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Neubius
06-12-2009, 08:44 AM
Alwyn Talbot is entered in the "Secret Agent" update: View Challenge Page (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/secret_agent/view_entries.php?challenger=17641)

Latest Update: Final Image: The Exchange
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249768815_medium.jpg (http://forums.cgsociety.org/showthread.php?p=6033818#post6033818)

Neubius
06-12-2009, 08:47 AM
OK! back again! time to gets some ideas together, promise to finish this one.


this is where the fun begins :)
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Neubius
06-12-2009, 08:56 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1244797017_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1244797017_medium.jpg)

just a placeholder old pic untill i've got an idea :)


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na
06-13-2009, 01:22 PM
Good Luck! I'll keep my eye on your thread.

Neubius
06-15-2009, 07:33 AM
hello mate :)

good to 'see' you. and good luck to you too sir!
hmm time to get some ideas down...

ShogunWarrior
06-15-2009, 07:36 AM
hi alwyn,


good sketch and drawing of your character reminds me of a guy i used to go clubing with a while back. I hope to see more of your work in the future, take care for now my friend.

Neubius
06-15-2009, 09:59 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245059994_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245059994_medium.jpg)

ok, first idea. :/ club scene, target sat with large ontourage, body gaurds etc. Maybe alien club for a interesting mixture of characters.
agent character in the foreground about to approach target.

thinking i'm going to widen the scene out a little get more peripheral characters in.

will probably change my mind in a minute any way ! :)

polygonwarrior
06-15-2009, 11:11 AM
good work so far. best of luck for the competition. looking forward to see more.:cool:

RageOfAges
06-15-2009, 11:21 AM
Yes, yes...good luck...

*launches hunter-seeker device, programmed to eliminate competition :twisted:

Hehe. Nice concept sketch. Drew me into the story right away.

-Rage

Neubius
06-15-2009, 11:54 AM
nandlaskar: thanks man. looking forward to seeing yours coming along too !

RageOfAges: cheers dude! hunter seeker device not required haha i can't remember last time i finished one of these challenges! ... really hope to this time!! :D
glad you got the story, going to rework the composition now, think of some details.


ta !

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nemotoad
06-16-2009, 12:37 AM
Hey I like your fist concept. Good mood.

Neubius
06-16-2009, 07:43 AM
nemotoad: thank you :)

making a start on some details... but i've got massive urge to do something that involves Steve Maqueen in a futuristic setting :/

Neubius
06-16-2009, 07:58 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245139136_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245139136_medium.jpg)

just fleshing out the characters a little before working out the final composition.

Neubius
06-16-2009, 08:04 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245139442_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245139442_medium.jpg)

(small update, couldn't tell they were sat on a sofa )

RageOfAges
06-16-2009, 08:24 AM
The alien chick rocks. That must mean that the "mark" is captain kirk. He always gets the alien chicks. Man, I find it fascinating how one can convey so much with just a few well placed scribbles on a white background. illustration is beyond me, though I'm starting to try harder. latest sketches look good, although at this point "The agent" looks more like she's posing for Maxim rather than (I assume talking on a cellphone or listening in on an earpiece).

Cheers

-Rage

Neubius
06-16-2009, 09:19 AM
hey thanks :)
haha captain Kirk ! didn't think of that your right !
oo see what you mean about the agent.... i think if i bring her arm out slightly so you can see she just has a finger to her ear, that should do it ?

cheers man

Neubius
06-16-2009, 10:18 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245147521_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245147521_medium.jpg)

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MartinNielsen
06-16-2009, 10:55 AM
Hey there :) Another challenge for us. Nice start :)

Neubius
06-16-2009, 11:10 AM
well hello there! :D
thank you, just starting to get in to the swing of things :)
can't wait to see what you come with time!

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Neubius
06-16-2009, 12:42 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245156148_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245156148_medium.jpg)

ok! feel like i've properly got started now, few more details in and i can start playing around with colour.

Maikl
06-16-2009, 01:12 PM
Hi,

great concept, love the composition and perspective! :cool:

My suggestion would be to, maybe, "mirror" the agent (gun on the right hand, earpiece on the left).
This way you could clearly show the earpiece and give the pose more depth (not completly flat against the wall), as her arm would overlap the body to touch her ear and with the weapon on the right it would be easier to shoot around that corner.

jmon999
06-16-2009, 01:54 PM
Wicked!!

Loving the Agent girl. ..mmmm

Neubius
06-16-2009, 03:28 PM
Maikl : cheers! I'll do some scribbles and weight it up, i wanted her body pointing a certain way for the lighting, but it could still work. :)

jmon999 : :D thanks, the most fun bit to paint to!


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SpeedSnake
06-16-2009, 03:33 PM
hey, pretty interesting concept you got there...good luck in the chalenge.. :beer:

Hamlet-ID
06-16-2009, 05:20 PM
Hi man! nice sketch, it looks like you have every element in the scene, the sexy agent, the muscle bodyguard and the unlocky target. I will keep an eye. Good look!

ShogunWarrior
06-16-2009, 05:48 PM
ahh, looking good man!! gonna be awesome once colored in!! can't wait! to see!

