Animation: My 10 Second Club Entry

[asylum24]

thats ****en awsome thats all i gotta say

[-dc-]

that's great stuff! :D

Hope your entry does well...the animation is good! :)

[tubby]

nice work there MosaFacku, this looks great . I love his arm arcs on "doh", they really read well. My only crit would be to add a slight anticipation to the arm sweep. great work though, good luck!:beer:

[maks]

Good acting :)

The only crits: work out a bit more the facial expressions they seem to neutral for such an emotional state...

Other than that, nice job :thumbsup:

[mehdianim]

Ma boy! you asked for it! :D Ready?
The original posture is too calm. We come in in the middle of the conversation where he is discussing his problem so it should show on his face from the start.
His first reaction however is very appropriate.
Not as good when he says "human crazy glue" the line is rather funny and his pose when he says it should capitalize on the line and be more animated. The build up stuttering part is fine...
Also his lips never form a complete "U" for Glue.
And finally when he says "i can't believe that I'm hearing this" his reaction should be more of retreat not leaning forward the way he does. It would feel more natural considering his line, if he looked away, ready to give up the argument. And that would also break the staging up a bit since he's always facing the same direction from the start.
ZOLTAN !:buttrock:

[MosaFacku]

hey thanks for the crits guys!! :buttrock:

[hopper2k]

Hi. Nice animation. The only minor critiques I would have is to maybe make the eyes and mouth open wider on certain parts, like on the "I can't believe I am hearing this!" part.:thumbsup:

[McSpirit]

The part (6 - 9 sec) where he puts his arm on the table.. His fingers should point down and his rist up.. try doing that motion yourself..
The part where he says "The man is human crazy glue" it seems that hes eyes is laughing.. well im not surdent but something in that part dosent seem right.

Beside that i agree with mehdianim

But this is small things... I think the animation is great :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :love:

You got some real tallent

[MosaFacku]

yah, i agree, i should have made his face a lot more expressive. :banghead: i've gotta go through and rework him before his next anim. this was this character's first animation, so it was a good test to see what needs to be fixed and added. i appreciate all the comments so far. if anyone has more opinions, the harsher the better, keep on posting. :buttrock:

[Grayscale]

i guess they'll let any no talent hack post on this forum eh? I'm living proof. (HUGE SMILE). Alright, you asked for it, you got it toyota.

I told you about the hand movements. His fingers look stiff, give that some more motion. (okay, so I didn't watch it again before i posted. You fixed them. Ignore this)
I agree with the posture now (the starting off posture)

other than that, what everyone else said. And yes, I'll see you in October. the Grayscale is coming to CALIFORNIA...hide your women.

[Rogue]

Most excellent! Good stuff, man. Not much to crit. It's pretty solid. The only two things that stick out to me is the very first small lean forward in the chair. He kind of sinks in his chair then moves forward a bit. It just seems unmotivated.

The second thing is when he's doing the 'the man is..is..human crazy glue". I like what he's doing acting wise, but it looks like his body moves too much in a way that makes him appear to be hic-uping or something. That's the best way I can describe it. But hey, I'm the king of too subtle, so I may be crazy here. :)

Regardless, it's great stuff. It should be a contender in the contest. Good luck.

James

[Terro]

I like it, I love it, I want more of it

[MosaFacku]

but it looks like his body moves too much in a way that makes him appear to be hic-uping or something.

i completely agree with ya there. i think i over did it :surprised


thanks again for your help guys! :D

-matt

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