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[Soulstorm]

hey, excellent work. it would make more sense if i knew more of the story behind these pictures but from what i can see its very good, keep on going :thumbsup:

[puddlefish]

nice work, the perspective on the house on the second page is off in relation to its environment. also, the colouring of the character could use some more work. check out eastman and laird's work on tmnt book 4 (they use a similar linework technique, and the colours are quite nice).

other than that, i'd say you might need to think a little more about your composition. not of the panels necessarily, but of the images within them and how your eye is lead from one to another. this is especially important in this sort of sequence where the viewer is being lead through an environment. check out 'lone wolf and cub' for some masterfully executed cinematic sequences (and because it's the best damn comic ever made!).

hope this helps!

[Hyptosis]

Awesome guys, thanks for the feedback. Puddle, I'll check those out. You guys are great.

[Hyptosis]

http://www.lorestrome.com/trash/page001b.jpg

http://www.lorestrome.com/trash/page002b.jpg

Just an update, that second page is still going to be redrawn I think. I want to save the last panel if at all possible.

[Hyptosis]

Possible second page?

http://www.lorestrome.com/trash/page002c.jpg

[Hyptosis]

I'm just going to start over from scratch like I originaly said.
Here is what I've got so far guys. Crits means the world to me.



http://www.lorestrome.com/trash/page001d.jpg

http://www.lorestrome.com/trash/page001c.jpg

http://www.lorestrome.com/trash/page001e.jpg

[Hyptosis]

http://www.lorestrome.com/trash/page001k.jpg

This is where I am at right now.

[Vushvush]

Just wanted to say, that your revisions seem to be taking a step backwards. You usually are dead on at the beginning with what you NEED to show, but end up changing it to show more of space/time between pannels.

"Food is almost ready" ---> Giving the food (RIGHT)

"Food is almost ready" ---> making the food ---> Giving the food (Doesn't really add anything of substance)


Same thing with the little lizard, we don't need to see it walk across the branch. We may not even need to see it standing there. But the best one I think was standing, striking..... no need for more "showing the steps between".

[Hyptosis]

Really, thats odd. I tohught so too, but so many people said they couldn't tell the lizard was moving accross the log, that I needed to add a second frame. Too simple, or not simple enough... *le sigh*

In any event...
http://www.lorestrome.com/trash/page001m.jpg

Tnx for the feedback Vushvush

[Hyptosis]

http://www.lorestrome.com/images/recast001b.jpg
All done!

Also did this recently.
http://www.lorestrome.com/images/LordOfThePatch.jpg

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