View Full Version : Character: Not so innocent...

02 February 2004, 02:17 AM
Started this today.. It's supposed to be a trashy-cartoony-evil-but-semi-innocent-looking-cyborg-girlie wearing a chinese dress and hiding a chainsaw.. :)
I spent too much time trying to make the body look right, but I still think there's something wrong with it.. Any feedback would be very appreciated :)

Here's a (very) rough sketch, but you get the idea:

02 February 2004, 02:36 AM
I think the problem is that you're putting adult propotions into her torso area. The hip and breast placement indicates a much more mature character (although she would have feet attached directly to her thighs). By re-situating the hip higher you'll get a child's proportions.

Also, the feet do look like little prunes or something sticking out of her dress. I'd shorten the dress a bit so you can actually see that they are feet, and position at least her left foot to the right more (so that the balance of the character isn't off).

Aside from that, it looks promising. Love the skull face and hair.

02 February 2004, 03:20 AM
Kirt: thanks a lot for your help :) I followed your advice, and I think it looks a bit better now :) I'll increase the size of the chainsaw too, I think its size is misleading.. but I'll do that tomorrow :)
Is there still something to rework before goin on?

02 February 2004, 05:57 AM
I originally saw the lines on her arm and chest as stitches, but I guess they are her sleeve and neck openings of her dress?

I guess they're just a bit odd for a little girl. I can't recall seeing a t-shirt like sleeve on a dress and the neckline would probably reveal her nipple if it was that low. I don't know how much you want to shock the viewer ... so, I'll just leave it at that.

Good work on the changes so far. Looking forward to your next update (with mass-murder-sized chainsaw).

02 February 2004, 01:24 PM
Hey Drumwhore, I really like the expression in her face. Good job, and the new proportions looks much better :)
Kirt: I think sheīs wearing one of those asian style dresses, with a high collar.... didnīt know how to explain so I did this little quick drawing...... (if itīs ok with you Drumwhore)
Am I right?

Just read your first post again: "wearing a chinese dress"

sorry for rambling :)

02 February 2004, 02:29 PM
Yes Ivars, you're right :) it's suppsoed to be this kind of dress, but the model with a bit longer sleeves :) like this one:

02 February 2004, 12:20 AM
I changed my mind about the chinese dress.. I think she'll look more childish with a bunny pyjamas and furry slippers, and it fits better with the subject :)
btw, I'm taking notes and screenshots to write a making of/tutorial with it :)
I tried to start the lineart using the rough sketch but it wasn't precise at all... So I made a rough lineart, and now I'm gonna clean it :)
I also increased its size to 12x17 inches print size.

02 February 2004, 12:51 AM

I like it very much and the evoluation was very very good, i hope someday.....

I just think that you have a problem with arm, shollder, and pyjama, I think the sleev is not well positioned, itīs only my opinion

I love the details :)

keep working, Iīm looking forward to your next update


02 February 2004, 12:57 AM
Thanks =)
I see what you mean, It might be the fold of the sleeve which can give the impression that it just ends there, and the arm continues behind.. I admit it's not very aesthetic :) will try to fix that :)

02 February 2004, 09:51 AM
Isnt that a grown up persons teeth?
A kid in that age, one would imagine, would be in the middle of loosing the babyteeth, having pretty largeteeth and maybe, a fronttooth missing?

02 February 2004, 07:41 PM
Alice: maybe they're not her own :-D

02 February 2004, 11:27 PM
aww, wow...the enlarged chainsaw really works wonders

I like the way this is going.

02 February 2004, 11:42 PM
maybe so, but it takes away a big part of the child-like apperance.

02 February 2004, 01:40 AM
Hmm let's say as she's a cyborg girl, she's not supposed to lose her teeth unless there is a mechanical defect :)
In fact I just think that if I draw her teeth bigger, she'll get some kind of dumb/goofy look.. :) or maybe too cartoony?

Thanks for the comments :)

02 February 2004, 06:06 PM
i really like what you got so far... keep it up

02 February 2004, 06:49 PM
in regards to the teeth

would it help if the teeth weren't drawn from side to side, maybe drawing less teeth and enlarging them ever so slightly would help?

as in real life, the teeth are not in a single row across the front, maybe this is what makes it look odd?

not sure if this makes total sense :-/

02 February 2004, 04:30 AM
Do the teeth look that weird? I'll play a bit with them in photoshop to see if i can improve their look..
Anyway, here's what i've got so far: the clean lineart :)

02 February 2004, 06:02 PM
bah, teeth are good, but why don't you make a child teeth version to compare?

02 February 2004, 09:19 PM
Teeth are good :) - I changed my mind

considering the title is "not so innocent" I think they'll go through :)

beside..maybe they aren't her teeth -_-

02 February 2004, 03:11 AM
I think i'll not change the teeth.. tried both suggestions, but doesn't look very good.. I'll just leave them as they are, in fact I like them this way :)
I just started coloring, the face was really fun to paint :) next step: the hair...
here's the cutie:

02 February 2004, 05:12 AM
Originally posted by Drumwhore
I think i'll not change the teeth.. tried both suggestions, but doesn't look very good.. I'll just leave them as they are, in fact I like them this way :)
I just started coloring, the face was really fun to paint :) next step: the hair...

I love this piece. I check cgtalk regularly specifically hoping you update the image. Nice job so far!

02 February 2004, 06:29 AM
Originally posted by Stu_Hacking
beside..maybe they aren't her teeth -_-
My thoughts as well. I figured they were 'borrowed' from one of her victims. The stitches on her face also made me believe she was wearing a mask anyway.

