New Here! Please crit.

[do-re-my]

Hi there.

I do not have much to say other than it's looking great!

[spill]

Here's a new one: Black Clover secret HQ's circa 1960

http://i440.photobucket.com/albums/qq130/stathis_photo/Clover1960s1.jpg

[spill]

Two new images that i fixed over

Underground fluid extraction chamber / Virunga Project
http://i440.photobucket.com/albums/qq130/stathis_photo/FluidExtractionchamber1A.jpg

Islands
http://i440.photobucket.com/albums/qq130/stathis_photo/Islands1A.jpg

[SpiritHunter]

Hey Spill,

That's a nice collection of work you got there. Its apparent you have a natural eye for composition and color theory. The best (in my opinion) are Islands, Tech Environment,
Black Clover secret HQ's circa 1800's, and high rocks. The latest version of Islands is without a doubt your best. I see you becoming a matte painter sir! You should submit to ImagineFX magazine if you haven't already.

I'll come back soon to critique your works, right now I gotta go! :D pce

-Davis

[SpiritHunter]

I said I would be back! Like I said, great work...that's a lot to critique! Spent a lot of time on this...all the same, they are only suggestions and you don't have to use them. Here goes:


Osirian Palace
The mood is great, love the water and buildings.

Here's the main issue. The perspective on the palace versus the perspective on the landscape is very different--more specifically, on the palace we are looking down, whereas on the landscape we are looking off to the horizon. If you wanted to capture both the sun and palace from this viewing angle, you'd either have to redraw everything in a single coherent perspective, or increase the canvas size on top and raise the horizon line much higher to line up with the vanishing points. That would be hard too, considering the perspective lines on the buildings are almost parallel.

I guess if you squint this problem will go away because everything else is good :)


Osirian Outpost
I would mainly just render out the detail a little more, the whole thing is a bit too soft because it's all airbrushed.

Another thing you should do is put in some dark clouds behind the palace to enhance its silhouette; the palace is bright and the clouds are bright so there's not enough contrast.

Otherwise, the composition is well done and the picture is interesting!


Underground fluid extraction chamber
I like what you did recently with it. The smoke adds. Only problem now is that the light above is a little dominant...I think if you burned the midtones in the middle of the image with a BIG airbrush (on this image size it'd be like 600 pt), it would bring balance between the two lights.

In the future, be sure to draw full ellipses on perspective planes to create this kind of structure, the perspective on the machine is inconsistent, most notably on the bottom rack of fluid extractors.


Black Clover secret HQ's circa 1960
The roof is mostly the same shade of grey throughout, and so are the walls. I recommend darkening them as they get further away from the overhead light source for proper falloff. Note that light has a hard time getting into the corners of rooms.


High Rocks
The rock on the left would be a complete silhouette in this lighting situation if you want to get realistic, but the idea of a spotlights is good too. If you want to bring out details on this rock in silhouette form, use the purple-blue skylight you have going on. Also, the rock on the right could do with some more sunlight, like the center rock.


Black Clover secret HQ's circa 1800's
I think you could improve the way light plays off the banner on the opposite wall--it's too smooth, airbrushy. If you could tighten the cloth detail using the same values you picked, it would fit the rest of the scene's realism.

This is nitpicky, but the fern on the bottom left side of the image has an unsightly white matte line. If you set its layer to multiply mode it would go away, that is unless you flattened or merged the layers. Otherwise you'd have to paint over it.

Oh, and you should paint in the flame of the left candle.


Islands
Not much to fix here, it's your best piece by far. F'n fantastic.

This is nitpicky because everything else looks so realistic--I recommend putting a 120 pt or so pink-orange airbrushed highlight in overlay mode on the ocean underneath the sun to indicate its reflection. It would enhance the silhouette of the vehicle as well.

That's all for now... I hope this helps! ttys

-Davis

[spill]

Thanks again for all the advice! Here are four of the images I re-did before you sent me your reply.... I'll fix everything and I'll post new stuff soon...

Osirian Outpost. I've hardly used airbrush on this.. I've used this brush which has hard edges but fades when u dont press the pen too hard.
http://i440.photobucket.com/albums/qq130/stathis_photo/OsirianOutpost1A-1.jpg

High Rocks. Ive incorporated some rock scans I had...
http://i440.photobucket.com/albums/qq130/stathis_photo/HighRocks1A.jpg

Slopes Tech. I fixed the background and focused the front lamps plus I highlighted some foliage..
http://i440.photobucket.com/albums/qq130/stathis_photo/Slopes1A.jpg

Osirian Palace.... I tried to produce a focal point with lighting and colour tricks
http://i440.photobucket.com/albums/qq130/stathis_photo/OsirianPalace7.jpg

[SpiritHunter]

Looking good, be sure to post any more updates. I'll be sure to peek into your portfolio from time to time. And, if you have the time, please help me out on my work in progress.

http://forums.cgsociety.org/showthread.php?p=6112973#post6112973

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