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09 September 2005, 08:19 PM
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Latest Update: Concept Sketch: Concept Sketch, Pt. III
09 September 2005, 05:09 PM
Well, this is my rough concept, but I need to work on the composition and the mood quite a bit more.
A child crouches, holding his pet, about to run. He's turned back, looking at the monstrous war machines coming relentlessly closer over the hills.
I'm completely open to suggestions and critique. I want to learn, so be as harsh as necessary. Right now, I think the composition is rather boring and I'd like it to be more eye-catching. Also, I think the machines should possibly be closer to the child.
09 September 2005, 06:28 PM
:) Well ok here goes,
For one why in the heck would a kid release a beloved pet into harms way? :shrug: it will just come off as senseless if you know what I mean.
Here is an idea for you....
Your current guy is a fallen pilot in the middle of a war torn battlefield. His machine is damaged and his leg is broken so he is basically done for and cant move. In the back ground there is smoke and debris along with his inevitable demise...his enemies (the machines).
In your picture you can depict a shot of were maybe his little side kick was a small puppy that used to ride with him. And on the battlefield the puppy is pulling at his shirt trying to drag to him to safety (which of course is impossible although quite cute). But in the back ground there is a giant robotic foot that is high in air over them both spelling the end of the loveable duo :)
Corn-ballish (maybe) but hopefully it helps to spark something within ya...keep it man :thumbsup:
09 September 2005, 06:34 PM
Actually, he's not releasing his pet, he's either in the act of picking it up or clutching it in his arms. Sorry if I didn't make that clear. My sketch is a craptastic in that regard. It's more of a rough layout and color sketch.
09 September 2005, 05:21 PM
Here's a more refined sketch which should more properly explain it. The machines are still vague because I haven't come up with their design yet. In the final image, there will probably be quite a bit more of them as well.
09 September 2005, 05:32 PM
The second sketch clears things up, it looks good, but I think you need some more action to make it spectacular. You should have the boy in action. Maybe he is running toward the viwer and as he is passing the puppy he is bending over and basically snatching it up. You also should make the danger he is in seem very close. I like Kid Mesh's idea of a foot cominh down over them, or you could come up something else too. I really like the concept and I think it has a lot of potential, just needs a little spice.:D Keep it up!
09 September 2005, 05:54 PM
Thanks for the comments. I agree that the kid is in too relaxed a pose. I'll also work on trying having the machines closer. Perhaps if there were already explosions in the air and missiles flying as well. I'm also thinking about having the opposing force be meeting the machines at this point, perhaps with some sort of antiquated aircraft. Biplanes or something.
09 September 2005, 11:02 PM
Well, I loosely added in a closer machine and with an update on the boy to make him more scooping up the dog and about to run, I think it will work out fairly well. I'm going to work on designing the machines next.
09 September 2005, 11:02 PM
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