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doffer
11-11-2008, 07:38 AM
Christoffer Andersen is entered in the "Steampunk Myths and Legends" update: View Challenge Page (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/view_entries.php?challenger=15609)

Latest Update: Finished Video: upload
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MrHobby
11-11-2008, 07:39 AM
Good Luck!

doffer
11-11-2008, 07:40 AM
This is SO cool.
I have no experience with this subject, but looking at artwork done by other people, seems amazing, so I'm looking foreward to dig into this.

Cheers and good luck to all of you!

@Richard: Thanks mate. Good luck to you too :)

doffer
11-11-2008, 05:30 PM
I'm thinking of some kind of icaros/ikaros kinda thing, at least in theme.
I'll try get something down on paper, within the next couple of days.

doffer
11-12-2008, 03:51 PM
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Initial concept art of character and machine. Not finished design!

doffer
11-12-2008, 03:53 PM
STORYLINE:

OLD MAN STORY



The main character is old, really old. He is so old, that he is nearly dead, extremely bended foreward and bad walking.

His lifelong dream is to be able to fly freely like the birds do.



He has build a huge maching, 2-3 times bigger than himself, which can carry him in the air, at least in theory.

It has huge pipes and is build by all sorts of different stuff he has found.

He takes it on with a big struggle, the machine is really heavy.



After a few tries it takes off, and within few seconds he is in fact flying with the birds.

He gets more and more excited about it and pushes the machine beyonds its capablities.



It breaks apart in the air and he crashes down to the ground.

We see a flash back of him, perhaps narrated, writing a goodbye letter to his children, saying that they shouldn't worry, his biggest dream has come through, and he died a very happy man.

He takes a last look at the picture of his dead wife, before closing the envelope with the letter, putting it on the table.



Back in the present, we see a big carriage standing, top loadede with crap (pardon my french).

As he thinks he will die of the crash he instead lands in the big pile, surviving.

At first he lands on his back, with the maching in the dirt, but after a few seconds it tips over, pushing him into it, and settles on top.



END




I'm not sure about the whole steampunk thing. I've never involved myself into this theme, so if the story or the design lacks of steampunk-theme, please say so and I'll try to correct it.




Cheers

Pyke
11-12-2008, 07:12 PM
Your story definitely has steam-punk elements to it.

Looking forward to seeing some more!

mim-Armand
11-13-2008, 07:06 AM
the sketches looks promising for me, and the concept behind them!
I like the vision and the style of story, will check here for next updates

cheers and goodluck buddy, :thumbsup:

Deje3D
11-13-2008, 04:33 PM
Nice :) I like the story, And i'm looking forward to some updates ;)

See ya soon..

doffer
11-13-2008, 05:13 PM
@mim-Armand: Thanks a lot. I'm glad you like it.
I'll post some more concepts soon.

@Pyke: Cool! I'm glad you see some steampunk in it. More will definately follow :)

@Dennis: Hey mate. Glad you like it :) I'll post updates soon!

doffer
11-13-2008, 05:55 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1226598951_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1226598951_large.jpg)

Some more concept art.
I'll move on to storyboarding soon, so I can get the story down.

ivanisavich
11-13-2008, 06:18 PM
Haha...love the juxtipositon (sp?) in size of the machine and the man :D

doffer
11-17-2008, 05:51 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1226944275_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1226944275_large.jpg)

Just getting more and more into the shapes.
I've got my story down in writing, so next up will be the storyboard.

doffer
11-17-2008, 05:53 PM
Thanks a lot, ivanisavich.
I love the work you've done previously and in this challenge too :)

doffer
11-17-2008, 10:32 PM
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Panel 1 of 3

doffer
11-17-2008, 10:34 PM
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Panel 2 of 3

doffer
11-17-2008, 10:36 PM
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Panel 3 of 3

doffer
11-18-2008, 09:48 PM
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Software: Maya

first glimpse of the main character. nothing much yet, just wanted to get going. I hope it'll be done by the end of the week, together with his machine. And then rigged by the end of next week, so I can start animating. I'm sure that will be the big time consumer.

puashey
11-19-2008, 11:23 AM
looks promising ;)

good luck with that one.

TCPortfolio
11-19-2008, 05:49 PM
Man, this is a really cool story. I think it is going to make an incredible short! I can't wait to see how it turns out. Good luck.

doffer
11-19-2008, 06:52 PM
@Puashey:
Thanks mate. It's good to hear. I'll definately need the luck ;)

@TCPortfolio:
Hey man. I'll really glad you like it.
I hope I can follow this all the way home.

