CGTalk - Allegory of Insight

Mboehman

02-16-2009, 02:12 AM

Hey, this is my latest pic. Been working on it for a couple weeks. I actually used a reference photo for this one. My friend posed and I took the picture. I just used it for reference, I did not paint over it.
The picture is supposed to be my interpretation of what insight would look like. The picture is due in a week so I need as many C&Cs as I can get. Please let me know what you think!

I especially want crits on the gears. Do they look all right or could they be better? And what do you think about the halo of thoughts? There are words on the halo, do they need to be more distinct? And is the background okay or does it need something else?
Thanks in advance.

Here is the picture.

http://thirteenoclock.com/mboehman/insight.jpg

And the reference.

http://thirteenoclock.com/mboehman/insight_source.jpg

Mboehman

02-16-2009, 09:39 PM

Here is an update. I changed the halo back to my original idea of a stream. I really need to know what you all think about the thought stream. I've had mixed reviews from my friends.

Here it is: Sorry that it's so huge.
http://thirteenoclock.com/mboehman/insight2.jpg

Please let me know what you think!

acb12

02-19-2009, 11:19 PM

hmm i think it turned out quite nice tho...something is preventing the portrait (at least on my point of view) from being exacly as your refrence image and im not sure about the cause tho it might be the nose cuz you made the upper part too straight and it has abit of an angle on the original and the left ehh....nose hole ( @_@ i forgot how its called in english >.>) is abit smaller then your friends one .
about the background i liked it altough it might look better if instead of those lines you drew on the top of the image yull smooth it up\adding those smooth tones + the lines like in the lower part if the image making it look like shes in another dimension of some sort while shes thinking

in both cases i rly liked this pic ^_^

and btw i liked the fact that the grinding of the wheel creates an "idea" lol gj ^_^

Mboehman

02-19-2009, 11:43 PM

Thanks so much for your comments. I'm glad you like it overall.
I will definitely try and fix the nose and I will experiment with smoothing out the background.
Thanks again!

P.S. Nose hole is called nostril in English.

Mboehman

02-21-2009, 01:21 AM

This is the final draft of my picture as it is now posted in my gallery. It was due today so I won't be making any more changes. Thanks for the advice, acb12, it helped.

Here is the link: http://mboehman.cgsociety.org/gallery/

hope you guys like it!

DArcy1

02-21-2009, 02:56 AM

One thing I will say is this is absolutely light-years beyond your previous works. Well done !

D'Arcy

Mboehman

02-22-2009, 01:39 PM

Thanks so much! I have been drawing a lot from two art classes in school and figure drawing after school. I'm so glad you can see an improvement because that's what I'm aiming for with each picture. I hope my next one will put this one to shame.

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