scream:

it looks finished already and needs an award man:thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 04:02 PM
You just started playing Animal Crossing? OH NO! Now we'll never see Jeromoo again! So much for this painting being finished... :)

This is looking great! That smoke on the water, the sky, the hands... it's all wow!

The comment I made before about the knifeboat that you didn't quite understand: Don't worry about it, you did it.

I thoroughly agree with Theresa's comment about the screen-left arm of the boy on the boat - i though his arm was cut off and replaced by a knife. And in this painting that wouldn't be out of place. If that wasn't your intent, the silhouette of that arm is too foreshortened to read clearly.
There's no motion to the boat of the hands. Is that intentional? I would have expected the boat to be moving towards the dock, perhaps propelled by the hands. Which would fit the Journey theme. But then the water would have motion and ripples to it. Now it seems a bit still.

Lastly, I love the glassy stares of the two heads on the main island. Have you considerred making the buoy-boy's eyes be similar? It might look more thematically consistant (and creepy.) Just an idea.

Anyhow, this is looking great. Hope we see you again... Good luck on the turnip market! :)


04 April 2006, 04:17 PM
I just thought of something jeramoo, you could add some bats in the background O_O maybe flying around the boy. I don't know, it just poped into my head, but probably makes no sense.

04 April 2006, 05:18 PM (

Michael, you were half right! Animal Crossings nearly cost me a day's of touch ups, but know what? My willpower is BIG enough to put me back to this painting and add new stuff and make some necessary corrections accordingly. :P

the new stuffs are: The paper lanterns on the water. They signify sending the souls of the departed to heaven. On each of the lanterns is a kanji stating the identity of the one who passed away. So here, the blue one represents The Father, the first destination the Child Killer will go to. The Mother, the red lantern, where he should visit next. The Sister, the orange lantern, at the Carnival, and finally on the way back, he needs to face his Younger Brother, the yellow lantern.

The Water Trails: Thanks to Theresa (Paperclip) and Mike (Walrus), the water trails at the KnifeBoat are added to better result.

The Eyes of the Buoy-Boy: Thanks to Walrus, he got his eyes back!

New Stuff:
-The Mother's shadowy form in front of the opened door at the House.

I think I need to stop adding more stuff in. Getting crowded there already!

04 April 2006, 05:55 PM
CoreyArtE: Why would you want a house like that? :) I hope in the end, the theme will show through enough. Thank you very much for your kind comments, my friend!

ahbeejieh: I need something like Animal Crossings to balance my mind! :P Hahaha. I thought my piece is already too dark overall. I rather not go overboard with the dark tones in case some monitors see it differently from mine. Here I go for the acceptable tone. Hope you understand. You are right about the lighthouse! Too bright. I've dimmed it down (forgot to mention it in my changes list, sorry). Thanks for pointing that out!

paperclip: Thank you very much! I'm sure your turn will come! Work hard and believe in yourself! I've corrected the Knife Boy's hand. Is it much clearer now? If not, I'll try again!
I've added the trails as you suggested. Thanks for that! I had to finish this as soon as possible. I foresee a very busy time ahead for me!

EdP_Art: Thank you very much!

Falcor_: Hard to understand? I think Asian cultures are naturally like that. Bwahaha

individium: Thank you! Actually I did think of making a graphic novel about this story! Seriously! I got the whole story planned out and it would be such a shame to waste it. Now only if I can find the time... *sigh* Thanks again!

walrus: On the Contrary, here's an update! :D Man, Animal Crossings is so addictive! I fished most of the time. In one day I've managed to pay off my home mortgage and made a few thousand Bells more and donated a massive fish collection to the museum! :D Whee, collecting is so addictive! Give me some tips on the turnip market! What is the best price to buy and to sell? Oh, back to the original topic: I did all what you suggested. Do they look okay now especially the boy's arm. (That's the biggest problem I've faced thus far)

CoreyArtE: Haha man. Bats are too westernized for this picture. I think of Batman everytime. :P But thanks for the idea! Keep it coming.

Goodnight and good morning to the people on the other side of the world!

04 April 2006, 06:04 PM
Hmm, I don't really like the lanterns... It feels like too much? It's cluttering the image! Maybe try and get them in some other way, but I would just leave them out!

Still I am loving the image!!

Good work!:)

04 April 2006, 08:47 PM
wow nice ! i dont really understand the concept behind this though......

my journey

04 April 2006, 09:08 PM
You're getting seriously close now, Jerome!
Here are a few things that I can notice:

- The boy's hand looks better, but I think you should turn his hand up at the wrist to make it clearer that it's a hand with a knife in it...

- The lanterns would look a bit better if they were smaller overall and with a bit more perspective, if you get my meaning?

It's looking really, really good aside from that! Go, liondogboy, go! :applause:

04 April 2006, 11:16 PM
Wow I really like your image, looks very strange and interesting. It's a very strong idea. I'm agree with paperclip about the lanterns.
What's the story??
Very complicated jouney!

04 April 2006, 04:12 AM
Oh gosh~~jeromoo... How could u.......

..not borrow me ur Nitendo DS!~~~..(hee.. olrite, just getting funky on u..)

All the way i find in this piece is incredible well done. I appreciated the Latern light simple tutorial too!.

Ok a little words for ur current masterpiece. If u dun mind at all.
Is der a hand crawling on the funFair? Maybe u can lift up the palm above to let it looks more like a living hand.
The waves beneath tos struggling hands on the kid need to be clarify. It looks like Root something.
Oh. wat is dat chinese character means which pronounced as "Nu" on the orange paper latern?(only chinese can understand this.)
Paint tos eyesball more whitish glow or darken (like Ju-On's boy). it could looks scary abit.
The Ear seems misplace & closer to the eyes.(The reddish Latern-Tower head)

dat's what i can suggest so far.
Maybe that giant hand can holding a pumping fleshing heart..hehe.. I know u dun wan to add things anymore.. Just flashing through my mind.

p/s: I'm really into this one. This is indeed inspired & motivate me to keep on "scratching" my wacom tablet now. Here is a Very excellent spirit from ya!