Neubius
06-17-2009, 07:39 AM
ShogunWarrior : thanks man, just wish i could get a few days off to work on it solidly.

Madness-of-Hamlet : cheers, just mkaing a starrt on the colour now!

SpeedSnake: thank you! and good luck luck to you too sir :)

Neubius
06-17-2009, 08:21 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245226897_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245226897_medium.jpg)

ok :/ a few basics in, still going to fool around with the composition slighly.

lightings going to be a little complicated on this one i think!

really want to work up the details.

OZ
06-17-2009, 09:12 AM
SHe looks cool

Neubius
06-17-2009, 09:24 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245230655_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245230655_medium.jpg)

the 'mark'

i'm thinking he's an arms dealer or some such.
i could work on this all day ... but i'd get sacked! haha
:|

OZ
06-17-2009, 09:27 AM
WHAT A TOUGH GUY!! :twisted:

Neubius
06-17-2009, 09:43 AM
he dose look a bit scary doesn't he ! :/
haha
and he runs with a biker gang, the guys in black and yellow... i'm thinking i should give them swords on their backs, what do you think ?

OZ
06-17-2009, 09:57 AM
I like the idea of the sword....like...mmm...future ronin bikes? souds cool.

Neubius
06-17-2009, 09:59 AM
sorted then :D i'll do it.


cheers mate!

MartinNielsen
06-17-2009, 10:27 AM
Cool colorful update. I like :) You have some great poses as well.

Neubius
06-17-2009, 11:01 AM
cheers mate :) really getting to some of the details now.

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Neubius
06-17-2009, 11:06 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245236760_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245236760_medium.jpg)

a bit more in, need to to work on the main character really

Ataulfo
06-17-2009, 11:43 AM
Hi Alwyn,
Nice to see you in another CGChallenge.
You are doing an awesome work, dude. Great character poses, great colors and lights.:thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup:
keep it up buddy:beer:

Neubius
06-17-2009, 01:14 PM
hey man :) indeed! here we go again man. much fun to be had with this one.
thanks for the comments, i can't wait to get back to it but have to do some pesky work!



;)

Neubius
06-17-2009, 03:11 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245251504_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245251504_medium.jpg)

couple more characters in, will add the full detail later. got to play with the environment a little...

Neubius
06-18-2009, 08:20 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245313204_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245313204_medium.jpg)

another character in. i really need to work in to the environment.

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Neubius
06-18-2009, 12:32 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245328319_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245328319_medium.jpg)

need to get working on the crowd, gets some items on the table; drinks, briefcase etc.

some kind of trade or meet going on between our 'mark' and the ronin dudes here.

having fun.

nwiz25
06-18-2009, 02:45 PM
woooooooooooooo! i missed a lot!
very nice colorful palette! maybe to draw more focus .. the other characters around him could be darkened a bit ... but still keeping that rim light to make it more dramatic ... especially for the one holding the gun ( in pink outfit ) ...

this will look even more cool with details!
all the best mate!:thumbsup:

Neubius
06-19-2009, 07:37 AM
nwiz25: howdy mate, here we are again :)

yeah, thought i'd get busy early, make sure i have enough time to finish this time!
thanks for the tips, i imagine i'm going to have my work cut out with the balancing.

Neubius
06-19-2009, 07:48 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245397704_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245397704_medium.jpg)

a little progress.
main character next, i'll finish these details off later!

Neubius
06-19-2009, 09:07 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245402434_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245402434_medium.jpg)

lighting on the blue girl was totally wrong, making a start on bringing it back. also, i think it's way to saturated. going to try some colour tests....

Neubius
06-19-2009, 01:18 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245417527_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245417527_medium.jpg)

Finally made a start on the Agent lady.
i think black hair may look better ..

DreamingOfAfrica
06-19-2009, 02:10 PM
I think your table needs some space-blow on it...

Neubius
06-19-2009, 02:26 PM
:D that's exactly what i was thinking.

Spongeali
06-19-2009, 07:20 PM
Have been watching this post for a couple of days now its really starting to come together :D good work!

Hamlet-ID
06-19-2009, 09:31 PM
It is getting very nice. I think the table need more colour reflexes, and it is a little empty. They could be trading something.

ejayM2
06-19-2009, 10:17 PM
I think your table needs some space-blow on it...

This got me laughing, lol! I do agree though, the table looks a little empty. But I'm sure you knew that already...

Neubius
06-20-2009, 01:52 PM
aesthitic: yeah was going to put some drinks and stuff on there, breif case possibly.
as for the space blow ... we talking scar face quantities ?? hahah


Madness-of-Hamlet: your right man, i am finding the more i put in the more the story getting clear in my head. i'm thnking a trade of some kind. once all the details are in i'll have what i need to put the reflections in. chers for the feedback! :)

Spongeali: hey thanks, i'm really enjoying myself here. :)

many thnaks for the encouragement folks !

