07-06-2011, 09:49 PM
It's not bad, but could you be a little more specific in what you'd want help with? Like, for instance, is this supposed to be more cartoony, or are you going for realistic?
A couple of things to consider, as well:
The piece is a bit static, you have her right in the middle of the page, which can me considered boring. You add drama to a painting by exploring other angles, instead of straight on, and right in the middle.
I would also encourage you to draw the whole figure. This cropping looks like a still frame from an animation, honestly.
In general, to get to the next level, you need to work more on color, texture, detail, and anatomy. Lighting in particular, you have the two trees in the front backlit, and she's in full light from the front. Go on to the next level, work out the lighting, give her dress texture, fix her arms, and render the face more accurately. You've done the broad strokes, now go in and do smaller strokes.
As for her: Her head is too big, but the crown of her skull is too small. Her eyes are too big - generally, with the eyes that wide, you should almost see white underneath the pupil, these are far too big. The proportions of the face are a bit off, it feels squished, and you need more rendering to show the volume and shape of the face, like her cheekbones, and her mouth. The neck is just a tube, and her shoulders don't have any shoulder muscles, and her left arm is too thin, or at least does not match the right. The hair is simply too cartoony, and simple.
Another thing to consider, is the narrative of the scene. Why is she there? Where is she? Who is she?
One final nitpick - your signature is entirely too big, and it's distracting. The human brain will always pick out letters first, so the focal point of this painting is your name.
Sounds like a lot, right? Don't worry, it all comes second nature after years of practice. :) Just keep going, and learn from each attempt. It's not bad, you just need to go to the next level.
07-07-2011, 02:13 AM
wow that's really helpful, thanks! I really wasn't sure what I needed help on at first but I'm glad you pointed out what you saw because I have a hard time seeing those things for myself.
07-07-2011, 02:13 AM
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