Character: Pirate of carribbean please critique..

[PseudoXavier]

The arm with the sword seems a bit long and same with the neck. If anything you should go back and rework the proportions before throwing down too many details. Overall id say its a good start though.

[Goro]

I agree with PseudoXavier. I think the torso is a bit too long.
It would help if you draw actionlines first for the rough proportions. When you have a rough sketch you can start
to building the character.

[TimmyKing]

i like the way drawing lines...why dont you try put color in?:rolleyes:

[Levitateme]

i have his neck long and skinny like that because i figured he would have nothing on him. but maybe its to long, i like that ill bringhis head down. also his arm is to long ill change that too thanks. i dont think his torso is to long though, its hard to tell but you can see his naval in that pic, and his shirt is going to be flapping around in the wind. any one have any ideas for his left arm, i dont like how it his holding the sword, it could be doing something else, if anyone has ideas. thanks

[flyingkongque]

hi, i think the neck is good, so it looks scary.

[Levitateme]

well i really appreciate the people who are taking time to reply to this. so today i am going to update it ill post when i wake up. thanks everyone...btw i just got mostly stuff like. his arm is to long. i was hoping to get some stuff like add a coat on him with beads hanging from it. soemthing like that haha. but really if anyoen has some ideas wardrobe wise so he isnt so plain , that would still be really great thanks.

[Levitateme]

Here is my updated pic, i changed alot. when i color it i will add the zombie type skin. i couldnt draw it because my piece of paper was so small. i noticed i noticed! the legs, the should be brought down. i didnt realize that until i was getting actual detail done. so i said empreiembo!, ill just fix that in photoshop. im going to start coloring tonight maybe. im going to color it really dark, i wanted him to look like a french man, i was thinking of the movie the OTHERS. the father in that movie i like his face, i tried doing a face kinda like his. although when its colored i doubt you will be able to tell.

my scanned image is really big so i can add lots of detail, stuff i couldnt on paper. hopefully it wont turn out to be horrendous.


http://home.bresnan.net/~planetofsound/WebHelp/PirateUpdate.gif

[KazuyaMochu]

on this last one, you got a strange mix betwen shadings. like, very good gradient shading and than you have heavy outlines.
maybe you could let go of one of them.

but looks cool non the less.
specialy the first one!

[Levitateme]

i just started coloring this today. i have just got some rough details on his skin and coat that is all for now. i am just updating. when its all done it will have fine details but you know, just rough for now.

BTW, if anyone actually views this thread and is wondering why he is blue. that is my mask, it was just on while i saved and its blue because the layer over it is on multiply.

http://home.bresnan.net/~planetofsound/WebHelp/Pirateupdate2.jpg

[KazuyaMochu]

AAAAHHHH color!

when I was a kid, i never liked to color my drawings. I though it wasn't important. People just keep proving me wrong!

I think you getting it quite good. But it lack depth. maybe youd could go for something called "Distance Cue" ( I think)
the objectcs coloser ar brighter, and the ones fare, are darker.

in your drawing you could just go, not for objects, but for areas.
for example, the chest and the belly could be brighter than the arm pits and belly sides. the face could be righter that the neck.
the left arm could be just a little darker...

this would also help you getting some sort of separation, which is, in the end, depth

[Levitateme]

thanks for replying kazua, im a big fan of yours. yah i know exactly what you mean, im working on his lower extremeties right now. like i have some rough color on his pants and shoes. ill update again in like a hour or 2 thanks for the advice. i appreciate because thats basically what im going to do . ciao

[Levitateme]

about 30 min of extra work, i just wanted to update so people werent seeing blue anymore, i havent got fine details anywere yet. just adding color still.

http://home.bresnan.net/~planetofsound/WebHelp/Pirateupdate3.jpg

[Levitateme]

i realize all these replies on this thread are from...me...well im still working on this i spent some time in the face now, i shrink the image on these updates, you cant see the details really . there arent any either but im getting some stuff done. like his jacket needs lots of work same with his skin. lots of work still but im going to take a nap. ill work on later tonight bye.http://home.bresnan.net/~planetofsound/WebHelp/Pirateupdate4.jpgoi it looks horrible right now. just glancing at it. but im sure will turn out fine when im done just early stage.

[jeandenis]

I guess this feedback comes a bit late, but I would thought more on the pose, it's not very dynamic, or not scary, depending on what you are going for.
It looks more like a cultivated pirate, kinda.
The colors look good though.

I really liked the first drawing, but check your silhouette on it, his left arm is in front of the body.

Thanks for the Alien feedback.

Cheers
Jean-Denis

animation (http://www.jeandenis.net/animation.htm)

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