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Neubius
06-22-2009, 12:41 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245674467_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245674467_medium.jpg)

didn't get a chance to work on it over the weekend.
on or two details and elements in now though.
time to flesh out the environment and start thinking about the crowd ...

ejayM2
06-22-2009, 04:07 PM
aesthitic: yeah was going to put some drinks and stuff on there, breif case possibly.
as for the space blow ... we talking scar face quantities ?? hahah


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Of course man! Your evil doer is hardcore like that yo!

Ataulfo
06-22-2009, 04:56 PM
Very good progress, buddy. Keep it up:beer:

Neubius
06-23-2009, 07:44 AM
Ataulfo: thanks dude ! more on the way :)

aesthitic: heehee i'll see how it looks !


cheers,
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Irawan
06-23-2009, 07:57 AM
great expression - overall!
the specular on her breast is to much but i tell you to early probably,
good work my friend.

polygonwarrior
06-23-2009, 07:59 AM
Hi. Good work buddy. But I think that the tile pattern is disturbing the feel and mood. even the scale of the tile is way too big. Putting the tiles gives the impression of the limit in distance and space.removing the tile might give ur image the depth. Just a suggestion. You can try :thumbsup:

Neubius
06-23-2009, 09:33 AM
Irawan: hey thanks man. :)
i think your right cheers, i'll calm that right down.

nandlaskar: ah you know i think your right. some thing was troubling me about that. Origonally it was going to be a mirror behind, it did add a lot of depth but it totally over complicated the scene.
I'll try the tiles smaller and move them back a little. cheers mate!
:)
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WyattHarris
06-23-2009, 08:50 PM
I tell you one thing. That girl in the back gets more and more interesting as the piece progresses.

dingwang6
06-23-2009, 09:07 PM
nice work!

yeah I like that black girl in the back too:bounce:

Meris
06-23-2009, 09:22 PM
I really like the disco ball lighting! It's subtle but adds a ton to the ambiance. It took me a while looking at the image to figure out why I was so drawn to the light. :thumbsup:

Neubius
06-24-2009, 08:16 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245831376_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245831376_medium.jpg)

just working up some details.

Neubius
06-24-2009, 08:20 AM
WyattHarris & dingwang6 : thanks ! :) she's my favorite too. I think i need to drop her shoulders down a little, what do you think ?

Meris: Thanks alot ! :) really enjoying working in to the details i just hope the composition holds together.

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Neubius
06-24-2009, 10:37 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245839878_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245839878_medium.jpg)

too much ? felt like she was missing something.

also i think i need to something, it feels saturated to the point of cartoony. i'll have to do some colour balance and contrast tests.

Neubius
06-24-2009, 01:42 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245850933_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1245850933_medium.jpg)

i think some of these bits are coming together. need to work on the overall image ... :/

Irawan
06-24-2009, 03:38 PM
her skin look better right now. her hand on the right side is to short.

WyattHarris
06-24-2009, 03:41 PM
WyattHarris & dingwang6 : thanks ! :) she's my favorite too. I think i need to drop her shoulders down a little, what do you think ?
Hmm, it gives her more of an on edge look being higher. Guess it depends on what you want to portray, relaxed or wound up.

Really like the new skin on the alien girl.

Zeoyn
06-24-2009, 07:16 PM
Hehe, the pimp look of "the mark" is spot on!
:cool:

MartinNielsen
06-25-2009, 07:50 AM
Looking good :) I think you can finish this piece soon.

Neubius
06-25-2009, 11:41 AM
MartinNielsen: hey thank you mate :) you never know, i might be in danger of actually finishing this one! still a lot more to go in

Zeoyn: cheers :D i thought i'd be working on him for ages but somehow got the face right ( i think ) first time.

WyattHarris: i guess i'm trying to get across that she's on edge but proffessonal. if you know what i mean, is it working ? :/ thanks for the props :D

Irawan: your right there , i'll get right on it :)


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supertorio
06-25-2009, 12:36 PM
Loving it so far! Keep up the work!

Zazill8
06-25-2009, 02:00 PM
Can't wait to see the next update

Neubius
06-25-2009, 05:55 PM
Zazill8 : yay thanks you :D

digitaltori : thanks very much. i've still got time to riun it! :)

XIA
06-26-2009, 08:29 PM
Man! You are way ahead of the game. Looking nice man! I wish I could help critique...but I am not really good at that. Keep them coming

Neubius
06-27-2009, 12:32 PM
XIA: hey thanks dude, not sure about ahead :) the more i put in the more i think i've yet to do :/
cheers :D
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deftsword
06-27-2009, 07:15 PM
I really like what you did so far,
I would have put more “action” or “drama” in your main character’s right harm, but the rest is going good.
As for the back wall tiles, I think they are perfect as is, cutting of the perspective emphases the depth of the front scene,
and a guy like this does not like to much going in to his back.

paperclip
06-27-2009, 07:24 PM
Looking great- I love the colours. Just one little thing bothers me- the main character's right arm is essentially cutting the picture in half. You could try having him with his elbow on the top of the seat and the rest of the arm draping down? That would lead back into the painting and keep the eye moving around.