Looking good Drumwhore!

02 February 2004, 02:38 AM
steele3d: thanks! that's cool :D

kirt: hmm.. i'll just let anyone think whatever he/she wants about her :)

here's a little update, i'm currently painting (or trying to paint?) the hair, the left part is more detailed but I still have to work on it.. Hair strands are not very visible when scaled down.. If you have any suggestion it will be greatly appreciated :)

02 February 2004, 05:43 PM
Man, this looks GREAT so far, cant wait to see finished piece! Best regards!

02 February 2004, 02:52 AM
Hehe thanks for your comment :D

Here's another update..

02 February 2004, 12:30 PM
I really like how this piece turns out...

just one thing ... the arm lacks the diversity you find in the face - regarding the colors.... I can't point out what would give it a little 'kick' but it needs one imho...

02 February 2004, 05:51 PM
very cool .

02 February 2004, 08:34 PM
Thanks :) For the colors, it's maybe because i'm working in CMYK.. ? Hope the blood will give them that kick :) (and the arm is now more diversified).. Else I'll play with the levels etc.. :)

Here we go :) next step: the background.

iDio is Me
02 February 2004, 09:55 PM
Wow, and so beautiful, she has the look of a cute little yet strong battle-axe... keep it up, I want to see the background and when it is done!

02 February 2004, 10:01 PM
Your work is amazing. I like the juxtaposition with the little girl night gown, and all the blood. I two would like to see it with a background. What is your final goal for this character, just the are, or some king of comic?

02 February 2004, 10:16 PM
great.... yeah that was the kick I was looking for ... this could be a great poster when you're finished

02 February 2004, 10:54 PM
spectacular !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

itīs the only thing i can say!

waiting for the background.......


02 February 2004, 12:05 AM

this is fantastic I love it

/me continues giggling

02 February 2004, 09:02 AM
phsycho looking .............I like

02 February 2004, 09:45 AM
it might look good if the circle above one of her eyes had a slant inside of it as if it were a screw. i think it needs some shadding buti like the character so far. id kinda like to see it in some more tattered clothes and the chainsaw a bit worn(used)

02 February 2004, 12:45 PM
what a great picture!!!!! good coloring job in photoshop, but i have to did u do your lineart to make it that clean? pencil or in photoshop?
cool job

02 February 2004, 12:01 AM
idio is me, schmu20_mol, mariana, stu_hacking, juju: thanks a lot for your comments :D

monkeygroove: thanks :) the final goal of this character was just this pic, but i've been thinking for a few days about making a comic with her.. the problem is that i never seriously did any comic, and i don't know exactly how to do, etc.. and knowing myself, i think i'll do 2 or 3 pages, then stop it :) i'll see.. :)

rljetsetradio: hmm yeah, I initially wanted to add her some kind of feature, then I changed my mind and forgot to erase this circle.. :) tried to put a screw, but it looks weird.. :) or maybe I need some time to get used to it..

hunkosaurus: thanks :) lineart was done in photoshop, but the character is about 3500 pixels high, and I tried to make it look the best i could even in hi-res. so when it's shrinked down, it looks clean :) if you want i'll post some close-ups :)

I added some volume to the blood on the chainsaw, don't know if it's better.. as for the background, i'm kinda stuck... :/

02 February 2004, 12:25 AM
Love it !!!!
Great job on the shadowing and light sourcing.
A few minor suggestions- It would be nice to see some more
rippling in the water and you could reflect the chainsaw in the
blood without too much hassle.
No idea what to do with the bg tho :shrug:

02 February 2004, 01:23 AM
it is just an amazing work!!, love the style and the concept, this is amazing, if u create a comic i definetily will be your fan #1, congratulations man!

02 February 2004, 02:02 AM
for some reason i kinda picture her being in a barn or rural area some kinda place that ed gein might be in. some delapidated house that looks like only one person live there. wooden floor with a small rug and old skool curtains like have a few things in the background make ti look like the person livving there wanted to make their dwelling apealing but have the condition of the floor wall and ceiling make it so that it really wasnt. sounds wierd but i kinda go into stories abotu things sometimes.

02 February 2004, 04:53 PM
blue magic: hehe thanks, you're the man :) good idea for the reflection :) but I think the rippling will add too much detail in the blood and just distract from the girl..

rattlesnake: thanks a lot :D I'm still thinking about the comic.. I'll keep u informed :)

rljetsetradio: good idea, but lots of work in perspective.. If I have time, I'll maybe try it if I have time :)

I reduced the amound of blood too, changed the bg color and I'm also playing a bit with the colors of the hair.. :)
If it doesn't miss the background too much, I think I'll leave it as is :) (I know, gradient + compression isn't the most beautiful thing in the world :))

02 February 2004, 06:06 PM
holy cow...........thatīs sick...........but looks cool........

where did u get the idea for this?? know any crasy kids??

02 February 2004, 07:04 PM
nice improvement ...tough imho she looks better with the purple hair

02 February 2004, 09:36 PM
I love it!!! great style and I really like the way you put all the blood together and everything.

02 February 2004, 10:52 PM
wow, that's excellent

I like the way you considered reflections and light hitting the blood :)

02 February 2004, 04:12 PM
juju: hopefully not :) I mean not THAT crazy :) lol just got the idea when doodling.. :)

schmu20_mol: I changed it back to purple :)

grafi, stu_hacking: thanks :D

Ok the final image is available here (, in the finished section. Thanks to all of you for your commens and your help!

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