View Full Version : A little flash cartoon I made

11 November 2003, 10:54 AM
hey all! I recently made this little flash cartoon for my senior project at school. Hope you enjoy it.

11 November 2003, 12:32 AM
Hey, quite cool but a bit slow in general.

Good effort. :)

11 November 2003, 02:20 AM
ahh really? shoot. Havn't got that response yet haha. What do you mean specifically? I'm gonna start working on a new cartoon so I want to make sure I don't make the same mistake again. Thanks for the help!

- Jason

11 November 2003, 11:43 AM

I watched it again and found just a couple of things:

- the scene where the guy stands in front of the vending machine could be shorter.
- a faster zoom on the soda bottle would be great.
- the scene where the thing that rolls on the floor (forgot the name, u know like in cowboy movies) in front of the bottle could be shorter too.
- the black screen before the Breaking News is too long.

Minor things but it will give more rythm to your animation. Basically, if there is a shot where things don't move too much or slowly, or there isn't anything important to read, make it short.

Love the battle scene.

The shop owner is great, I like the way he talks. :)

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