Keep going, I like the way this is developing. :D

Neubius
06-28-2009, 07:14 PM
deftsword & paperclip : thanks alot, really usfull stuff! that will be be in next update definately.
really apreciate the crits.
nice one :)
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NinjaA55N
06-29-2009, 08:10 AM
hey buddy! I really love how ur piece is coming together! Nice characters, story and how r u rendering it. Have no crits at the moment, really like it :)

miycko
06-29-2009, 10:08 AM
Very nice painting style. No crits at the moment, I really like it.

Neubius
06-30-2009, 08:55 AM
miycko : thanks man !


NinjaA55N : cheers dude :D i'm really enjoying the characters, a few more to go in yet!
i'm am a little worried it's looking a little cartoony.. maybe it's too saturated or something, what do you reckon ?

cheers :)

DarwinsMishap
06-30-2009, 12:47 PM
I really like the detail work you've done on the female on the couch beside your 'pimp' (That's how I see him with that expression and gesture. XD)-nicely done so far on her!

I agree with paperclip on the arm, though. Very stiff, and unnatural in the posing-unlike the hand gesturing.

As for the saturation...Hm. Well, I would suggest, and this is just me, perhaps waiting until you are furhter along or almost finished before tweaking colors/saturation just yet. When I do such a thing it's in postwork so in case I need to add/detract from the scene I don't have to worry about correcting anything added or changed.

I can't wait to see the next still-and you've got my interest perked!

Neubius
07-01-2009, 08:12 AM
DarwinsMishap: thanks for the crits man, your absolutely right. got a bit of a rush on at work but will be updating as soon as possible :)

many thanks!
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:D

gpepper
07-01-2009, 01:22 PM
Already nice Alwyn !

ajitmenon
07-01-2009, 06:35 PM
totally pimpin'... :)
what else can I say?

it's neat... am looking forward to see you add more detail.

Neubius
07-03-2009, 09:08 AM
gpepper : thank you :D still a long ways to go !

ajitmenon : heehee thanks dude. not been able to do any for a while, work suddenly got mad busy. hopefully get back to it next week !

cheers :)
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miycko
07-03-2009, 10:07 AM
away for a week! too bad, can't wait to see what you'll have in store for us when you get back.

Neubius
07-06-2009, 07:47 AM
miycko : thanks mate :D
really keen to get back on this one !

Ferx
07-06-2009, 10:32 PM
Hey Alwyn,

Great work so far! :D Like a lot the atmosphere and mood in the image, really cool. Great details on your painting, The mirror glasses is a very cool touch! Waiting for more updates!! Cheers!! :beer:

Neubius
07-07-2009, 03:03 PM
Ferx : thanks mate :)
just been quietly checking everyones progress untill i get through this crazy workload. Really keen to get back on this pic. getting left behind now! ;)


cheers mate.

BadgerPirate
07-07-2009, 03:37 PM
I'm loving the dude.

He's begging to get owned.

Nice composition.

loki731
07-07-2009, 08:23 PM
nice. love your composition. youve definately got the mood of a club. your charactor design is really nice too. i really like the design of your aliens.

figueroa
07-09-2009, 05:57 AM
I love your concepts and the scene is coming along nicely

Neubius
07-10-2009, 07:40 AM
BadgerPirate : haha i was trying to make a face people just want to slap :) cheers man!

loki731 : thanks dude, a few more allien types to go in.

figueroa: cheers mate :) nealry through this big rush at work, should staert back on this nest week, fingers crossed!

:D

Neubius
07-21-2009, 08:07 AM
ok!

back and gettting busy, everyone's so far ahead now!
:) still plenty of time.
yay
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Irawan
07-21-2009, 08:10 AM
yeah,you are back miss your update.
you still have plenty of time,dont worry!and i know you are very fast.

need your feedback in my secret agent for detail touch! thanks,cheers.heri

Neubius
07-21-2009, 09:24 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248168280_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248168280_medium.jpg)

going to focus on the spy lady for a while. when i come back to the characters at the table i should have a better idea what to do :)

Neubius
07-21-2009, 09:24 AM
. .

Neubius
07-21-2009, 09:24 AM
(oops double post )

Irawan
07-21-2009, 11:08 AM
hi alwyn,the hand of her is a bit odd, seem to be her hand is broken,try to do like her pose by your self on the miror and see what going on. and the shoulder is to short/close to her neck.the facial expression is always great,

Neubius
07-21-2009, 01:05 PM
Irawan : thnaks man :) just kind of blocked that area in :/ need to sketch it out properly, cheers!

monsitj
07-21-2009, 01:10 PM
very nice painting , i'm sure if u finish it , it will be very nice image ,
for me , the yellow in the middle guy is a bit off from overall palete ,but maybe you have some idea in overall image , good luck:beer:

Neubius
07-21-2009, 01:59 PM
monsitj : thanks, i really hope i finish this time, not actually submitted a final image in the past 4 or so challenges ( pesky work :) )
yeah know what you mean, the ronnin/biker guy's is jarring a little. i'll see what i can do.
thnaks!

DarwinsMishap
07-21-2009, 07:25 PM
Can't wait to see this finished!!

Won't comment on what's already been pointed out, though I will agree with you one one thing-Pesky work!

I HOPE to get my next WIP finished and uploaded---oi. Not enough time in the day!