I hope to have modelled both the man and the machine, and rigged both, for the end of the next week (week 48), and to start animation from week 49, but if it will happend before that, then it's fine by me. A lot of work need to be done.

Deje3D
11-19-2008, 08:29 PM
Hi Christoffer.

Looking good :) I think you could push the perspective more in some of the shots in your story, to make some more tension. Most of the shots seem very neutral.

Maybe you could have a camera more from below at the Heat-o-meter. Or something :)

Keep it up ;)

doffer
11-19-2008, 10:33 PM
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Software: Maya

Another update.
I spend a while working on the collar og his shirt. Haven't been modeling for some time now, so I had a bit of trouble making a nice flow around that area, but I eventually worked it out pretty well, I guess.

Nothing much to say. Just have to work some more on it in general, but the basic shape is coming along fine.

@Dennis:
Yeah, true. I could probably push the angles a bit more.
I'll leave that to when I actually have to set the cameras up in 3d space. For now, I believe it will work as it is.

doffer
11-20-2008, 07:15 PM
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Software: Maya

Yet another update.
Moving along with the basic of the character. I only need the head now, and then add a all of those details, that makes it a lot more interesting to look at.
Although I think most of it will come in the texturing.

I'll try and keep it all very simpel, though.

musi
11-20-2008, 10:01 PM
Hi Christoffer,

It's a nice touching story you have got here :) Simple and clean designs too.

Is that the low poly character that you are going to rig? I am working as a rigger and character TD, and if I would to rig a cartoony character like that, I would ask my modeler to add some loops in strategic places, where the character is to bend the most. One loop between knee and ankle, and hip and knee is too little - skinned geometry will collapse on bend, and specially on twist. The same goes for arms. It would also be good to add a couple of loops across the body and along sides of the body for the same reason. And at least one more loop across the neck...
Usually, I would ask my modeler to give me 5 loops across the joint. Say for a knee there would be a middle loop and 2 loops in the both directions from it, for getting a nice falloff in skinning.
I can see you have a nice little bend in knees, it would be nice to have the same for elbows - just to define where the elbow is, and to have an angle for IK handle to know in which direction to bend.

Just some thoughts :)

Shape is very nicely captured.

Good luck!
I am going to join the video category too, as a team member :)

doffer
11-21-2008, 05:57 PM
Hey Musi :)
Thanks a lot for your reply.
You've got some very good pointers there.
My idea is to give it a smooth division of 1 after modeling, which I am gonna unwrap and rig/skin/animate upon.
For rendering I'll give it yet another smooth division, landing on a total og 2 divs.

I'll hopefully work some more on it tonight, and I'll show the skinning wire then, but you can get a general idea in the first character WIP I postet :)

Cheers

doffer
11-21-2008, 11:01 PM
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Software: Maya

Still modeling on the character. It should be done tomorrow or the next day at least.

@Musi:
To the right you can see the density that I'll be skinning/unwrapping/animating in.
The actual mesh I'm working with now is a lot less dense, but it is a bit too low poly, so the shape changes a lot from no smooth to smooth with 1 div.

For rendering it'll get yet another division.

doffer
11-23-2008, 12:26 AM
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Software: Maya

Yet another update, but getting close on finalizing him!
Spend the entire day today, working on him. Just need the last touches on the face, and unwrap it, then I'm done!

Deje3D
11-23-2008, 01:06 PM
U know i Like it ;)

A little feedback...

If you look closely you can see that the texture is mirrored, maybe that should be changed. Also, when you make texture, it would be nice with some more details, i bit like this:

http://www.onlineseats.com/upload/theater/760_the_shrek.jpg

U can see the fabric. I think it would give a nice toucht to your character.

doffer
11-24-2008, 11:32 PM
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Software: Maya

Okay, I think I'll leave him as he is for now. He'll work the way he is, I think.
I have devoted some time for texturing, so it'll be worked on some more, later on.
Now I'll move over to the machine.

@Dennis:
Yeah, dreamworks rocks! Hehe, I see what you mean of course. I've added a bit more fabric in the texture, but I'll leave it for now. I would like to keep it simple.

doffer
11-25-2008, 11:29 PM
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Software: Maya

First view of the machine.
Nothing much to say. I'm trying to work as close to the concept as possible.
Getting the toony style transferred into 3d, but still make it look like it could fly (even though it couldn't in any way, what so ever).