04 April 2006, 06:17 AM
i love this a lot. very..very..very..awesome brotha. :thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 11:14 AM
ok, now the hand is looking awesome and integrated :). it is a way to do it of course, i mean putting the lightning in last :) just wanted to point it out to you.

as for the update, the knifeboat is looking great and the boy too. the only thing that is disturbing me are the new laters on the water. some how they are distracting the eye, maybe cause of the colors. they are so bright and stick out of the rest of the colorscheme you used especially on the mother and faster in the back.

eagerly awaiting your next update :)

04 April 2006, 05:08 PM (

Hi all, I have made some minor improvements here! This is to be my last update for now because the dreaded Busy Time is upon me! But that doesn't necessarily mean that I won't tweaked it anytime because we still have (at the moment of writing) 40 days, 7 hours, 4 minutes, and 56 seconds left! :D That's a lot of time to kill.

Okay, back to the topic. I have tried my best to fix the paper lanterns problem by pushing them to the distance away from the foreground and dimmed them down too. I also fixed the Knife Boy's hand according to Theresa's (Paperclip) suggestion. Llynna and pointed out the mistake in the water area, so I fixed that too. My colleagues and friends alike also helped to give me some harsh crits about some areas of the painting, which I fixed too. Here I added in 4 crows in the distance perched on the hand of the Father. I'm sure you know what the numbers meant and why they are there!

I have enough of it for now. Working on it too much may ruin it in the end, so I decide to leave it alone now.

A BIG THANK YOU to all of you who have gave me so much valuable feedbacks to make this a better piece. I shall continue to bug you all at your threads too :D. All the best!

04 April 2006, 05:10 PM (

Hi all, I have made some minor improvements here! This is to be my last update for now because the dreaded Busy Time is upon me! But that doesn't mean that I won't be able to tweak it some more because we still have (at the moment of writing) 40 days, 7 hours, 4 minutes, and 56 seconds left! :D That's a lot of time to kill.

Okay, back to the topic. I have tried my best to fix the paper lanterns problem by pushing them to the distance away from the foreground and dimmed them down too. I also fixed the Knife Boy's hand according to Theresa's (Paperclip) suggestion. Llynna and pointed out the mistake in the water area, so I fixed that too. My colleagues and friends alike also helped to give me some harsh crits about some areas of the painting, which I fixed too. Here I added in 4 crows in the distance perched on the hand of the Father. I'm sure you know what the numbers meant and why they are there!

I have enough of it for now. Working on it too much may ruin it in the end, so I decide to leave it alone for now.

A BIG THANK YOU to all of you who have given me valuable feedbacks to make this a better piece. I shall continue to bug you all at your threads too :D. All the best with your entries, fellas!

04 April 2006, 05:16 PM
HUH DOUBLE POST? I tried to edit my post and got a double post??? Can a moderator come delete the earlier post?

04 April 2006, 05:50 PM
Mason Roberts: you are right, the paper lanterns was rather distracting and gave a very cluttered feeling. Still I want to keep them there for story reasons. So to compromise, I made them smaller and faded.

omer-n: Thanks! I will write a story on this one in due time.

paperclip: fixed the hand, i think it has more dynamic than the previous version. Thanks so much for the idea. The paper lantern suggestion has been tested and I like it. Thanks again! :D Liondogboy? Sounds cool.. maybe I change my avatar to liondogboy one day. Good idea too :P

snowan: thank you! Yeah, it is a complicated story but very simple at the same time too.

dinodog_Jr: Haha, go get your own DS Lite and then we can network! I'll beat you at Mario kart DS ;). Glad you find the mini tutorial useful. Oops, I meant to include you in the "Llynna and (dinodog_Jr) pointed out the mistake in the water area" sentence. Sorry! I fixed the water and I hope it looks better now. nah, I don't want glowing eyes. Like the way they are now. Thanks. Sure, pick up your wacom and start working on your entry! :D

henryzjetsam: hey kien. Thanks!

Llynna: Thank you very much for your inputs! I feel the water is better now. I am waiting for your updates too!

Time to sleep!

04 April 2006, 06:09 PM
Hmmm, the lanterns should be a little more washed out and also the last two should have some shadows from the jetty overhead... I love the crows, they are fantastic!!

Good work!

04 April 2006, 06:43 PM
"Busy Time is upon me!"
Is that what you're calling Animal Crossing now?

These are some good changes. Those birds look great! I like the lanterns better in the background more. The water by the hands is looking nice too. It's not totally looking like water on the right side... maybe some more specular hilights would help that?

The arm with the knife is harder to read than in the previous post: Before the hilights on the knife and hand were on a dark background, and now they coincide with the hilight on that wall behind them, making them not stand out so much. I also think that having that hand with the knife in that position is a little awkward: Seems like he's got the knife handle just inches from his nose! :)

Aside from those notes, nothing else to add: You're almost done. Good for you! :thumbsup:


04 April 2006, 07:24 PM
this is looking really good. Terrifying idea. its a journey i wouldn't like to go on! the lanterns look alot less distracting now. The water around the hands looks to me like plant roots or veins rather than ripples. I understand the difficulty of painting these detials though. Great stuff, and very well painted. good luck.

04 April 2006, 07:30 PM
wow. i wish i was that fast (im so damn slow, you wont believe it). now the laterns look right and fit in the pic without destracting the viewer. i do agree with walrus about the arm of the boy though, its gotten more hard to read than before. im really positive you can work that out :)

expect some update later (tomorrow for you).