Neubius
07-22-2009, 12:50 PM
thanks man! good luck with it!

going to check your progress now ;) ...

DarwinsMishap
07-22-2009, 02:14 PM
thanks man! good luck with it!

going to check your progress now ;) ...

o.O Trust me, there's no need! XD I've yet to learn modeling, and the entry into this challenge was mainly for me to push myself in aspects of my art I haven't yet learned.
Shading.
Modeling.
Ect.

Though-the hair on the Yakuza is my VERY FIRST. I've learned quite a bit in this-and have more to do. The three renders I am going to meld together is just the first step...then it's the matte painting over it.

LOADS to do, but I'd appreciate any crits from you if you feel the need!

Ferx
07-22-2009, 08:00 PM
Hey Alwyn,

You are back my friend!! :D
Looking really nice.
Some points when watching your last post. One was pointed by Irawan, the right hand of the agent looks a bit odd. The proportion of the right arm is shorther than the left arm. Maybe you need to correct a bit the perspective of the right arm in a more foreshorten view, only a comment :) Perhaps you can make the eyebrows in a frown way, so she looks more focused on the mission, more a wish than a critic :)
Love the mood and environment on your concept, one of my favs! Cheers!! :beer:

SuperMario
07-23-2009, 09:02 PM
Looking good. I like this shot giving us more focus on the agent, then the mark.

Neubius
07-24-2009, 07:51 AM
Ferx : hey :D thanks man really appreciate it !
your absolutely right on those points - correcting now ;) i'll try out the frown as well,
cheers dude!

SuperMario : thanks! i've still got such along way to go :/

Neubius
07-24-2009, 07:52 AM
DarwinsMishap : it's looking good man! :)

Neubius
07-24-2009, 11:34 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248435257_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248435257_medium.jpg)

ok,
fixed a buch of things people have pointed out ( thanks :) super usefull )

also, i'm wondering if i should crop the whole image, similar ( a little wider )to how i have it here. I think the bouncer character may be unnecessary ?
they will still be plenty of other characters going in, parying on the periphery.

Neubius
07-24-2009, 01:26 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248441973_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248441973_medium.jpg)

'girl in the back' pretty much got her finished off, need to get more of the room in i think.
( ...have the 2d people really only got 15 days left ?? )

DarwinsMishap
07-24-2009, 02:53 PM
2D/3D...images do indeed have 15 days left, give or take a half.

I'm so far behind, I can't see my toes! Thanks, by the way! My poor comp is still trucking away on the first of the four final renders-three days along, now.

I really....really like how you've got the lighting set up here.

The bouncer elimination idea, to me, would toss your composition off. It could just be me, but each character adds dimention and interplay to your piece.

There's something ticking my left eye, though, on your spy lady. I know she's not done, and I think what other's suggested on her is what's tweaking my attention away from the rest of the grouping.

The detail on your lady in the back? LOVE. :applause:

Neubius
07-27-2009, 07:35 AM
thanks man super usefull :)
yeah , time's ticking away, we'd better get mad busy this week!

:D

Neubius
07-27-2009, 08:09 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248682168_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248682168_medium.jpg)

here's the overall composition, Still a lot of details plus peripheral characters to go in.
looks a little off balance to me.
could use a few suggestions !
:)

Neubius
07-27-2009, 11:10 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248693048_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248693048_medium.jpg)

couple more details in, really have to get moving on this, time's running short !! :)

DarwinsMishap
07-27-2009, 02:17 PM
Cripes, I know about that time. Crunch-time doesn't quite cut it, does it?

The comp on the last installment seems a bit off to me as well, perhaps because she is hiding behind a wall, and the bouncer is standing next to the doorway-it seems like they should be at the same doorway, instead of her being further forefront than the rest. The depth of field is off, to me, and perhaps that's why?

And no problem!

;)

Neubius
07-27-2009, 02:35 PM
ah, they're actually going to be pillars ( once i've got some more detail in ) there will be people drinking/ talking either side.
but yeah i see what you mean.
i think i'm going to do away with the pillar on the bouncers side,l and maybe move him back a little.
ta
:)

Neubius
07-27-2009, 03:38 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248709103_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248709103_medium.jpg)

couple more details in, plus added the light in back. been meaning to frame the guys at the table - but not entirely sure if this is the way to do it.

any how, more details .....

Neubius
07-28-2009, 10:03 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248775385_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248775385_medium.jpg)

ok!
:) trying to get the remaining components in so i can spend a bit of time simply working up details.

i'll probably make a few changes, but at least the body is in... i think.

still need to address the balancing of the whole thing but i reckon i'll do that next.

Neubius
07-28-2009, 01:03 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248786235_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248786235_medium.jpg)

got the bikers nearly finished.
need too start the bouncer.
the more i get in the more i'm worried about it just being a jumbled mess :/

Neubius
07-28-2009, 01:08 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248786532_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248786532_medium.jpg)

( posted wrong jpeg )

DarwinsMishap
07-28-2009, 01:25 PM
Great progress in this.:arteest:

I like that you've taken out that pillar-way too distracting along with blocking the flow of the piece.