Like a bumblebee, right? ;)

doffer
11-26-2008, 11:05 PM
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Software: Maya

Worked some more on the machine.
Just need a few more details to make it look homemade and old.
Then it's texture and rigging time :)

Doerge
11-26-2008, 11:36 PM
looks promising.. as you already mentioned, a little more time spend on the textures wouldn't hurt.. especially on the skin as it seems to be very likely to burn out when lighting.

The goggles might need some colorwork too or something, cause it's a little hard to seperate them from the eyes.

Everything else, top notch! I like it! Good luck! :thumbsup:

doffer
11-27-2008, 11:11 PM
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Software: Maya

Another update.
Need to place bolts in all the corners of the plates, and then unwrap/basic textureing, and I'm ready to rig it and the guy.

Can't wait to start animating it all!

@Aske:
Hey mate :)
Yeah, textures needs a touch or two.
But thanks!

Daxtor
11-28-2008, 04:25 PM
Hi there Christoffer,

Progressing nicely :) It is a neat style you have for your project, almost like a bit of Tim Burton in it! What are your plans on scenery and envirounment? Would be sweet if they had the same odd and unbalanced shapes like the man and his machine.

Perhaps the machine needs a little diversity in it, like one of the plates being rusty, or in a different hue?

Looking forward to see the completion of the machine - a little brass and the placing of the bolts, and it is ready to fly high! ;)

doffer
11-29-2008, 06:20 PM
Hey S°ren :)
Thanks for your comment!
I haven't planed on making a very detailed environment, but I'll definately design it, as the machine/man is designed.
I have unwrapped each plate individually, so they will have difference in look.

doffer
11-30-2008, 12:40 PM
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Software: Maya

Finally got the model done.
Took a while, placing all the bolts manually, but now that they are there, I think they give it a nice touch.
I got the entire thing unwrapped as well, and as you can see i started a bit on the rigging.

Next week will bee rigging both the machine and the character, as well as doing some basic texturing of the machine.
Hopefully I can start animate in the end of next week.

doffer
12-03-2008, 07:06 PM
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Software: Photoshop

Tried to time out my storyboard.
It's probably not totally correct, but it should be pretty close

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=94574)

doffer
12-04-2008, 08:46 PM
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Software: Maya

Finally got the machine rigged.
The scene is fairly good organized, and the rig works to it's purpose.
Now it time for the character.

doffer
12-08-2008, 03:53 PM
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Software: Maya

Almost done with the rigging.
Need to do some blendshape work, and little here and there, then I'm off to binding and ready for animation

doffer
12-09-2008, 12:32 AM
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Software: Maya

Almost done with rigging the main character, so thought I'd try and do some other stuff.
I started a bit on scene 9, which is a rather easy scene (at least animation wise). It's the Point of view scene, where he looks down at the ground, while flying high above the clouds.
Just started playing with the clouds and some treetops.

Rendered with software render, as it gave the far quickest results, compared to mental ray, but it should be kept in mind, that shading/lighting/rendering is DEF. not where I shine, so it's gonna take a lot of work to make it look good, and still keeping acceptable rendertimes, as I usualle just set up a spot light, throw in some HDRI, turn on GI and FG and hit render ;)

I think it works okay so far, but obviously needs a LOT of work, hehe...

Doerge
12-09-2008, 01:42 AM
Hey champ.

Wouw you've been busy!

Looking good. Simply can't wait to see some animation on that giant machine... I'm very curios as to how you will put the weight and "massiveness" into the animation!

keep going strong buddy! :beer:

doffer
12-09-2008, 04:09 PM
Hey Aske :)
Well, I try to get as much down as possible.
I'm a little worried about the animation process. I fear a bit that I'll run out of time, and that it won't be as good as I hope, but let's see.
Usually the animation part is the one I really love, so hopefully it'll be alright :)

doffer
12-10-2008, 10:52 PM
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Software: Maya

Okay, I promise you, this is the last borring T-pose screen I'll show you ;)

I finished up the rigging on the main character, which means all I have left is binding him and the machine, then I'm ready for animation.

I'll iron out any kinks there might be (there WILL be some) on the rig and binding, as I move on animating the first sequence, as I thinks it's easyest to do so when the rig is in action.

Next update should involve motion to SOME degree at least ;)

Deje3D
12-11-2008, 02:28 PM
Awesome :) I can't wait.

doffer
12-14-2008, 10:35 PM
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Software: Maya

I've worked all day on finishing the rigs and a now putting final touches on them and merging the two into one big rig.
I desided to take a little break and surf the internet for some sound effects.
As far as I can tell, we are allowed to use sound FX from the internet right? As long as they are free to use for personal projects. I don't suspect this to be "professional" work in that sense, or am I wrong?