04 April 2006, 08:10 PM
i must say that i liked the lanters in their first place and didn't get it why people didnt like it .they make the place more chaotic like an amusement park in hell. that was totally cool.
their new place looks good still but they look too 2d like a paper or a flag or smthng else.
and crows rock:buttrock: i love crows everywhere so im happy to see them here too.

other than that youre one of my favourites:thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 03:11 PM (

Tweaks, tweaks and more tweaks. Is it better? You decide! I've dimmed the hightlight on the rocks behind the KnifeBoy. Tweaked the water area too.

Thanks for helping to push me onwards!

04 April 2006, 03:21 PM
The water looks fantastic, the boy looks great aswell! You don't suppose we can see the whole image as a whole now do you?


Loving your work! :thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 03:29 PM
You know, I don't think I ever noticed the girl in the amusement park before. My bad... not paying enough attention. Looks great.

As for all the new changes, they all help to make the piture real more clearly now. It's hard to be 100% sure without seeing the whole thing al together, but I'd say you were done.

(of course, someone will spot something else. But not me for a change! :) )

Nicely done.


04 April 2006, 03:54 PM (

"No Peace Within: The Journey Begins"

Here's the final colouring for you (Walrus, and MasonRoberts especially) to inspect! Please let this be the end... LOL.

I am going to spend the rest of the time writing a good story for it!

04 April 2006, 04:06 PM
I love it!!! FANTASTIC!! The story is complex yet mesmerising and the colours capture the mood VERY well... You will win a award easily with this piece!

Now for the crits... hahaha! :) Now I am being VERY fussy, but the ripples behind the hands pushing the boy look as if they are not following the direction of the knife boat... They need to be more direct to the jetty, you could do this simply with the selection tool and tranform tool, but that was one thign that was annoying me a bit!! It just was dragging my focus away!

But either way I love what you have done!! This is a very interesting piece and I aspire to paint like you one day! Fantastic work! :thumbsup:

Edit: I'm acctually not sure if thats what is distracting to me, but there is something there that is wrong in my mind, maybe it needs a little adjusting like I said... Not sure?? Hopefully someone else can spot it...?

04 April 2006, 05:01 PM
Brilliant concept and execution. I'm glad I saw this, just wish I had seen it earlier :D Can't really comment on anything... It's simply great and creepy and a lovely twisted idea. Great job!

04 April 2006, 05:47 PM (

Sorry guys, MasonRoberts just pointed out a very good crit about the water which I fixed immediately. Here's the final colouring again. (Please let this be the last...)

Sorry for the almost manic updating impulsiveness. I really really want to finalise this because its been driving me nutters lately. Any no, its not because of Animal Crossings, Walrus, The Busy Time has started for me! :)

04 April 2006, 05:57 PM
Ahhh that's easier on the eyes! I'm loving it even more now!! I can't wait to read the story...:drool:

P.S. Your style of painting reminds me of the Goosebump book covers! hahaha :p

Good work!!

04 April 2006, 08:32 PM
Incredible pic, the lighting is amazing and the choice of color very nice. I really like this pic. Good job:thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 09:15 PM
really beautiful work :drool:

04 April 2006, 10:19 PM
That last update on the water finishes it off nicely. The water did look like tree roots but now it's lovely. I like the guy in the fairground he a bit clearer and the guy in the rocks is probably the scariest.

Well done Jeromoo, it's definatly a winner.


04 April 2006, 03:37 AM
Mason Roberts: Thank you very much for your great inputs. Your harsh critiques has really helped to push me one step better. So do the rest of the guys here!

walrus: how could you not have noticed the girl at the fairground section? She's practically staring right at you! :D I'm done? Yay, I'm done, Wot! Thank you for your help!

Mason Roberts: Thank you very much again. I know we will always be fussy with our work. But this time I think enough is enough. Time to move on to other things!

urgaffel: Hi there and thanks! Don't worry about that! Nothing is ever too late.

Mason Roberts: I used to read Goosebumps, but that was so long time ago. (Don't get any ideas, Walrus) :)

MDN67: Thank you, Laurent!

CodeNothing: Thank you!

EdP_Art: Thank you for your comments. Its nice to hear which Corpse you like. Looks like different people here likes different types and you can sort of see their personality by that! ;)

04 April 2006, 06:37 AM
Woah.. Final work! Waht a progress~..

Oh..i won't get nitendo DS. Somehow,i kinda like Nitendogs~. Hmm.. i am not dat solitude to play wif virtual dogs yet.
PSP would be my lovely gadget if i am goin to own a portable game console.
Maybe u can show-off ur skills in mario one day in gathering.

I appreaciated the water ripples wif tos struggling crowded hands now. Lovely job!.

Personally, for tos who understand Chinese. Tos Colorized floating laterns could be meaningful to this piece of art. It gives me a broken/either a sadly but warmful Family story behind this piece. Tos laterns could depicts Heaven's soul from his family to protect this Lonely child in this creepy journey~.
Let Jeroome kick in..
Shuddup, dino!..Oops..i did it again~baby.

Ok. pls tell me my imagination is Out of this world!.haha..
U got it, Jeroomo~

Now, go back to ur Nitendo DS~!. and forget everything i said here.

04 April 2006, 07:23 AM
Congrats on being done! I really don't have any crits....I mean, it looks fantastic to me.

:bowdown: :arteest:

04 April 2006, 08:24 AM
it's a winner all right, now go have some Easter eggs. :applause:


04 April 2006, 03:07 PM
great work!!
theres a great amount of detailing in this one...
like the dark muddy colours...they match the surreal theme very well :)

with some strong light sources as you have you might want to think about some shadows in the water to the right of the boy (blue tint), aslo shadows cast from the giant hand...and oround the back of the head bouy thinngy (dunno what to call it might really help

but its really come along very fast and i think its a very job very well done :)

04 April 2006, 05:28 PM
If this picture were a cottage, I'd rent it for the summer! :)

I love gritty, dark, horror-film-esque style of this piece. I think the judges are going to have to take multiple looks at this one.

