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philippeduvin
10-27-2008, 11:36 PM
Hello guys,
here's a shot I'm working on for my next demoreel and I would love to hear your feedback on it.

Bishop Sparrow Shot (http://www.philippeduvin.com/videos/sparrow-blocking.mov)

Txs a ton !!

Frogman
10-28-2008, 12:32 AM
This is looking quite nice. I think the main issue is figuring out your poses and working in them.

On "This is a jar of dirt", I think it would be stronger to strike a "This" pose and then work in it instead of accenting the dialogue with the hand going up and down.

I really like the subtle hand gesture at 182-192 - it suits the questioning thought of the character.

you could strengthen the pose at 237 and work it in for the rest of the line.

@ 363 - 381, see if you can show the character's thought (ie: "No.. I want the jar and am not going to give it back") in his eyes and on his face before he reaches to take the jar.

What do you think it would look like if he turned his back on the camera when he takes the jar , looking back over he shoulder? It might add some contrast to the character's posing.

This is really nice work. I'm looking forward to seeing the final.

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