Entitled, Elephant, Run!

[CybrGfx]

It's pretty poorly composed, and pretty poorly executed.
It looks like someone running from an elephant pooping blood, with far too wide a screen, and far too much wasted, empty, white space.

You need to remember that CGS has many members who are industry professionals. As such, simple little 3 hour photoshop filter pieces seldom will display the amount of effort or skill required to display your works in the finished gallery...
~C

[Tripdragon]

I don't wish to argue. I wish to know then. Of my use of white space. What would be a better alternative then?

Does the red tick you off? Other elements do not scream redo?

I wish to know. Otherwise your critique does not really point me in any new directions of recomposing.

Not getting in the gallery is a whatever mood in my head right now. Understanding what I might do to fix it is a fuel that I need.

[CybrGfx]

Good for you! In the end, the gallery is but a moment. What you learn and apply will remain with you for life.

About the white space ~ It is called "Balance." Your work is unbalanced, because the amount of "negative, or empty space, so vastly outweighs the "positive" space, where you have painted something. You have no background to occupy the eye, so why do you need all that nothing?

The main subject of your artwork should attract the eye.
The composition of your artwork needs to MOVE the eye all around your canvas, and then back to your main subject. When you have your main subject plopped in the middle of your canvas, with nothing going on in the background, the viewer can clearly tell what your subject is, but where is the visual enjoyment of looking at the work? It is just THERE. Dead center, no allure, no desire to linger and study the piece. One look, and you've seen it all.

The red does not tick me off. It confuses my eye and looks illogical and nonsensical. If it is a smear of someone the elephant crushed, it should not appear as blood shooting out from his butt...THAT could have been filling some of that vast, empty space, with some runny streaks, and a puddle on the ground, with a few dark bits of clothing. This would then give a better story to the elephant and the man running from it. That is just one example.

A good composition does not just magically appear on your canvas, it is a process that requires a lot of THINKING, in order to make a GOOD artwork. Bad art can be created in just a few hours, and usually looks it.

~C

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