The piece also draws me in; you have so many subtle details that I spent more time than I should have (I'm at work) staring at it. That's never a bad quality for a piece to have.

Thanks again for your comments!

04 April 2006, 10:55 PM
thats surely it!
i surely will want one print of this one

i think you should be the winner, no i should be, no you should be... :P :D

and now we wait for the graphic novel:)

and the movie :P:buttrock:

04 April 2006, 03:44 PM
Excellent image! Love your lighting and detail work. Congratulations on finishing and good luck to you!

04 April 2006, 04:42 PM
I agree with Samanthie .. nice work and good luck

04 April 2006, 12:07 AM
Excellent work :applause:, a definite five star piece and the image has a nice gory story to go with it. But there's one thing that bugs me, I was looking at the closeup and noticed the boys right hand (which is holding the knife) seemed a little bit on the small side to me, I'm not sure if i'm just imagining it though.

Anyway congrats on a great piece.

04 April 2006, 12:48 PM (

I managed to find a bit of time to tweak the painting even further! Had some very good tips from a good friend on how to make this piece even better! I hope this time the KnifeBoat looks like it is really moving compared with the previous version.
Corrected The Father's hand as well.

Higher res version for your closer inspection.

04 April 2006, 01:10 PM
dinodog_Jr: Hello there, yeah you got it right about the paper lanterns! In the real life (not the twisted reality the KnifeBoy is in) he himself is the one who put the paper lanterns into the river. Now he has come back there and the paper lanterns is to signify that he is reliving the past. Nah, your imagination is right in tune with mine only mine is more grotesque. hahaha

paperclip: Thank you always!

EdP-Art: Thank you for liking my piece!

Cyberone: Thanks for the suggestion. I do not want to overdo the use of shadows in this painting because it is dark enough. I prefer to finish a painting as quickly as possible then wait a while.. and come back to fix it. If I paint too slowly I might lose motivation somewhere in the middle. Thanks again!

OliveBeard: Thank you. Haha, if you want to rent it you gotta kill someone (ermmm.. forget what I said :P). I love to put in details that help to tell the story.

individium: My mind is considering the possibility of making a graphic novel. In fact, I am thinking of the story plots. hope it will happen!!

Samanthie: Thank you!

abourabe: thank you too!

RedSquirrel: Thanks for visiting my thread! I know the boy's hand is small because asian boys' hands are small (at least mine is :P) At the same time, he is gripping the knife really tightly so it looks smaller. Thanks again!

04 April 2006, 05:39 PM (

Sorry, just spotted something wrong with the water again (AGAIN?!), so another fix here. The previous high res posted earlier has also been updated.

04 April 2006, 08:05 PM
wow Jerome! good work. Lot's going on and a lot to look at. My only suggestion at this point would be develop the contrast on the figure at the bottom left. My eye starts the intense light then moves to the light smaller hand then to the other light on the left then to the large hand. i seem to be moving past boy on the rght. Just a bit more contrast to solve that. Excellent work!

04 April 2006, 10:53 PM
I like your concept idea and realisation is wonderful, really gives creeps looking at it, reminds me grudge movie, brr... keep it up, this one is interesting

04 April 2006, 11:44 PM
My hat is off to you ! an amazing imaginative composition . . . very complicated and surprisingly well executed. Perhaps a highlight or glint on the edge of the knife might help tie it all together more . . .


04 April 2006, 04:32 AM
Sorry, just spotted something wrong with the water again (AGAIN?!), so another fix here. The previous high res posted earlier has also been updated.

I personally liked it when the boat was just gliding into the jetty and only being guided by the hands, this seems too rough for what is happening!

Good luck! :thumbsup:

04 April 2006, 07:15 AM (

More touch-ups according to the kind critics of cgtalk! :)

SideAche: you are right about the eye always passing the buoy boy to the far left. So i tried your suggestion and upped the contrast on him a little. I hope this time he looks a little nearer to the viewer and stand out just enough to draw some interest. Thanks for a great crit!

MasonRoberts: I see your point. The action of the fast moving boat doesn't seem to fit in the still silent feel of the overall scene. So i tone it down a bit but still giving it a sense of movement because, you know, other people commented that it looks like it isn't moving at all! So here I put half of both! Hard to give people what they want. LOL!

Elrond56: I like your suggestion. A little glint/bloom on the edge of the knifes!

CryingHorn: Thank you. Inspired by those Japanese Horror movies, no doubt!

A new closeup for your inspection. Please compare this with the previous version and let me know which works best before I submit the absolute final image!

04 April 2006, 11:01 AM
I think it's done! I bet your glad I said that! hahahaha :thumbsup: Good work, this piece is definatly a winner!

04 April 2006, 11:10 AM

the image you are doing is very fitting to an asian thriller movie poster. you did a good job on this. goodluck

04 April 2006, 11:51 AM
The only, only thing i can see that doesn't look quite right is the fairground corpse's hand...

I hope you've cleared a space for your prize at home......

04 April 2006, 02:27 PM
The only, only thing i can see that doesn't look quite right is the fairground corpse's hand...

I hope you've cleared a space for your prize at home......

I agree, but despite it not looking perfect I think it blends in with the image well... You could even say it makes it even more eerie, because of her dislocated arm! :scream:

04 April 2006, 05:57 PM
I agree, but despite it not looking perfect I think it blends in with the image well... You could even say it makes it even more eerie, because of her dislocated arm! :scream:

That's true!