Anyways, I spend about 1 hour on finding these sounds and editing it into my storyboard. It's still VERY early, and maybe it's too soon to even show you guys but hell... it's WIP right? :)

So here is the storyboad with a VERY early sound design.

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=95797)

@Dennis:
Thanks mate. Glad you like it :)

doffer
12-15-2008, 08:45 PM
For some strange reason I can't log onto my ChallengeUploader, but that shouldn't prevent you guys from being updated! :)

I started animating a bit today. In particular two shots. Neither of them are considered FINAL yet, so comments and critique are more than welcome.

http://www.doffer.dk/showoff/film_IP02_1.mov

TCPortfolio
12-15-2008, 09:01 PM
Wow, this is really going to be a cool short! I can't wait to see the finished product.

doffer
12-16-2008, 10:03 AM
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Software: Maya

Here it is again, this time a regular upload, in flv version.
Sorry about the inconvienience, I could log on to ChallengeUploader.



Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=95940)

@TCPortfolio:
Thanks a lot mate! :)
I'm glad you like it.

doffer
12-17-2008, 11:07 PM
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Software: Maya

This is the current state of the film.
Some shots are still storyboard, others are barely touched and some are more or less final.

Comments are of couse welcome :)


Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=96119)

Deje3D
12-18-2008, 11:08 AM
Very nice progress...

I think you should be aware of the weight of the machine.

It will almost be impossible to stand still with such a big machine.

Damn, you will be finished in no time :)

doffer
12-18-2008, 01:08 PM
Hey Dennis.
Yeah, it definatly needs a lot more motion throughout the hole thing pretty much :)
Nahh, I don't think I'll be done anytime soon.
I need A LOT of work still, and deadline coming up pretty fast... heeeelp :/

But I WILL finish this one. I have to...

doffer
12-19-2008, 12:03 AM
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Hi.
I plan to have this whole sequence animated before sunday, as I leave for my parents for christmas and can't work on this project untill after newyears.
Then I hope to animate the last part within a week plus some day after newyears, as I'll have those days dedicated to this project.

The main issue I have, is the transition between shot 1 and 2. The motion of the machine isn't really carried through the two shots, so it looks a bit strange.
Then of couse shot 3 which has barely been touched.
The rest I think works pretty well, but it probably needs a bit of touch here and there.

Let me know what you think :)


Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=96233)

Airflow
12-19-2008, 08:23 AM
Look really good, but his legs need to tremble more, more short steps, moving his centre of gravity to counter the weight shifts of the engine.

Str7
12-19-2008, 10:36 AM
hehe nice man i can`t wait to see the whole animation. Maybe add some more emotion to his face.

doffer
12-19-2008, 09:11 PM
@Airflow:
Thanks man!
I'll add some more weight to it (or try at least) :)
Update should follow tomorrow sometime :)

@Str7:
Hey mate :)
Yeah, he face should be pushed a little more, although my vague facial rig doesn't allow for that much emotion.

doffer
12-20-2008, 12:47 PM
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Software: Maya

Hi.
I'm finishing up on the first part of the film, before he leaves the garden or whatever with his big machine.
I thinks it's pretty close to finish, but I'd of couse like your opinion about it too :)

Here is a quicktime link (sorensen, 23 mb) for better animation review.
http://www.doffer.dk/showoff/film_IP02_8.mov

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=96337)

Deje3D
12-31-2008, 11:38 AM
I think it looks good.

When the closeup of his head and upper body comes, and he pulls the thingy. It think it could be cool if he was strugling some more too optain the balance.

He looks a bit stiff.

Is there coming a update soon? :)

doffer
12-31-2008, 01:32 PM
Hey Dennis :)
Thanks for you comment!

Yeah, updates will come for sure, but I'm home with my parents now, away from my computer (but at least i have time for some sketching :)), so updates won't come before after new years.
I try to do a bit of research in lighting and stuff, while I can't work on the project. I gotta say I miss it though :(

doffer
01-03-2009, 02:07 AM
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Software: Maya

Okay, finally back on this project.
I spendt the day today working on the environment.
Both lighting, material and modeling.

Still need some work, but it's a start.
The smoke is not working too great, and i messed up with my keylight, so it's not as dominant as it'll get in later versions.
Then I'll need some more work on the machine, considering textures and materials.

I won't spend time on rendering out animation before I start at school the 12th, becouse then it can just render while I'm not home.

