Summoning

[Auria]

oh i can't wait to see all of those come together! looks wonderful, i love the detail in the knights!!

two iddy critiques as this progresses. in shiva, her right shoulder seems a little bit too big. also, her hair seems to be almost one straight line... i think it would really add to the dynamic of her being summoned from the water to really swirl that hair really fluid. i think you'll like the result! :D

keep going!

[geniusprime]

I must say that it looks like a great start but it could just be me but, the columns on the left seems to capture my attention more than anything else in the composition.

[Amylrun]

thx for replies !

I fixed the hair. but it's gonna change after again.
now I have finished the little puzzle with character. let's have a look !
Im gonna fix the colunm problem right now. and starting the background painting. the sky is too blue.
(shades on knights gonna change later too)

http://i85.servimg.com/u/f85/12/35/06/87/summon13.jpg

[faedri]

It looks really good, but I agree with geniusprime, the columns seem to grab a lot of my attention because they fill about half of the image. I'd like to focus more on the summoner and Shiva because she looks awesome, but at the same time, I do like to see the environment that you've laid out. Maybe make the columns shorter so they don't dwarf Shiva? I'm not sure..just a suggestion! Looking forward to seeing the final piece. Great job :)

Out of curiosity, where did you get the reference for Shiva?

[Amylrun]

thanks you : )

yeah I agree about the columns. I'm trying to make them less hudge.
I have some difficulties with the composition and th perspective also.

I'm not using any references for shiva ^^. it's just a naked blue girl with a towel xD

http://i85.servimg.com/u/f85/12/35/06/87/summon14.jpg

[faedri]

Wow, for using no references, she looks really good!

Forgive me for butchering your image, but I changed it slightly to give you an idea of what I think might help. I shortened one of the columns to make them less equal in size to Shiva...to make it so that she appears much larger and grand. I "zoomed" in on Shiva and the summoner so that viewers can get a sense of how grand and magnificent Shiva is. I actually think you could zoom on her more too. I know the soldiers are supposed to be in awe of how grand Shiva is but if you made Shiva bigger to us too, it may make it so we are like "wow, she really is huge and magnificent" because right now she is just very distant and far away so we don't really feel how powerful she is... so it's like we are watching the soldiers watching the summoning instead of us being in the scene. I hope all this feedback makes sense...In the end, you're the artist and it's all what you want viewers to see. Great job, nonetheless! :)

[geniusprime]

I like the addition of perspective to the scene, it remedies the problem with the columns pretty well. I would like to comment more but because you are still working on the overall draft, I will wait for the next iteration. But so far, it coming along pretty well.

[Amylrun]

okay now begin the funniest part of the painting. I think all elements are nearly placed.
I don't really know how i'm gonna paint the wave, water effects, and the rest of the environnement. :(

http://i85.servimg.com/u/f85/12/35/06/87/summon15.jpg

[PencilEater]

This picture needs mre dynamic I think. This knights are standing like statues, add some life to this image! Maybe one of this knight can help to stand up this laying one. Other can stand in pose "ready to fight". I think that different display frame, and a possition of a "camera" could be better for this image, but I know you worked so hard for this version...but maybe try paint it dufferent way next time?

[faedri]

This picture needs mre dynamic I think. This knights are standing like statues, add some life to this image! Maybe one of this knight can help to stand up this laying one. Other can stand in pose "ready to fight". I think that different display frame, and a possition of a "camera" could be better for this image, but I know you worked so hard for this version...but maybe try paint it dufferent way next time?

When I look at it, I see the soldiers standing in awe and thinking... "wow" to the scene before them. They're kinda frozen by seeing a goddess being summoned right in front of them. If that's what Amylrun intended, then he/she did a good job with the soldier poses.

Also, the dynamicism can be seen in the summoner. I think overall, it looks great :)

[PencilEater]

When I look at it, I see the soldiers standing in awe and thinking... "wow" to the scene before them. They're kinda frozen by seeing a goddess being summoned right in front of them. If that's what Amylrun intended, then he/she did a good job with the soldier poses.

Also, the dynamicism can be seen in the summoner. I think overall, it looks great :)

We have ask Amylrun what she wanted to show in this image. But even if they are so "frozen by seeing a goddess being summoned right in front of them";] they are still too rigid for me. If they are so hmmm,oh you know:P they could whap their swords, or something...

[Amylrun]

yeah I completely agree with you PencilEater
I had noticed that problem but I need somebody to tell me "that's wrong!" to realized xD
I feel like an idiot now XD i've done many illustration and this problem was so obvious. alalala !
so goodbye shiva I'll make this picture environnmental only. : )
but i'll finish it !

thanks ^^

[Amylrun]

okay. now the picture has completly changed. there are less colors that at the begining but I will add vegetation and water reflexion.
I want a really sunny day so colors are a little bit burned... I don't really know if it could works for the right building. :/

http://i85.servimg.com/u/f85/12/35/06/87/summon16.jpg

[Elitha]

It's looking great so far! Can't find anything to pick on :)

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