04 April 2006, 03:14 AM
I agree, but despite it not looking perfect I think it blends in with the image well... You could even say it makes it even more eerie, because of her dislocated arm! :scream:

Yes, exactly the effect I am trying to go for. I don't want to make the fairground corpse's pose natural at all. If you look at all the other corpses, the top of their heads is gone and replaced by some kind of structure. Hers is a big circus tent where the hand comes out of. I want to evoke the feeling of "What's wrong with her, what happened to her to make her look like that?". So there's nothing wrong with that part, rest assured it is purely intentional and that perfect anatomy was never meant to come into play for her as it was for the others.

MasonRoberts: one word "Yeah!!" I'm glad you pointed that out. It looks so nicer now! :D Thanks lots!

paperclip: yep! and thank you very much for your vote of confidence. Same to the rest of you guys!

Yay, I'm officially done! All the best to the rest of you!

04 April 2006, 03:47 AM
Glad to help! But one final thing....

Hahaha, you must submit your image as a Final Image! We don't wan't this piece not to be entered into the challenge! :thumbsup:

Good luck and well done! :scream:

04 April 2006, 09:56 AM
C O N G R A T U L A T I O N S, J E R O M E !!!

You've produced a beautiful piece of artwork, you must be very proud! I'd say it'll be one of the, go submit it and relax for the next few months!

:thumbsup: :applause:

How do you feel.....inside?? Like this?

If not......good! :thumbsup:

Seriously though, go pat yourself on the back and treat yourself to something nice.

04 April 2006, 08:19 AM
Excuse me, but I do believe that you need a tiny God-ray in there somewhere in order to enter our 'God-ray Club.'

04 April 2006, 08:51 AM
Dude hats off, awesome picture, especially the full res. No crits, would love to see that image in motion! great job man =)

04 April 2006, 09:53 AM
excellent stuff, such a nightmare that even I wouldnt like to have :) Ur imagination is just beyond and u should make a movie about this theme.. or at least sell the rights for ur idea and ur concepts.. Im sure I would go watch it, hehe... the latest update works fine with me, so u may submit ur final image if u ask me. best regards and good luck!

04 April 2006, 10:11 AM
:) Great Work Jerome

very atmospheric and very creepy. - great lighting and style

Love the sketches and development also :) :)

04 April 2006, 03:18 PM
Hi all, I have yet to submit my final image because I am trying to write a story for it. Maybe a poem to go with it? I will definitely submit it next week!

Mason_Roberts: Hahaha, nice try! Thank you for all your valuable crits and support again!

paperclip:WAHAHA, you sure express well with pictures! Seriously I feel tremendously relieved for having finished this challenge! Last challenge I couldn't find the time, but now I have all the time which is a good thing! :) Thank you so much for your support!
What? I have to put a god ray to be a member of your The God-Rays Club? Does the lighthouse beam count? Hey, its like a god-ray, only horizontally :D. Does it count? Am I a member yet?

adonihs: Thank you mate! Yeah, I asked my friend a 3d modeller to build this in 3d and maybe animated... but he has become a newly-minted father, so he has no time at all
to do it! :(

NinjaA55N: Hey there, pal. Thanks for helping me to confirm it as a truly final image! Haha, I want to turn it into a graphic novel if possible. A full photoshop painted graphic novel! Its a big task, man... hmmmm

MrFreeman: Thank you! I thought my sketches suck, but glad someone doesn't think so!

04 April 2006, 04:06 PM
Don't worry about the god-ray club just yet, I should point out that even Theresa isn't an official member yet, having not put them in her piece either!

(and I'm only a partial member, having put them in my comp but not my final. I'd better get that done soon so I can be king of the god-ray club!)


04 April 2006, 05:10 PM
Awesome Picture. The only thing i dont like is the Knifeboat. I think a simple casket would be better. But this is just my Opinion and a very very little Critique.

Great work. Greatings,

04 April 2006, 08:49 PM
Very nice composition with too much objects. Good | :eek: | feeling to watch the scene... I wanted to say, the biggest hand has some problems about shape and anathomy. Actually it is the biggest object and it must be the perpect one i thought...


04 April 2006, 09:18 PM
hrmph, mike, just cause I don't have God-rays yet doesn't mean I'm not a potential (associate?) member of the God-ray club!

As for horizontal God-rays: (consults club chapter book) : It says here that it's ok, as far as the light house is somehow possessed. I guess having corpses in the picture means that the light house could be spiritual, thereby becoming God-rays. It would appear that Jerome is the first member of the God-Ray Club (GRC) and so has primal rights! He's the king of the God-Ray club now. (sorry Mike!)

All hail the King!

04 April 2006, 02:09 AM
Hmmm... so what is this god ray club? I can add a god ray hehe, in my image, well, I am going to do it!:arteest:

Did u intend the compo to do this x thing? I've noticed that in this image! Good stuff though!:beer:

04 April 2006, 07:06 AM
I've remembered the old computer game "Sanitarium". There was a chapter just like this image. A child in a doomed funfair! and blood sea with corpses in. This is not a difficult scene to remember, it was very affective like this one.

04 April 2006, 11:17 AM
Wow jeremoo, congrats on finishing with such an awesme image! I second the idea of it being animated, even though you'd never get me to watch it.. this still is creeping me out as it is. The hands grabbing at the boy are the freakiest thing for me here... I have this odd fear of things grabbing me in water, so thats way too creepy! The rendering and lighting is awesome. And needless to say I don't think I'd ever want a peek into your brain, it must be a frightening vision! :applause:

04 April 2006, 02:26 PM
Nice :)
Love the details - the tilted perspective conveys the chaos of the scene quite effectively. Excellent work.

05 May 2006, 04:07 PM
wah, i love the idea behind the picture and how it developed. could be directly arisen from a japanese horror movie.

just two points:
- i dont see a movement of the raising chars. if you would add falling earth, stones, shingles from the ground and houses lift up, the idea would look clearer.
- the hands grabbing at the boy look the same. i see mostly the same open handposition just rotated. i would like to see stronger variations on them.....if it was 3d i would say it is just a cheap copy/paste job :)

nevertheless it is one of the strongest paintings in this contest....

