ANIMATION: Blocking

[clockwerkz]

I love the little head shake he does on "for freee.." That is going to be a great piece there.

He's walking in through the door at the beginning of the sentence.. I'm not sure how that's going to work out. "I was going to hook up your..." Seems like if he is going to be walking in, there should be a little more quickness into his coming through the door.. Like he shouldn't be easing into the scene., but just popping in with the words, ya know?


Anyway, just my two cents. Excellent WIP so far!

[fattyLees]

Thanks for the comments, clockwerkz...

I've changed the intro so he's already in the room...I figured it made more sense to have him in the room since his tool box is already in there and all. I pushed around the timing of the poses a bit too and made some of the poses stand out better in sillouette.

Now what do you think?

http://www.fattylees.com/images/blocking_2.avi (3.8Mb)

if that doesn't work...

http://www.fattylees.com/animation.htm

I'm gonna leave up the old blocking incase anyone out there wants to see the progress.
Thanks,
Eric

[clockwerkz]

Yup, now that he's in the room it works out a lot better. Very good timing and pauses. I also like the way he puts his hands on his hips.. like he's got sixguns or something.

The only thing I can think of to point out.. and this, mind you, is if I had to absolutely find something to ask about, is the part when he says "favor" his eyes shift to his left. I kept playing and playing it over, and that's all I noticed. It works with it, but I was just curious why you had him shifting his eyes. It's really a learning question for me. :-)

Keep it going!

cW

[fattyLees]

http://www.fattylees.com/animation.htm

I fixed it once again...I showed the animation to a bunch of my friends and they all agreed it was a little too busy. I was hitting every important word with a pose and there wasn't enough contrast in the animation as a whole... So I fixed some of the poses, toned a few of them down, and cut a couple out entirely.

Hopefully I'll be done with it really really soon, unless any of yous out there can give me some more crits.

!!!Speak up People!!!!

clockwerkz, as far as his eyes shifting, the only reason why I put it in is b/c when i acted it out in front of the mirror, my eyes did that...Plus I figure it gives it a little variation, since your eyes sometimes wander when you talk...

[clockwerkz]

Yeah I think the ending is less busy and works well.. letting him finish "forget it" and then acting on the toolbox.


Thanks for the response with the eye thing. Like I said, it was more of a learning question for me. You're absolutely right about shifting eyes as we speak.

People are silent because it's rocking! Let's see more! hehe

cW

[Gilgamesh]

Originally posted by clockwerkz
letting him finish "forget it" and then acting on the toolbox.
Or, you could have him bring his had down right on the "forget it" beat. If you made it quick and violent while keeping his eyes trained on whoever he's talking too, it might be good contrast with the "for free" pose. Just another thought.

Looks good.

By the way, nice work on your birdseed short, one of my favorites at the spring show. Are you graduated now?

[fattyLees]

Hi all-

http://www.fattylees.com/animation.htm

Ok there is a 4th version of the blocking now...
i toned down the pose for "DO your family..." so it isn't so over dramatic.


i also canned the the first pose of the animation.

And Finally, i fixed some minor stuff with some of the poses.

Any comments???

I wanna get crackin on the animation!

Hey Gilgamesh, thanks for the comments! I did graduate back in May. Glad you liked my short!

[Monkey Boy Mark]

Hi fattyLees, nice work.

I was wondering if you were open to the possibility of editing the audio?
If there was a teeny bit more of a pause after "...free." then I think the overall pace would work better. By teeny bit, I mean just a 1/3 of a second or so to allow more of a hold on the "free" pose and that'd exaggerate the subsequent change of tone and attitude in the sentence that follows.

I've done a wee test with it but don't have anywhere to host it so I'll check your site for an email address to send it.

[MaTaDoR]

chek pm please fattyless =)

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