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carlisve
09-17-2009, 09:29 PM
Hi there!!
This is my last animation before to start Animation mentor...
It's an acting and is a little bit boring but I need to practise acting and polishing...I have a many problems because I don't see anything more for touch!
All kind of feedback are welcome!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bTZVJVDxn2E

thanks!

robcat2075
09-17-2009, 11:23 PM
That;s not bad.

At animation mentor they'd probably warn you off the pointing stuff.

But I'm noticing a lot of sitting down characters in dialog tests lately, which doesn't really test body mechanics much.

At AnimationMentor they'll take you thru body mechanics, starting with bouncing ball. Pay attention to all of it and try to get each one perfect!

carlisve
09-18-2009, 06:50 AM
ok! but I need a feedback with out thinkign about AM....
I know that i'll learn a lot but....

carlisve
09-18-2009, 09:31 PM
one more step...feedback are welcome!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cbKClCCgpdo

dbalmert
09-20-2009, 02:58 AM
He blinks too late between "Educated guess" and "My money."

He needs to blink before he begins the next sentence. His brain has switched gears slightly, and his eyes blink before speaking.

After that, I'm not sure he needs to blink anymore. His head doesn't move too much and he's speaking a complete thought. You can always have the eyes half lidded etc. but an actual blink is unnecessary.

His eyes dart from his hand, to camera, to hand, to camera. I think it's too much.

Your eyebrows flicker too much. In general I think your eyes need fewer poses, but they need to be stronger poses.

For the actual lip sync, I think the "M" shape for "My" is too exaggerated (making the jaw movement really fast when it goes wide.) Other then that, it's actually pretty tight.

carlisve
09-21-2009, 10:24 AM
thanks so much dbalert!....my scheudule in Spain is diferent but tonight I'll try to upload another version with your advices!..

carlisve
09-21-2009, 09:38 PM
one more step...feedbacks are welcome!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x1wdrsu3ok8

dbalmert
09-22-2009, 12:52 AM
I like the changes you made, but you obscured the face :(

You need to make sure your hand gestures (if you insist on using them) don't get in the way of the face. We watch the eyes of an actor when they speak, and his hand covers them right when he's explaining something important.

Lower the hand gesture and keep it away from his face. It only needs to be a little fursther down to not obscure the face.

The eyebrows are much better and simpler - good job!

One more thing: your new pose has a problem. The foot needs to be in a better spot so that it doesn't overlap the leg (shape wise). It needs to be further away so it makes a nice silhouette.

I know it's not animation, but you don't want anything to distract form the eyes and mouth!

carlisve
09-22-2009, 01:14 PM
Thanks dbalmert!...tonight one more step again....I agree with your feedback....and I want to change the spine because still have a rare movement...thanks for your help...

carlisve
09-22-2009, 08:50 PM
Hi again...I think that It's my last update in this animation....thanks for your coments....
If you wach something else please let me know:P

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I8A9mhUeFdU

robcat2075
09-23-2009, 11:10 PM
I think the thing that bothers me is the way the right arm is moving with a life of its own rather than as part of his body. His torso and shoulder aren't really leading the motion.

It's a small thing, it would have to be small since he's leaning on that wall, but once i noticed it bothered me.

carlisve
09-24-2009, 08:24 PM
Thanks a lot!...I'm going crazy and I think that I'll change of animation!
A really good feedbacks and I take almost everything...but I need a new assignament..
This is the last preview....I hope you like it!

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0BxtX0UaOZk

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