05 May 2006, 05:09 PM (

No Peace Within

I have committed the greatest and vilest of sin:
I have brutally tortured and murdered my kin.
My being is stained with their blood under my skin,
And my soul will not rest for I have no peace within.

A giant knife carries me through the sea of blood,
Many dead hands push me past the sickening flood.
I am brought to a place built on the bodies of my kin,
They brought me there for I have no peace within.

I tried to resist with the knife in my bloodstained hand,
The corpses of my family persuading me to land,
While the crows mock me to wear my dignity thin,
My heart is already broken for I have no peace within.

I know I am here for all the things I have done,
I have come here to revisit my crimes one by one.
They are waiting for answers to redeem me for my sin,
Lest I fail, I shall never have any peace within…

This is a story about a boy who murdered his whole family. He bordered on insanity and to save him, the ghosts of his family whom he killed, brought him to this strange world made up of their own corpses. There, he will revisit his past and its connection to his crimes in order to solve the question of his intention to kill each member of the family. Along the way he will face his own demons and his journey to salvation is only beginning.

05 May 2006, 05:28 PM
It turned out to be an extraordinary painting. It really makes you feel something, though partly twisted :twisted:... Nice touch with the song, getting poetic from the lack of sleep? :thumbsup:

05 May 2006, 05:34 PM
all celebrating you

wonderful artwork and a masterpiece!

i'll join the god-rays club too, if necessary i'll put rays to my work too:P ;)

05 May 2006, 05:59 PM
First off, my apologies to you guys for taking so long to promptly thank and reply your kindest remarks and valuable crits!
Wahahaha, so I am made the King of "The God-Rays Club"! Now for our club motto, its "Always Be God-Rayed!" Neat eh? hahahaha. (Just Kidding)

walrus: hehehe, too bad I'm made the King! But don't worry, I'll make you my second-in-command ;) :P

wueste: I use the KnifeBoat because I have a story behind it. Casket is a cool idea but I cannot find a meaning to give it because the boy is not dead yet. But thanks for your suggestion! Appreciate it!

emptyparenthesis: You have a very GOOD point about the big hand. It is definetely one of the important details in the painting. So I put in some afterthoughts and gave it a new addition and tried my best to correct its shape and perspective. Thank you very much!

paperclip: wahaha, Thanks for your vote! Maybe I should make you my second-in-command instead! wahaha, I love being here with guys and gals with big sense of humour!! I think "The God-Rays Club" is too good a name to waste! Something should be done about it! :D

beelow: yeah, you noticed! That is one of the symbol I hid throughout the painting. Try to find out more! Thanks for checking in!!!

emptyparenthesis: Cool! I didn't get to finish the game properly because it has a serious bug later in the level. I think it has something to do with sound puzzle. Maybe I couldn't continue because I am hearing-impaired! :(

Zephyri: Hi Sam, thank you for coming back here! Haha, I think it would be cool to see how it looks like in animated form. I'm glad you like the hands... it was really hand, I mean hard, work! :) I wonder how and why you fear of things grabbing you from the water... must be something from your past? ;)

Segvoia: Thank you for coming here!

MFTiTuS: Good point about the hands in the water. I tried to go for a relax pose where the hands are just pushing the KnifeBoat gently and not doing anything fierce. Regarding the rising corpse, Actually it is not meant to rise up from the earth surface, but it is already been like that in the first place. So that's why I didn't put any falling debris. Hope this clears things up! Thank you for liking my piece!

Srulo: Thank you! Yeah, I did the poem in one shot, and its late already. Feeling sooo sleepy now.

individium: Hahaha, thank you! The God-Rays Club is expanding! Cool! But don't force yourself to put god-rays in your piece! You can always paint a new painting, submit it in the finished 2d section to qualify! Wow, I just wrote the FIRST club regulation!

Feeling silly at the moment. Sorry :P

05 May 2006, 06:52 PM
You're done :) Congrats! Love the poem. It made the scene look more horrific and more disturbing. I can almost hear a sick lullaby playing in the background as I was reading it :) Goodluck!

05 May 2006, 12:00 AM
Lol! I was listening to some trippy music when I opened your thread, and boy did it fit. This piece is all kinds of interesting. Well done! :thumbsup:

05 May 2006, 06:40 AM
Congrats on a wondeful piece (as always). Quite brutal...but really good!

05 May 2006, 08:16 AM
Damn! that is freakie, but cool! :buttrock: good job, good luck and congratulations, it is an amazing image

05 May 2006, 08:42 AM
Now it makes some kind of sense to me. Well done Jerome, this is a great piece and good poetry as well. You're a multi talented person.

It's a winner in my eyes. :thumbsup:

Thanks for taking the prizes from the rest of us :sad:

*Ed :applause:

05 May 2006, 03:48 AM
Great work, the lightning effects, and composition especially, are brillaint to say the least. Best of luck to you, you did awesome!

05 May 2006, 11:47 AM
Yeah that sticks out the most hehe, God rays my ass! I will be the victor of god rays! just u wait! hehe!:D

05 May 2006, 07:18 AM
:) Congratulations on finishing Jerome

I really love this image and wish you best of luck in the contest :) :)

05 May 2006, 01:50 PM
ahbeejieh: Hahaha, nice to know my poem is effective! You made my day! thanks!

RALawrence: What trippy music were you listening to? Black Metal??! :) Haha, thank you for your comments!

andreasrocha: Thank you! I want to make poetry out of gruesome things... And please I am not a sicko.

Climax: Thanks man!