You've added more people! XD A club has crowds, and the bouncer is there for a reason-right? From what I see here-Maybe the middle 'crowd' guy could be nearly shadowed away except for those lights you've used all over simulating some sort of disco ball effect. :) Just an idea, not really a suggestion to change!

I admire your style, and talent! Nicely done so far!

Hope I have time to post a quick idea-sketch on how I'll be blending/texturing my work in photoshop. Wish me luck!! Good luck to you, man-great work so far! :thumbsup:

Neubius
07-28-2009, 02:17 PM
thanks a lot man and massive luck to you too!
i'll a go at that cheers. I can't help wondering if my composition is rubbish. I may end up cropping a whole section of in the end to keep the focus on the scene :/ we'll see, i'll just get all the details in first and re evaluate :)

DarwinsMishap
07-28-2009, 02:33 PM
thanks a lot man and massive luck to you too!
i'll a go at that cheers. I can't help wondering if my composition is rubbish. I may end up cropping a whole section of in the end to keep the focus on the scene :/ we'll see, i'll just get all the details in first and re evaluate :)

Hm.

Believe it or not-I sometimes send my sketches off to a friend or four that AREN'T artists for their opinions. They always, always spot something 'off' with how things are set up. They never know what, just that the scene itself seems either cluttered and/or just plain wrong.

Obscure, I know, but it does help. Maybe do the same over there with yours?

Neubius
07-28-2009, 03:07 PM
yeah :) i've done that before ! generally this guy i used to work with, good friend of mine He's not an artist but he always seems to know what looks right.

cheers dude , i'll give him a prod !
:D

Neubius
07-29-2009, 11:18 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248866304_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248866304_medium.jpg)

doing away with the bouncer and adding this dude instead. Nearly got all the details blocked in at least!

Marat-Ars
07-29-2009, 11:32 AM
Nice characters and colors... It seems to me that the left robot doesn't fit into composition. Maybe you should replace it with something or remove at all ...IMHO:) GL!

Neubius
07-29-2009, 11:52 AM
i was thinking about that, but when i got him in there i thought he looked kind of cool :/
there was a character occupying the same spot earlier..
not sure what to do now ! :)
do you think it's because his colour isn't balanced yet with the rset of the pic ?

cheers

Marat-Ars
07-29-2009, 12:06 PM
i was thinking about that, but when i got him in there i thought he looked kind of cool :/
there was a character occupying the same spot earlier..
not sure what to do now ! :)
do you think it's because his colour isn't balanced yet with the rset of the pic ?

cheers

Try to change the pose...:)

walrus
07-29-2009, 01:20 PM
I like the new guy in the outfit that you've added because it ties him in with the boss and the other suited guys more. I think he could stand to be bigger: He looks only a few inches taller than the plain ol' guy in the background to the left of him, and it would be great if he were even more imposing. Also, his anatomy still needs a bit of work. Look, for example, at his left breast compared to his right: One is a lot larger, even though, pose-wise, he looks like he's facing us.

Overall, it would be nice to see some more sharp green rim light on some of the folks back in the scene. It's a great color you've established, don't waste it! :D Especially on the woman with the big afro, as her hair is blending into the wall - a nice rim-light fits the light in the scene and will help pull her a bit forward.

Good luck with the rest! :thumbsup:

Neubius
07-29-2009, 01:31 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248874275_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248874275_medium.jpg)

another lunch time's work :)

Neubius
07-29-2009, 01:46 PM
Marat-Ars : thanks, playing around with it now :)

walrus : this is just the stuff i need thanks. It's kind of got to the point where i can't really see it anymore if you know what i mean ! ( even after i've flipped it )

working on that stuff now,
thanks alot :)

DarwinsMishap
07-29-2009, 01:52 PM
I like the change here; this 'guard' fits better than your bouncer I believe. He's definitely part of the group with the stance, placement, and attire. The perspective is better here as well! Your agent definitely is in the forefront with all the action going on behind her-nicely done there!

I will agree with the green lighting bleeding onto your bad guy and his cronies in front of those lighted panels you have in your b/g wall-that would set it off perfectly.

Is it too late to suggest perhaps moving one of his arms to maybe signal one of those beside him to the left to back off? XD Call it my liking of attitude in pictures?

Great progress! :beer:

Neubius
07-29-2009, 02:17 PM
DarwinsMishap : thanks! :D i think it may be finally comng together.
i do feel it needs at least one more alien character in there some where as at the momnet there's only one :/
i'll try out a few hand gestures on the guy and see what happens.

cheers dude :beer:

DarwinsMishap
07-29-2009, 02:23 PM
DarwinsMishap : thanks! :D i think it may be finally comng together.
i do feel it needs at least one more alien character in there some where as at the momnet there's only one :/
i'll try out a few hand gestures on the guy and see what happens.

cheers dude :beer:

Hey, no problem! I really hate suggesting something that can put a lot of work into your progress, though-especially with the deadline looming. XD

Hmm...at least one more? *Squint-thinking* Perhaps a drunken alien for a bit of humor? ;)

LOL Cheers, man!! :beer:

Neubius
07-30-2009, 07:46 AM
not a bad idea :) could use some humour in there.

cheers mate !

