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02 February 2005, 12:45 PM

Here's my WIP for 10seconds feb. Please take a look and it'll be great to get ur critics.


Codec - DivX
Filesize - 1MB

Thnx for checkin it !! Lookin for ur critics...

02 February 2005, 05:32 PM

02 February 2005, 08:56 PM
Hey man - tried both, both seem to be corrupted. Check ur upload.

02 February 2005, 05:55 PM
Here's bit updated version.

The links are workin fine wid me dude.... CLICK HERE (

Critics please... i really need them badly to improve...

02 February 2005, 10:33 PM
Ok, I noticed this arms seems to stay in the same place, and his body moves around a fair bit. Also noticed a fair bit of jerky movment around the place, might want to check your curves as they amight still be linear or stepped.

02 February 2005, 02:12 AM
Hey there. Let me first say that some of the poses aren't working for me. One of the first ones where he jumps up especially. Other than some of the pose choices, it's looking pretty good. The only other critique I can offer would be the weight shift of the first pose, where he throws his hands up on "enemy". He looks like he should be falling over. Just move the main cog over to his right leg a little more. Maybe one more. I think, like me, you are trying to fit too many poses into this short animation. I struggle with the same problem. Maybe think about cutting a pose or two and lengthening some moving holds. Coming along nice.

Les t
02 February 2005, 04:01 AM
I'm not sure if his lip sync looks correct when he says "may the lord hate you", not sure if it needs little more jaw opening, make it larger on the words... more exaggerated.

Apart from that I like it.

02 February 2005, 01:21 PM
Thanx jchristo ( vbmenu_register("postmenu_1986746", true); and Les T for ur comments...

Jchristo - ya i think the putting of more of the poses and actions in less amount of time is goin wrong wid me. Hey.. itll be great if ya let me know what actions to cut off. How about just getting rid of the action wher he says "Hue" ?

Les T - Thnx for the comment n likin it. Ill fix the morphs and post the update soon.

02 February 2005, 06:41 PM
Hi.. here's the updates. Its an MPEG file this time so i dont think itll be problem playing it.


The submission date is close... so please drop in ur tips dudes so that i can make ihe fixes n submit it.

Thnk You.

02 February 2005, 01:16 AM
First off, good work getting this far! I like the progress and the look and feel of the rendering. However I think the lipsync looks a little off. Maybe the mouth movement isn't exaggerated enough, though it's close. Also, I'm not sure that some of the poses are well suited for the audio. It seems as though he's a little too happy and jumpy to give his enemy a speech like this. I would think he would be a little more sinister with his movements.

02 February 2005, 02:43 PM
Thnx Dmac,

Thanx for the valuable critics. This months entries are done now. Ill try to keep these things in mind and will start working on March 10 seconds.

Thnx Dude.

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