EDP-Art: I love writing poetry since young. My favourite form of poetry is the kind that rhymes. Thank you for your support! I have seen many great works here in this contest! A great source of motivation!

slickgreekgeo: Thank you very much!

beelow: hahaha, Walrus is the qualified King of The God-Rays Club right now. Unless you have a very big god-ray to diminish his subtle ones! :D LOL

MrFreeman: Thank you too!

All the best with your entries, fellow participants!

05 May 2006, 02:33 PM
Awesome work one the most great pic of this challenge, good luck:thumbsup:

05 May 2006, 03:57 AM
truly spectacular!

05 May 2006, 09:29 AM
Hi Jerome

I would officially like to apply for memebreship of the 'God Rays Club'. I though you would be the person to approach as the previous holder of the crown. (Although I think you your light house rays really don't qualify). I'm applying on the basis that my pic originates where the God rays come from.

Do I qualify?

Anxiously awaiting your reply :D


05 May 2006, 09:38 AM
Hey hey EdP-Art, Walrus is the KING of The God-Rays Club now! Go bug,.. err, ask him instead! :P lol. Yeah, I think my lighthouse ray is not a proper God-Ray, politically speaking! Now it is up to WALRUS to decide who can become the members!

MDN67: thanks for your vote of confidence!

jevinart: Thank you too!

05 May 2006, 01:12 PM
We need to get together sometime to draw up that god-ray club charter. Maybe we can have this an ongoing thing! (for our non-challenge work, it would be fun!)

05 May 2006, 02:01 PM
Well, I ban EVERYONE form the god-rays club, bwa-ha-ha-ha-ha! Jerome's come from a lighthouse, Ed's and Theresa's pieces don't have any god rays in them at all, and mine are so subtle and opaque that Jerome didn't even see them until I had to point them out. No, in order to be in the god-rays club, you need soemthing more like this, Jerome:

On to more serious(?) topics: Jerome, it's just one man's opinion, but I think the tree was a bit too much. It's not like there wasn't enough going on in the piece already, but I feel this makes it too busy. It's also a little awkward in that the tree is standing up straight, but on what? The hand doesn't really have a flat surface for anything to grow on... It might work better if the hand were posed palm-down (and then, maybe it should have been a palm tree, ha ha!) But I honestly feel it looked stronger without the tree.

Beautiful piece, nonetheless, and nice poem. But you don't know when to quit: Tomorrow you'll be posting an MP3 of yuor poem set to music with a full band! :D Just take a break... and nice work, my friend!


05 May 2006, 02:42 PM
Hi, Jeromoo,

I stay 10 min watching your picture ( and you could guess how it's rarefull I took time to do it ) and I have no name for discribing this trip, but only one thing to say : it's interresting.
I will follow your work more often.

05 May 2006, 04:24 PM
NOOOOOOO Walrus, I like that tree! My cousin and friends like it too! So I am going to leave it there. Another solid reason I can give you is that it breaks up the symmetry of the painting the same way the addition of 2 more crows in the foreground (above the Buoy Boy corpse) did. If you study my previous version, you might notice that everything is contained within an invisible border. I am trying to break that border by having new stuff reaching out and in from outside that frame. With the addition of the tree taking root through the hand, I have thrown in a subplot about the manner of The Father's death. It is the details that will hopefully make one sit down and draw up a scene of what might have happened (or what the Boy Killer did) to each family member.

Remember we are in a surreal world. Everything that exists in this place is not possible so I can get away with the tree on the back of The Father's hand. :P If you look closely, you will see that the tree is plugging the hole in the hand and the roots feeding on his blood. What do you think it means? Everything here in this world is symbolic to its core.

Haha, I couldn't find a proper reason to put those proper God-Rays into the picture, so there, I lost! The Shaky Throne is now all yours to balance on, Mike! An mp3? What a fine idea! Hmmmmmm *Jerome is thinking about it*

paperclip: Now that we have started the whole thing, we might as well proceed with it. I think The God-Rays Club is going to be a very interesting endeaver! So I agree we ought to get started on it! How may we discuss about it? Email or msn?

DeeVad: Thanks.. I think its the end of my progress already. Thank you for paying me a visit!

05 May 2006, 05:27 PM
awsome work on the details!! i love it!!amazing :applause:

05 May 2006, 02:16 AM
Fantastic work,i like the idea
U have my vote until now :)

05 May 2006, 03:01 AM
i LOVE the tree on the hand, thats what first caught my attention, excuse my ignorance, but i dont think that was there before...but if it wasnt, bravo on adding it. Bc it fits perfectly!

and my image worked, it sent! haha and i got the email, thanks man :)

i love this one though, its great all around :) nice poem too!

05 May 2006, 05:41 AM (

I touched up my entry again because when I showed it to my good friend who was also my former art lecturer, he pointed out an area in great need of further development: the water! Now he has proclaimed it satisfactory, so I am finally at rest!

I copied and pasted the story and poem here because its part of the requirement.

No Peace Within

I have committed the greatest and vilest of sin:
I have brutally tortured and murdered my kin.
My being is stained with their blood under my skin,
And my soul will not rest for I have no peace within.

A giant knife carries me through the sea of blood,
Many dead hands push me past the sickening flood.
I am brought to a place built on the bodies of my kin,
They brought me there for I have no peace within.

I tried to resist with the knife in my bloodstained hand,
The corpses of my family persuading me to land,
While the crows mock me to wear my dignity thin,
My heart is already broken for I have no peace within.

I know I am here for all the things I have done,
I have come here to revisit my crimes one by one.
They are waiting for answers to redeem me for my sin,
Lest I fail, I shall never have any peace within…

This is a story about a boy who murdered his whole family. He bordered on insanity and to save him, the ghosts of his family whom he killed, brought him to this strange world made up of their own corpses. There, he will revisit his past and its connection to his crimes in order to solve the question of his intention to kill each member of the family. Along the way he will face his own demons and his journey to salvation is only beginning.