Neubius
07-30-2009, 09:32 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248946357_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248946357_medium.jpg)

ok nearly at the point where i can start playing with the values etc.
going to swap the human guy out for an alien dude first the...

DarwinsMishap
07-30-2009, 12:56 PM
:bounce: I wanna see more! XD! I'm loving following your progress, mate! You have no idea how many ideas you've given me along the way. :D


Cheers-and hop too! I need to do the same if I want to make the deadline! Whoo!:buttrock:

Neubius
07-30-2009, 01:09 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248959363_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1248959363_medium.jpg)

thanks mate - had a bit of blast of productivity :) maybe because i can suddenly imagine finishing this one :D

i figure i can squeaze another alien on a stool on the left hand foreground and one in the back on the right!

fun

MartinNielsen
07-30-2009, 01:54 PM
Nice final, buddy :)

Neubius
07-30-2009, 02:14 PM
howdy mate.
i think i hit the wrong thing there, not quite final - still got a bit more to do.
thanks tho :)

DarwinsMishap
07-30-2009, 06:03 PM
o.O

You want to add more!? XD! I admire your inspiration! I think the one at the left foreground would be great-but wouldn't the right side be a tad bit crowded if you added another? Hm.

Maybe-maybe not?

I like the idea of the left side having another figure for sure-it still seems a bit empty to me? Maybe even a few more patrons milling around?

I can't wait to get home to work on my entry again. I started the textures on the wall, but the floor is killing me.

Nicely done, mate!! :applause:

Neubius
07-31-2009, 09:48 AM
actually, you might be right :) just one alien dude on the right, balnace it out, play with the pallette and i'm done.

your peice is really coming along man, stay with it :D !!!

Neubius
07-31-2009, 10:14 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249035252_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249035252_medium.jpg)

just a couple more details and i can address the over all image.

8 days to go !
:)

DarwinsMishap
07-31-2009, 01:25 PM
I see you've removed a few of the patrons in the back! Actually-that seems to even out the 'weight' of this if you understand that at all. ;)

I love all the details in this, you've really gotten this fleshed out nicely! Can't wait to see the rest/final image.

Eight days and counting-oi! Thank you for your encouragement! I really, REALLY hope I finish this. Being my first entry on this site, I've been excited over learning over actually winning anything.

>.> 'Course, that'd be nice, too. ;)

Cheers, mate! :beer: Keep plugging and I shall return! Mwha. :p

Neubius
08-03-2009, 07:47 AM
thanks man :) i really need to get the rest of these details finished so i can asses the whole image... hmmm being saying that for weeks now :/


:)
well, can't say it for much longer, need to get busy!

good luck mate, yours is coming along really nicely.

Neubius
08-03-2009, 08:44 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249289045_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249289045_medium.jpg)

looks like i may actually finished this time :) looks a couple of little bits to go in.

Neubius
08-03-2009, 01:07 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249304843_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249304843_medium.jpg)

feel like i'm making some progress now :)
hopefully get this wrapped up in the next couple days!
...hopefully...

XSIEN
08-03-2009, 02:57 PM
hey...
Thanks for leaving kind words.
Yours is also looking pretty awesome.
love the alien designs and the color palette.
Keep it up and keep up the good work!

ajitmenon
08-03-2009, 04:47 PM
heya Alwyn
coming along nicely! It would be good to focus lighting more on the center and keep the 2 peripheral characters in "darker " light or more silhouetted.. that way u establish good focus to the scene and enhance mystery.
:)

Neubius
08-03-2009, 06:14 PM
XSIEN : hey :)
thanks man. i'm a huge fan of line art, spent a few years in comics and always plan to do some more some day. anyhow :) was really impressed with your style, great work man, good luck in the comp!

ajitmenon : thanks man, at this stage this is exactly the stuff i need, i'll try that first thing in the morning :) perfect cheers!

A

ps if anyone's got any composition / lighting crits now is the time!
... please :)

ajitmenon
08-03-2009, 07:35 PM
Heya Allwyn
Ya I definitely think you can define your space better with lighting (if you have the time).
It looks like a night-club like setting.. usually those places have hidden soft lights all over, the ambiance is darker etc...
right now, the scene looks very evenly lit.
I think you can make this scene even cooler by making it more atmospheric.
:)
(I know I'm repeating myself from my last post.. :) )

PS: let me know what u think of my challenge if u have time... would love some constructive crit!

OZ
08-03-2009, 07:40 PM
HERE WE ARE! close to the finish line!! great job man!!!:thumbsup:

Neubius
08-04-2009, 08:11 AM
ajitmenon : thank you :) update on the way!

OZ : ha! hey mate :D cheers!
yeah, here we are again. Massive luck to you sir.

