PDA

View Full Version : Bossing around (11 sec club sept 2009)


dapOOn
09-29-2009, 10:46 AM
http://i793.photobucket.com/albums/yy220/dapoon1984/01.jpg

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ySyYJiyKwHY

hey guys here's a li'l something i tried animating for the 11 sec club sept 2009 contest. it's infact the FIRST time i ever took part in that contest! and i took the plunge this month cuz i LOVE the dialogue!!

also this is my FIRST ever full-fledged personal work.. so i agree to have made quite a lot of mistakes! i guess the REAL learning curve starts from now!

do check it out and pour in ur c&c.

snot_nose
09-29-2009, 01:53 PM
really grate work and idea!
i really like a lot of small movements u gave her.

things i would consider

when she says "who do u think you are talking to" i dont like the way her hands are on the table. they fill symmetric and without much weight.
i would push her body a bit forward and give more weight on the palms of her hands (or one of them so it wont be so symmetric). also in this moment her body seems a bit relaxed to me in opposite to her expression and vocal.

in the begining in "dont' youuuu" i would make a small head shake on the you and give more angle to the head.

I dont like the way her head is being cut out when she gets up. maybe u should rise up the angle of the camera (and maybe it will give a more frieghtend look)

also the hand lying on the chair is hardly visible. maybe push it a bit inside the frame (or move the camera a bit). and give some accent on the chair when he lie his hand on the chair, i saw the its moving a bit before but maybe u can also rotate it a bit back and forth after the hand pressing on the chair.

Im being picky but overall grate animation and acting

CGTalk Moderation
09-29-2009, 01:53 PM
This thread has been automatically closed as it remained inactive for 12 months. If you wish to continue the discussion, please create a new thread in the appropriate forum.