Tifa from Final Fantasy VII Advent Children (WIP)

[CybrGfx]

The nose is too high on the face, she looks deformed.
Also, her elbows are too high, making the upper arms look too short. They should be 1 1/2 head lengths.

~C

[Penguinus]

So many WIPs, why dont you focus on one?
Tifa was one of my favourite heroines from the Final Fantasy series though.

[Jiayong]

Actually this is the only WIP, the others were past work I posted to get critique and feedback. I'm still new to the forum, so I guess I'm also getting a hang of how things work here.

Thanks Cyber, I'll correct the draft soon!

[Jiayong]

here're corrections to the pencils, and also the addition of base colors.

one problem i'm facing is that both tifa's hair and her clothes are black in color. the light is coming from the left of the picture (the front of tifa). hence there won't be much distinction between her hair and the back of her clothes (not sure if i'm phrasing this properly here). any ideas on this?

pencils v2:
edited her nose, her head size, her chin&lips, her elbow length
http://i473.photobucket.com/albums/rr100/jiayong/Tifa2.jpg

base color:
http://i473.photobucket.com/albums/rr100/jiayong/Tifa2c.jpg

[DArcy1]

Her eye looks odd. If I just saw the eye itself and were asked to fill in a face around it, I would draw it as a 3/4 front view, rather than the side view you've got here. This image might help show what I mean: http://pic.templetons.com/brad/photo/cbt/brad/profile.jpg

D'Arcy

[Jiayong]

Thanks D'Arcy for the tip! I've edited her face by tilting it more to her left, so hopefully it looks more natural now.

I've also done a preliminary inking of the figure, and if all goes well i should be painting soon. can't wait :)


the pencils
http://i473.photobucket.com/albums/rr100/jiayong/Tifa-pencil.jpg

ink (this won't be the final inking of course. I'll be making corrections as i go along. but this preliminary ink serves as a good guide for me.)
http://i473.photobucket.com/albums/rr100/jiayong/Tifa-ink.jpg

one question: i want tifa to look determined, yet with a touch of gentleness (I'm not sure if that's possible). do her eyes now look too fierce? feel free to give feedback. many thanks in advance. :)

[CybrGfx]

It's more than just the eyes that create facial expressions. It is a combination of things. Brow, mouth, nose, eyelids...In the end, it's going to be whether or not YOU think the gaze is determined, yet gentle. You do not have enough grasp of anatomy to make all the minor facial adjustments to indicate the degree of determined yet gentle that you desire.

The upper torso anatomy looks odd, and I have had difficulty figuring it out until you inked. You need to adjust the shoulder to the neck. The closest one looks too angled, rather than flat, with only the short angle of the trapezius muscle creating an angle. The farther one is angled back oddly and is too low.

You need to look at someone posing in that position for you, to get a better idea of the foreshortening.
~C

[M31]

I would highly recommend that you have a friend pose for you. It can be challenging to draw the figure from your head. I find that my drawings are more correct and dynamic when I reference from life.

I preferred an earlier version of her face. In your latest WIP, her jaw looks rather masculine. I also think the earlier version had a cuter expression. There is also something bothering me about the neck/shoulder area but I cannot determine what without reference.

Good luck! :)

[EndoTouch]

The line between her shoulder and neck its too straight it needs to split to allow for the shirt to wrap around the neck. The way you had it looks like a hunch, the ink makes it into just an oddity.

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