So the plan atm. is to finish all animation before the 12th, and then I have about two weeks for lighting (almost done), materials (needs a bit of work) and rendering/comp which should go pretty smooth, at least the comp.

authentic
01-03-2009, 09:50 AM
The environment is ok but I find hte tree too much realistic as the rest of your environment isn't so. Also the depth of field a bit too strong.

doffer
01-03-2009, 12:04 PM
Hey Vincent :)
Thanks a lot for your comment.
Yes, the tree is way more realistic than the rest (the house as well), as they are images.
I tried the opposite, just drawing in some fast trees but it didn't work either, so I will have to find some golden middleway between very rough toony and realistic.

I'll also turn down the DOF a bit :)

doffer
01-04-2009, 09:27 PM
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Here is a update, containing a fairly big amount of new work.
I only need two shots left, and then some improvement through out the film (binding is not working properly and it could be a bit more fluid and vivid).
I have made a couple of notes myself.

Obviously a LOT of environment modeling left to do!

Let me know what you think.

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=97847)

ivanisavich
01-04-2009, 09:36 PM
Awww gross :D

Haha...keep going man! My only critique is that it's spelt "Icarus" not "Icaros" :)

Deje3D
01-04-2009, 11:45 PM
Very nice so far.

I like it a lot!

When he tries to start the machine and it slow getting startet, maybe the propel should be turning around. I think it would be cooler if it tried to turn around, but was not quit there jet.

Also, when he pushes the machine, because he likes flying, he dosnt look that happy. I think he should smile a lot more. He's biggest dream is coming true :)

wasnt it suppose to be a wagon in the end? I think it fits the story better. Or maybe if the thing was made out of wood or something.

It could be nice if the credits was the flying shit landing on the ground forming the names :D Or maybe Im the only one who likes that idea.

doffer
01-05-2009, 12:44 AM
@Tyson:
Thanks you for your comment!
I'm glad you like it, and thank you for spotten the spelling mistake :)

@Dennis:
Hey :)
Thanks to you too.
I'm not quite sure what you mean about the propeller. It shouldn't rotate or what?

Yeah, the storyboard said a wagon, but I like this a bit better, but maybe I can model it out to be a big wood container thingy instead.

Haha, yeah that ending title sounds pretty cool, but it also sounds like waaaaay too much work for an ending title, considering there is only ONE MONTH left... shhiiiiit...
Plus I kinda like the way the ending title works now :)

Cheers :)

Doerge
01-06-2009, 01:06 AM
Hi Christoffer!

Cool. Nice that you keep up the work!

When the exhaust pipes falls off and hits the ground I think there should be less time between them hitting the ground. A bit too slow right now.

And a look-test.. nice. As mentioned your DOF makes it look like a minerature. Soften up his shadow on the fence, and maybe add a subtle green bounce light from the grass, when he is that close to the ground.

Looking forward to next update! :thumbsup:

musi
01-07-2009, 07:17 PM
Hi Christoffer,

You are doing a good job here :)
I agree with Doerge's and Deje3D comments regarding animation.
If I may add my own penny... You may want to work a bit more with the timing of the action scenes, they look a bit too long right now. May be make shots shorter and animations in every shot more compact and accentuated. Better shorter but better, you may end with a film twice as shot, but 10 times more interesting to watch.

Keep going!

doffer
01-07-2009, 07:33 PM
@Aske:
Thank you for your comments. I've written your suggestions down, and hopefully they're corrected in the next update. :)

Cheers

@Musi:
Thanks a lot for your comments. I'm glad you like it :)
Yeah, speed has always been my problem. It's very difficult to see for myself, whether or not they should sped up with 20 or 30 % or if they are fine.
I think that I'll just try and speed up my playplasts in Premiere, and see how that looks. Then I can go in and correct it in maya afterwards :)

But thank you for the heads-up.

I'll hopefully submit a new update tonight at some point.

doffer
01-07-2009, 10:49 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1231368564_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1231368564_large.jpg)

Software: Maya

I cut off about 17 seconds, based on different comments from users here on CGtalk.
I think it became a lot better, and if no one has anything critical I think I'll call it final animation for now.
I need some time for shading/lighting/rendering too.

I'm also thinking of adding a bit of scream into some of the shots, and maybe find e new soundstrack, not that fond of it anymore, but maybe it's because I've heard it too many times already.

Let me know what you think about it all :)

And YES I just spotted the spelling mistake in the title :S
I'll fix it for next time :)

Cheers

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=98491)

Thiago-Pires
01-08-2009, 01:21 PM
Hey Doffer,


Great animation!! Really funny character!
One thing that could be good for the editing is to accelerate the speed when the old man starts flying out and you could also speed up and give some impact when he falls.

