Architecture- BWW WIP

[brammelo]

(a) The white building block on the left is too prominent - I think a darker color on the left would emphasize the building in the middle.

(b) the white pedestals (?) in the front are a bit strange. Meant for compositing?

(c) The neon glow on the right is too intense.

(d) The coulds are too white (or the sky is too clear)

(e) the light projection on the parking lot could be made more dramatic with a radial pattern.

(f) There is no horizon on the right side of the picture.

Hope this helps :)

Cheers,
BaRa

[flingster]

the wall lamps are to uniform...maybe tweak the brightness on each one slighty...other than that i think brammelo really covered it.....like image though...very atmospheric.
:thumbsup:

[JIII]

nice when this is finished it should rock its just missing a few things now which bramello pointed out perfectly.

I also would have a sunset or something it feels like sunset in your pic.


nice

[FredSpeaks]

Thanks for the comments. I should have another rendition up later tonight. The white areas at the bottom of the image are where "islands" would be in the parking lot, but the in the final image they will be cropped out. I will crop the next image to fit to the final porportions. I would also like to do something about the building to the right (the white mass) but unfortunately, it is existing and must stay the way it is (for the client). I also think I should replace the images behind the glass, I am going to go and photograph a resturant to night to use for the glass background.

Thanks again!:)

[Chrissyboy]

Hi FredSpeaks - just an idea, but you could increase the impact of the image immediately by bringing the camera closer to the ground and making it look up at the building - this would pull the viewer into the scene much more, and increase the focus into the middle of the image. It's a bit neutral at the moment.

Looks good so far! - C

Originally posted by FredSpeaks
Thanks for the comments. I should have another rendition up later tonight. The white areas at the bottom of the image are where "islands" would be in the parking lot, but the in the final image they will be cropped out. I will crop the next image to fit to the final porportions. I would also like to do something about the building to the right (the white mass) but unfortunately, it is existing and must stay the way it is (for the client). I also think I should replace the images behind the glass, I am going to go and photograph a resturant to night to use for the glass background.

Thanks again!:)

[FredSpeaks]

Okay, I have changed the background to a more sunset setting, varried the lighting a bit on the front of the building, added some shadow casting lights in the parking lot, changed the images behind the glass. Still have to add in cars and fix up the horizion line on the right hand side. Unfortunately, I can't change the viewing angle too much, the architect said it should be from there.

http://www.fred-speaks.com/bdubs2.jpg

[Cyborgguineapig]

The newer version is much better:thumbsup:

[FredSpeaks]

Thanks for all of your suggestions. I think it made the image stronger. Here is how it turned out.

http://fred-speaks.com/Ab.jpg

[flingster]

the right hand side was worth that extra effort imho.
good job...:thumbsup:

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