Stranded in Sharkish Waters

[PretendArtist]

Nice composition in leading the eye through the image. Nice color palette and little details like the feathers from her wings in the mouth's of the sharks.

There are a few things I would like see. One would be the rock structure beginning to give way. Something along the line of some rocks breaking off to draw some more attention to this interest shape, yet weak structurally. It also wouldn't hurt to have some dirt or pebbles sliding off the top of it or a cargo ship of some sort on the horizon to give some sense of hope. Either in the light on the left side (kind of cliche & would read too quickly) or the dark on the right, which would be more dramatic and subtle (last read in your image). The wings on her back would be more interesting if there was an odd number of feathers on here back, along with some feather tuffs floating off and down towards the sharks (following that same upper right to bottom left line you have running through your scene).

Look forward to seeing how it turns and good luck :thumbsup:

[MattVG]

@PretendArtist: Thank you for your thoughts and critiques.

I hadn't thought of having some of the rock crumble. I will definitely put that in; perhaps not at the thinnest part but at least around her hands so the viewer realizes that the rock is unstable.

I had thought about putting a ship on the horizon but that would make her less stranded. I want her to be in dire and inescapable peril with no rescue visible. I want the viewer to feel for her :cry:

Yes, she definitely needs a bit more to the tattered wings on her back. I was originally imagining that the wings had been torn off by sharks at the base where they connect to her back, but perhaps I should create a bit more wing structure that's been left. What do you think?

You've reminded me that I was wanting to put some floating bits in the air around her, but I forgot because I wasn't sure what they should be. Bits of feather is great idea. Thank you!

[PretendArtist]

Glad to be of some use :)

Yeah I think its more interesting and dramatic not to have any rescue in sight. However, I think the facial expression will need to better reflect that. Currently, it is too calm, rather than horrified and crying (she just lost her wings after all). It wouldn't hurt to have some of her clothing torn (I don't think that they would just go for the wings :) ) She is also pretty dry for just evading death in the water after losing her wings. Soaking wet hair will lose some of that weightlessness in the scene and ground it more in this moment.

Do you have a little story as to how she came about being in this situation?

It might also be a good idea to change the perspective of the platform a little. Right now we are hovering a little bit above eye-level and slightly tilted down on this scene. By making the camera angle a low-angle with her above us, it places the viewer in a position of helplessness.

[Ragnarok]

I'm not nearly at your skill level (and just joined this site) but as far as I can tell the perspective of the water is pretty off. It looks like it's going uphill which would only make sense if it's a wave coming in but I don't really think it looks like a wave at the moment.

but in any case there's a fair chance that I don't know what I'm talking about so take the above with a grain of salt :)

[PretendArtist]

I wouldn't worry about the perspective of the water being "off." I would say there is little perspective going on since it is a landscape of moving water, which goes up and down, tilts things and all that stuff. Along you do have a small glimmer of a horizon line, which would mean the perspective is a little off on the surface of the rock and you'd have to tilt the top like I was mentioning before. But hey, I could be wrong too :shrug:

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