Neubius
08-04-2009, 08:17 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249373827_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249373827_medium.jpg)

just a little tightening / tidying and i think i may be there.
dunno :/

crits please! before it's too late and i flatten half the layers!
:)

Neubius
08-04-2009, 10:59 AM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249383557_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249383557_medium.jpg)

So
just need to get the brief cases in, work out what this guy looks like ( facing away ) maybe he should be alien :/ ?
and then i think i should leave it alone before i kill it...

rawgon
08-04-2009, 11:03 AM
Neubius,

Nice to see your progress, i really like the hue oriented coloring of you image very psychedelic sci-fi! and i just love the girl´s gun design!

good luck with your final touch ups, its almost done right!?

go for it man!

Neubius
08-04-2009, 01:45 PM
rawgon : Many thanks mate :)

yeah, nearly done, couple of brief cases to do, work out what kind of guy this dude on the left is (i'm thinking he needs to be alien, only one in the scene at the moment )
and then tidy up!

i think i'm actually going to finish this time, for what it's worth :)

Neubius
08-06-2009, 08:06 AM
arg!
need to get busy, time's running out!
stunning entries out there, good luck everyone :D
A

DarwinsMishap
08-06-2009, 09:59 AM
Hey mate!

Sorry I haven't posted lately-been crazy busy myself! Time IS running out!

The smoke on the left side is a great touch, perhaps make it less opaque? It's almost distracting...almost.

I'd leave the guy facing away from the 'camera' alone like y'said. XD If nothing else but to add to the "Humans aren't dead yet, Bub." ideal. If I was a thug-I'd want to keep my dealings upclose and personal with faces I'd know how to read the best.

This is turning out fantastic!!

I wish you the best of luck!

Neubius
08-06-2009, 05:34 PM
thanks mate :)
all abit of a rush now innit! i think your right dude, going to just get the brief cases in and tidy up.

final push now ! good luck to you!
:D

Neubius
08-07-2009, 12:25 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249647946_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/24/17641/17641_1249647946_medium.jpg)

have i finished :/ ?
i can't tell !

DarwinsMishap
08-07-2009, 03:09 PM
Wow...nicely done! :thumbsup:

At the moment, I can't see anything else to tweak-I like the idea of you loosing most of the people behind your 'guard', the smoke lightened up works beautifully with your lighting! The briefcase adds that 'agent' touch, perhaps a delivery of a weapon?! XD!

I like!

Honestly, can't say if you need more. Good luck to you-I'm still working on mine. Need to dirty and grunge up my floor a bit!

Cheers! :beer:
Barrios

Neubius
08-08-2009, 10:00 PM
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Software: Photoshop

Competition for resourses drives in the surrounding solar systems various factions to employ ever more devious tactics.

Humans have survived so many wars and catastrophes; the only way to exterminate them now is from the inside. A pill which is supposed to immunize humans from any virus actually renders all women sterile, leading the human race to a certain end.
The Ronnin will be the leading distributor in exchange of immunity later on. The exchange is about to take place on Orphea, only remaining neutral planet and therefore highly active in contraband and secret meetings.

The CIA has sent their top agent kriss Bristow to take the package out of circulation by any means necessary.

Ferx
08-09-2009, 07:20 AM
Hey Alwyn,

Congrats for your cool finale! :D Love the great lighting mood on your image, really awesome!! Cool textures and details and I like a lot the story behind the concept! :D Again, great work ... and now is time for a lot of tequila and beer!!:D Cheers my friend!! :beer:

MartinNielsen
08-09-2009, 11:29 AM
Good to see you made the deadline :) Nice final.

Neubius
08-10-2009, 09:05 AM
MartinNielsen : Thanks man, this one was kind of close in the end!


Ferx : And congrats to you too dude ! :) really glad you liike it, but i've done my usual thing : hate it by the time i've finished! ha
" tequila and beer!! " finished up on saturday and drank lots of wine ! :beer:


DarwinsMishap : hey dude, thanks for the support through out this one, it's been fun. Great piece mate glad you got it finished :beer:
A

diissar
08-10-2009, 10:06 AM
Congratulations!!!nice composition,i like how your image is focused on the guy in the middle of the image,good jub
good luck!!!^^

Neubius
08-10-2009, 02:23 PM
yay thanks!

the composition was the bit i was most worried about :)

jmon999
08-10-2009, 02:27 PM
Absolutely superb mate

Love the way this has developed - so much for the better - nice and bright, whilst still retaining a sense of dark foreboding

love the assasin chick

brilliant guards


well done

DarwinsMishap
08-10-2009, 04:07 PM
:beer:

I'm so glad I got to see how your piece progressed! Thanks for your input on mine, as well! It *has* been fun, and although I have no idea if I'll be in on the next challenge/contest, one can hope I'll have the time!

Good luck, cheers, and I look forward to seeing more of your works! :cool:

luminoustooth
08-10-2009, 05:33 PM
Very very cool!

Neubius
08-11-2009, 07:54 AM
luminoustooth : Thanks ! so you entering the next challenge ? :)

DarwinsMishap : Cheers mate. yeah, i picked a funny time to enter this one- super busy at work! ...actually can't wait for the next one now :beer:
jmon999 : thanks man! :D

na
08-12-2009, 11:37 PM
Looks great mate! I need to get going before it's too late!

Neubius
08-13-2009, 08:12 AM
thanks man :)
"I need to get going before it's too late!" dude the 'image' section has closed already :(

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