Okay, I gotta resubmit my final TIFF file now. Sorry for the trouble, administrators!

Oh, a BIG thank you to you all, especially Walrus, Paperclip, individium, Mason_Roberts for your constant visit and crits! If I have forgotten anyone here, a big thank you to you too!

Long live The God-Rays Club! See you all at the next challenge!

05 May 2006, 07:42 AM
Well Done Jerome, it's a great piece. Not doubt a winner. :thumbsup:

Would you mind giving the rest of us a chance by not helping so many people. I saw what you did for Theresa (Paperclip). It really helped her piece but how the hell are the rest of us going to get anywhere with you experts working together. :eek:

By the way my next post will give you God Ray guys a bit of a challenge :p


05 May 2006, 09:31 AM
hey moo boy, congratulations on that fantastic work, it's going to be a winner for sure!

Thanks for your help with my piece, it helped enormously. :love:

We can discuss the God-rays club by msn, just add me to your list and I'll add you to mine and we can scourge cgtalk with our god-raying :D

05 May 2006, 01:12 PM
If there's a prize for greatest number of final images posted, I think you've got it nailed!
So, as they say on a TV show here, "Is that your final answer?" 'Cause I'm tired of saying "congratulations on finally finishing" every 2 days with your piece! :)

Anyhow, I'm just kidding you, glad you finally got it to a state where you think it might be completely finished. It's been fun watching your progress along the way, and thanks for your help on mine. And yay, god-rays club, the club so open it'll take anyone at all, no matter what's in their picture. (I've already started a new painting. It doesn't have any god-rays in it either.) Anyhow, see you 'round...!


05 May 2006, 03:33 PM
looks perfect now. good to see you nail the water. this is definately one of my favourites. Its delightfully twisted. good luck.

05 May 2006, 06:47 AM
EdP-Ed: Sorry, man. Hope you don't mind. I find it easier to send my point across by doing paintovers. Thanks for your support all this time! Really appreciate it!

TheresaClip: Yeah, boy, do we have great ideas for our club!!! Can't wait to unleash it on the community!

Wal-Mike: I am very indecisive when it comes to the final stage. I always want to add more stuff in or change something, but enough is enough. So you can send me your congratulations because this is it! :D LOL Thanks for your help and support! Can't wait to see what else you have in store for us in the future!

domclubb: Glad i finally nailed the water. I have one person to thank for it: My former lecturer Loo Kin Sun! Thank you for your kind comments!

05 May 2006, 07:22 AM
Congrats for your final piece! It's really amazing!

05 May 2006, 09:56 AM
definetly one of my favorite pieces here, suberb job bro =)

05 May 2006, 11:01 AM
Very imaginative work. :thumbsup:

05 May 2006, 01:16 AM
That's one sick, disturbing, freaky, morally challenged picture. And you made a poem out of that!?


Go get some professional help, tee hee just kidding!

I'd like to try to explore this side of me some other time, this is very interesting.

I'll vote this one if didnt enter the challenge.


05 May 2006, 01:25 AM
I liked it without the tree, it feels too cluttered now, but it's up to you... Either way it's still an awesome piece! :thumbsup:

Good luck in the judging!

05 May 2006, 03:25 PM
Hi Jerome. I'm sorry for not stopping by your thread before. Your image is amazing man, I think it could be a winner. I must recognize it disturbs me , the story and the concept makes me unconfortable, that's the point you want to reach, I think. Fantastic work man, great technique and great style, good luck from now on.

05 May 2006, 05:59 PM
Wow, I didn't see this until now. (Yes, I know, I've been naughty and lazy.) Fantastic... imo you tie for first place with the rain-forest fairies who had their tree cut down.

05 May 2006, 07:05 AM
medunecer: Thank you!

adonihs: Hi Dan, thank you!

InTerceptoV: Thanks, mate. I try!

skyisnotthelimit: Heya, heh heh, glad you like the twisted concept! I'll be curious to see how you bring out that twisted part of yourself in the future!

Mason_Roberts: Howdy, how's work getting lately? Heard you are too busy to finish this cgchallenge?

Ramitxon: You are right, I intended to make people uncomfortable with this theme. Somehow inside of us all is this dark side that we wanted to hurt our close loved ones in any way any form. I'm exploring this section of our human nature.

Stahlberg: Wow, coming from you, that's high praise! Thank you for dropping by, Steven!

4 more days to Closing Date!

05 May 2006, 09:40 PM
Hi Jerome

It struck me that we could make a story with a number of pics from this challenge. Here's the bones of it...
A Soul gets drawn down into the physical worlds (see EdP-Art ( )
The Soul gets a physical body and is born (see BlackDidThis ( )
It goes through many tasks and adventures (here's just a few suggestions MrFreeman (
- Omer-n (
- Cyberone (
- Stahlberg (
- Jeromoo (
If you have more please suggest them to me.
And finally the Soul finds its way back to its home (see Beelow ( )

You might even put it to poetry :)


05 May 2006, 02:35 PM
Wow, that's a nice idea, Ed. But I think we all have enough of looking our our works, especially after 3 months! But I'll keep that idea in mind. Maybe we can include that as an article in our The God-Rays Club Newletter! :D Why don't you start putting this idea together and send it to us? TheresaClip and I have been trying to get it started lately.

05 May 2006, 05:52 PM
hi jerome

good luck on judging, i'm sure you'll win an award,
thank you for your comments at my thread

nice knowing you!

and dont forgot to inform us of the activities of god-ray club. it can be a new art movement maybe (a fun one) in the future...

may the god-rays be with you! :D

05 May 2006, 09:13 PM
What are you guys thinking of doing with the God Rays Club? If I can help just let me know, it should be a bit of fun.



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