Good luck!!

doffer
01-09-2009, 12:49 AM
@Thiago-Pires:
Thanks a lot. I'm glad you like it. I really dug the fx wars you guys did! Spot on!
Yeah, accelerating out of the shot is a nice idea.
I also see now, that he moves to slow foreward in the shot where he loses his pipes, so I'll correct that as well.

I worked on the texturing/shading of the machine and man today.
I'll post a 360 render soon.

Cheers

doffer
01-09-2009, 01:53 PM
Okay, the uploader won't work, so I'll just give you the mov file:
http://www.doffer.dk/turnaround.mov

Deje3D
01-11-2009, 04:29 PM
It's SO awesome that you keep moving forward and are getting closer to finishing the project.

I showed the video to my girlfriend, and she commented, that she didnt really think that i looked like he was pushing the mashine harder, to fly faster. If you got spare time, maybe you could consider a other way to show it.

musi
01-11-2009, 05:03 PM
Hi Christoffer,

It looks so much better in the short version!
I think it's a wize decision to go on to lighting and shading, but if you will have time for improvement it would be nice to try working with comments of Deje3D and Thiago-Pires. You may also want to add a reaction shot (may be a close up of the surprised face) just before he starts to fall down :)

Good work! :thumbsup:

doffer
01-12-2009, 11:54 AM
@Dennis:
Hey, mate. I'm glad you showed it to your girlfriend. It's always great to have a view from someone who doesn't see the technical aspect of it (as I assume she doesn't).
I'll try and see if I can spice up the shot a bit, making it look more as if he pushes it. I don't think I'll add a whole new shot though. Ain't got time to do it, now that school starts again, and portfolio deadline creeping up from behind as you know ;)

@Shasha:
Good idea about the reaction shot. I can probably squeeze that in, without too much of a hassle.
I'm glad you liked the new update. I think it works a lot better also. I think I'll give the animation just another touch, as I've now gathered a couple of comment, but that'll be it. I still have a long way to go and not a whole lot of time.

ru-bonsai
01-12-2009, 12:56 PM
I really like it, very funny!

are you planning to move the camera in the take off scene?
I think that particular scene needs some boost, maybe something like a backfire reaction on the camera when icarus leaves the frame...

nice animation though, good work!

doffer
01-12-2009, 09:53 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1231797226_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1231797226_large.jpg)

Software: Maya

I did a little bit of change in the animation in some of the scenes. Added a closeup/reaction shot as well.
I hope you like it.

As you can see, two of the shots are rendered out now.
I still need to change the background and the clouds though. They are not working what so ever.

I have started rendering, and scenes will tick in a slow but steady rate.
I still need to figure out how to do the clouds as well.

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=99299)

Ru-Bonsai:
Yes, you are absolutely right. That scene could use a boost for sure.
I'll wait a bit to render it out, and see if I can come up with some smart way to give it a bit more energy, I can't promise anything though :)

doffer
01-15-2009, 11:27 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1232062050_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1232062050_medium.jpg)

Software: Maya

Okay, I promise to update with animation soon.
In the mean time, here is a collage with 6 frames, one from each of the shots.
I hope you like it.

Cheers

doffer
01-16-2009, 05:47 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1232128058_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1232128058_medium.jpg)

Software: Maya

This is what I have so far.
Some of the rendered shots needs some speed, but I think it'll be okay when the clouds comes in (once I find a way to create them, that is).

Hope you like it :)

Cheers

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=99745)

Deje3D
01-16-2009, 06:11 PM
Wouw Dude !

This is looking awesome !

Personally i think it might be a bit to bright. Overall. But that that might just be my tasty :)

I must say, that when you enterede the challenge, i had a idea that you could make a cool short, it might have some errors and so. After seeing the lastest animation the quality is much higher quality that i expectet.

So Cyber high five and mad props ;)

doffer
01-17-2009, 04:57 PM
Hey Dennis :)
Woaw, thanks a lot for your kind words! :)
Well, there are a LOT of little mistakes and errors here and there. It's just a matter of trying to hide them as good as possible.

I'm sorta re-rendering most of the film, because I added some stuff, and thightended up the animation here and there.
It shouldn't be a problem considering deadlines, though. As long as it renderes while I'm at school, it's pretty much "free rendertime".

I need two shots more, then I'm done with all the Air stuff (from he leaves frame in the beginning, and all the way to the end). I should have those done by the weekend.

I've lit and modeled most of the ground scene as well, but need to touch the animation a bit there still.

So High Five to you too, and good luck with your challenge :) You HAVE to finish up ;)

framebreed
01-18-2009, 08:29 AM
I love your mood. Excelent animation and most of all good pick to do a funny animation, in my opinion an animation if it's not funny then it must better have a good reason to not be.

