The Beehive Theory

[mister3d]

This is really funny :D I know you have health problems, but this movie is really funny and cool, so you proved to make something quite funny, I was really laughing. I was expecting it to be something simple and plain, but it turned to be pretty good. :thumbsup:
It certantly has an inner sense, so it enriches it. So I would only want to see richer textures, everything else is done at a quite good level (to my taste).
Short movies is our ability to be heard, and this has a strong message. I think you did a great thing, and I hope you do more short films in the future. I gave it to watch to other people I know, and they found it to be funny too.

[Kanga]

Pretty freakin cool Kees!
Well done man. I think you would like the tv space rangers in gta 4!

Cheerio Chris

[DimensionalPunk]

Thanks guys.

I would only want to see richer textures

Texturing is I think my weakest area, I would really like to improve there. Sculpting and texturing are hard to do with my mouth, so I don't enjoy doing them as much, which makes it hard to improve.

I'm open to no holds barred critique, I want to know what could be better. Let me have it.:)

[Kanga]

I think you should get a quicktime version up or an flv that isnt tied to youtube because I cant get the thing to stream. Usually if you pause it will keep loading so you can play it off in one whack. This one doesnt so I cant see your timing to see if there is dead air in there.

The cross joke is weaker than the core joke which is we are the same. The cross thing waters it down a bit. I think with this kind of humour the symbols can be a bit less obvious, like you wouldn't say alkida but suggest it, same with the buckle. When he hits the tree it is a bit gentle. For that movement see the dynamics as iron man tries on his boots for the first time and fires them up,... spat! When you get stung by bees that would hurt like hell, that makes the animation a bit soft,... he seems to be able to take it when he should be mad as a hatter and way more frantic, although the movements are really nice. Bees really well animated.

Still stay with the job well done :D
Edit: I think you must have learned alot at your internship. The above remarks are just suggestions, I think the short is commercial quality!

[Atwooki]

Hey there Kees
This is looking really good - Well done :)

Useful suggestions from Chris above, and I feel I might offer a couple of texturing & design crits if that's OK:

You have a well-textured tree here, but I believe it would benefit a lot from having a more 'toony' feel to it - to be more in keeping with the general stylisation and humour you've generated in the rest of your project.
By the same token, I reckon getting some facial and hat textures down would also aid in a more 'full' completion here....

Looking very good though, and more essentially, you've given this a unique touch of humour & personality, which will undoubtedly carry all a long way through overall ;)

Hope it helps, and have a GREAT New Year in 2009 !!!

regards

Chris

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