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AntoineMDillard
04-12-2011, 06:40 PM
Hello everyone i just wanted to kind of show this off and get some thoughts from you guys. This is a teaser trailer me and a small team did. We want to do a short but are looking for more help and better talent if possible. Anyhow C&C are more than welcome and if you want to help us out with a short plz let me know.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_y33tAGpUZQ

AntoineMDillard
04-12-2011, 06:50 PM
http://img405.imageshack.us/i/picture3cl.png/Here are some stills from the Trailer :)

Mammoth
http://img405.imageshack.us/img405/7056/picture3cl.png

City Shot Two
http://img714.imageshack.us/img714/7888/picture4ev.png

Starfire Titans Tower Transition
http://img820.imageshack.us/img820/2166/picture5vs.png

ConnortheCraftmaster
04-12-2011, 08:51 PM
I'm a big fan of the simple-yet-meaningful detail level you used to create the city and that was actually my favorite area of the animation. The street lights were kinda weird though and the lower area seemed too blurry and lacked the detail the buildings had texture-wise.

The character models look great but the animated sequence was hard to follow and I had to watch it a second time to figure it out... its like the camera is zoomed in too much so you can't really assess what's going on.

By this, I mean look at the 0:46 mark... I thought Starfire was in some kind of ship or something and just doing something weird with her hand. The entire last half of the animation needed better contrast and better choice of camera angles to make what was happening more obvious. The movement of the brute seemed really awkward too, like his upper body wasn't really involved in swinging the metal pipe (or whatever it is).

I'd work on your composition first and foremost; it is the area that needs the most love.

EDIT: One other thing... did you motion blur the entire animation? If so, it hurt rather than helped the compilation. If its just a codec issue then that's a simple matter of re-rendering.

AntoineMDillard
04-12-2011, 08:59 PM
Thanks for the crit Connor yeah the cinematography wasn't the best since none of us on the team is very good at it...and i agree the animation could definitely be tweeted a little more for perfection...i never really noticed it until you mentioned it.

I really appropriate the constructive feedback and if you or anybody you know could help us out that would be great. The more and more dedicated the better

DrWeeny
04-12-2011, 09:15 PM
Hi,
Unfortunatly, I found your teaser a bit disappointing.
Do you storyboard and layout your teaser ? I feel it lacks of story-telling and the shot were not well composed.

For example, the first shot when the camera reach the the top of the roof. We expect to see a character (probably the girl hero) watching to "Wayne Entreprises" with beautiful night sky. (no travelling through the city ^^')

Same with the shot with the street after seeing "Wayne Entreprises". It doesn't bring narrative information. Instead, you should introduce the baddies and a fight between the girl and Mammoth who has just made a burglary.

Then she is losing so we see the "T" secret base with another hero which sound desparate. Finally you had your final shot with the last hit and a final epic flash (powers of the girl unleashed) and to conclude : "coming soon", cast..etc

Hope I've been not be too harsh but I think a teaser should deliver some piece of story-telling and some action.
Keep Going !

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