Good luck and go go go!

Mau-Zer
01-19-2009, 01:21 PM
I enjoyed your animation a lot, great job! :)

doffer
01-19-2009, 04:49 PM
@Framebreed:
Thanks a lot mate!
It's funny about that, because I always want to make a dark and gloomy short, but all the stories I get in my head are light and "funny", hehe.

@MidPoint:
Thanks a lot! If people enjoy watching my short, I can't ask for more :)

Updates will come tomorrow night I think, when all the rendering has been done.

doffer
01-20-2009, 09:37 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1232487464_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1232487464_medium.jpg)

Software: Maya

Okay, here are a couple of more shots.
I think the closeup before he falls is a bit too short, but besides that, I'm pretty happy about the result.

Let me know what you think.

doffer
01-20-2009, 09:41 PM
Hehe, okay I give up ;)

But update will come as soon as the uploader works again.

andreasng
01-22-2009, 08:48 AM
hey dophph÷r!

nice render. i think that the splines are a bit too smooth at the moment. maybe try and break them up, and make a mess of you animation. Especially so his head isnt floating too much.

The first shots are amazing. You got really good weight going on, you catch the heavyness of the jet(propella)pack very well.

bon

doffer
01-22-2009, 09:11 PM
Hey Andreas.
I'm really happy you get a sense of wheight and mass in the beginning of the film.
It was a big concern that it would show through :)

Yeah, it can be a bit floaty, especially the head.
I'm almost finish with the rendering of the everything but one shot, but rendertimes are pretty low, so good time to re-render if things still looks wrong.
I touched the animation a bit also, but that was before your post.

I should have the update ready tomorrow night.

doffer
01-23-2009, 05:17 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1232731052_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1232731052_medium.jpg)

Software: Maya

Getting close to deadline and close to final film as well.

Only need one shot and some more work on the sound.
I have time to de re-renders though, if there are anything completely wrong, although I'm pretty happy with it so far.


Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=100468)

doffer
01-26-2009, 10:13 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1233008006_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1233008006_medium.jpg)

Software: Maya

Okay, the very last renders are coming in a steady rate now.
I've changed a lot in the look of the film, some animation and little bits and pieces.

Here is a temporary image, and tomorrow I hope to upload the final film, at least the visual part. The sound design, 30 sec. cut and model renders will come later this week.

The whole project should be done saturday/sunday.
I don't wonna work right up till' deadline.
I guess I don't have the balls for such a stunt ;)

Hope you like

Martijn81
01-27-2009, 12:17 AM
Those screenshots look really nice! And a very nice job on all the animations! Goodluck with the last bits!

doffer
01-27-2009, 04:30 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1233073851_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1233073851_medium.jpg)

Software: Maya

Okay, I call it a wrap for good :)
I'm rendering out the model renders as I write.
I still need that, a decent sound design and a 30 sec. cut so I still got a lot of work in front of me.
I really hope you like it :)

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=100536)

@ Martijn81: Thanks a lot mate!
Your looks super sweet too, so far :)

musi
01-27-2009, 05:51 PM
Hi Christoffer,

Your film has grown quite a bit since I have seen it last time!
It looks quite good, so let's see some renders coming :)

adib
01-28-2009, 06:44 AM
Congruats on finishing! It s looking good,and you manage all that well!
Best to you!

Lemog
01-28-2009, 07:43 PM
Congratulations for finishing... the animation is really great and funny... all nice designed, I like it much... top top top :applause:

Good luck man... that works :beer:

doffer
01-28-2009, 10:03 PM
@Sasha:
Hey :)
Thanks. The final renders for the model show-off came in today while I was at school. They looks like they should (I'm not gonna judge wheather that's good or bad), so that's cool.
I also did the 30 sec. edit, and my god that was difficult. Next time I'll try to create a film within the 30 sec. limit and go for more quality instead. But it's actually very difficult to tell a story in 30 seconds I realised. So respect to you and your teammates for pulling that off!

The sound is killing me though. But it should be okay. I'm still shooting for delivery on saturday/sunday depending on my hangovers :D

@Adib:
Thanks man! I'm thrilled you like it. Your project is sooooo cool. Amazing style!

@Lemog:
Thanks to you too!
I'm glad you think it works. That's always crucial.
Even though I haven't commented on your thread, I've followd it closely. And I really like what I see. Good luck to you :)

doffer
01-30-2009, 07:28 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1233343717_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1233343717_medium.jpg)

Software: Maya

Hey guys.
I think this will be the last update, but before I submit as a final, I'd like to check with you guys, if everything is uploaded correctly.

