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toyBunny
02-24-2009, 06:03 AM
Hi all,
I'm starting work on a new personal shot and would very much like to hear your thoughts. It's in the rough blocking stage right now, so as I move on, I would like to hear what may or may not be working. If there's something you think I could do better, please lemme know what I can do, but also PLEASE lemme know WHY it would be better as well. I find that it helps me a great deal to know WHY something's not working and not just that it's wrong. Thanks for you time.

PS - Something that may be missed is that on frame 368, the masked man is reaching to snatch the cigarette that the girl is holding in her hand. Still working on that!! http://www.11secondclub.com/forum/img/smilies/smile.png

Click here! (http://toybunny.com/animation/rough-blocking-pass/)
(http://toybunny.com/blog/wp-content/uploads/2009/02/maskedman_007.m4v)
theskydreamer2003
02-24-2009, 07:28 PM
some critique to u work.
-in the first frame where the masked man appears its position looks very unnatural... he would fall on his buttocks. isn't a to hero-ish pose that back flip and the kneeling pose wouldn't be its ending.
-the buttocks of the lady look to be very unnatural that high(she doesn't have high heals on that shoes). and i may add that her posture isn't enough feminine.
- a little bit of bumpiness to his chest wouldn't hurt, to show his (heroic) ego
-her first pose is way to manly and even if she's afraid a woman legs stay close togheter, especially her hips, from the knees down, another thing. that's just the way woman are!

hope i helped u, chees :D
toyBunny
02-24-2009, 08:03 PM
Thanks theskydreamer2003 (http://forums.cgsociety.org/member.php?u=342746),
That's exactly what I need to hear. I'll bear that in mind when I do my next pass!

tB
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