There has been some back and forth on what the final should contain, so I'd like to hear if you think I have all I need?

The actual film won't be touched anymore. Sorry :)

Cheers, and have a good weekend.

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=100583)

ronaldofx
01-30-2009, 08:07 PM
The char is very funny, its look like the kind of a guy who always have a problem with everything, I want to see more of this trouble guy ;). Congratulations and good luck.

Ronaldo Pucci

doffer
02-01-2009, 07:46 PM
http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1233517560_medium.jpg (http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/23/15609/15609_1233517560_medium.jpg)

This is the final delivery.
I hope you all like it :)

It been a blast working on this project, and a big thanks goes out to those of you, who commented in- or just dropped by my thread.

Respect to all of those who finished up on their piece, wheather it's in the image or video catergory. It takes a lot of commitment.

Cheers, and see you next time cgtalk fires up a challenge ;)

Play Video >> (http://features.cgsociety.org/challenge/steampunk/player.php?entry_id=100609)

ivanisavich
02-01-2009, 07:58 PM
Hey Doffer,

Great to see it done man! It was a lot of fun following your progress. Best of luck in judging phase!

Duncs
02-01-2009, 08:59 PM
Great entry doffer,

Your thread has made me smile every time i've checked in.

Best of luck with the judging

Lemog
02-01-2009, 10:06 PM
Good to see all pieces together man... really good animation, very funny concept with original design...
like that much... you must be proud... it's finish now... good luck with continuation :beer:

doffer
02-02-2009, 04:01 PM
@Lemog:
Hey mate :)
I'm super thrilled you like it and find it original. That's always amazing to hear.
Yeah, well I am fairly proud, but when you work so intense on a project, you tend to get a very subjective opinion about it, so I mainly see the stuff that I should/would change if I had time.
Good luck with judging too :)

@Duncs:
Hi Duncs.
I'm happy to hear it made you smile. That is the purpose of the story :)
Good luck with the judging on your piece. It really rocks so far!

@Tyson:
Thanks man!
I'm pretty happy to be done myself :D
Good luck with judging too, I'm sure it'll go well for you :)

@ronaldofx:
I'm really glad you find it funny. That means the design appeals the way it should :)
Good luck with your project as well. You guys rock!

Lemog
02-02-2009, 06:28 PM
... but when you work so intense on a project, you tend to get a very subjective opinion about it
I think that's the same thing for all of us :D

musi
02-02-2009, 08:05 PM
Hi Christoffer,

You have finished it quite nicely! It was interesting to watch your progress, and see it all come together at the end.

Great job! :applause:

Deje3D
02-04-2009, 12:35 PM
Yo Doffer !

Your entry is very nice :) Good luck in the challenge !

doffer
02-04-2009, 07:20 PM
Hey Sasha :D
Thanks a lot! It was very cool to see the progression of your short also :)
I hope you and your time is up for it once again, when cgtalk fires up for a new challenge.
I sure am, if the time is right.

Dennis
Thanks mate!
And good luck to you too :)

cmdrpi
02-05-2009, 07:10 PM
Hey Doffer!
I finally managed to watch your entry! :thumbsup:
It really is a good one! I especially liked the way you animated your character! :applause:
Good luck with the judgement!

Best to you, Cmdr. Pi

doffer
02-06-2009, 12:18 AM
Thanks a lot Christian!
My favourite part of cg is without doubt animation, so I'm really pleased to hear, you find that well-made.

Cheers and good luck to you too.
I really love your entry. It looks awesome :D

@Lemog:
Haha, yeah without doubt :)

Martijn81
02-06-2009, 10:20 PM
Nice job finishing it (congrats), it looks nice!!

Goodluck with the judging!

MartinNielsen
02-26-2009, 07:42 AM
"HONORARY MENTION" Nice job :thumbsup:

doffer
02-26-2009, 11:56 AM
@Martijn81:
Thanks man :)

@Martin: Hehe, mange tak :)

musi
02-27-2009, 08:49 AM
Hey Christoffer, congrats :)
You did a great job, and a honorary mention is a prove of that!

framebreed
02-27-2009, 08:53 AM
I respect Christofer's achievement more then some of the winners, really!

You did a good job man! Congrats!

doffer
02-27-2009, 03:42 PM
@Sasha:
Thanks a lot :)

@Framebreed:
Thanks a bunch, mate :)
I'm sure glad I wasn't in the judging comitee. A lot of great entries.

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