My first Work

[Joat]

First work with Photoshop?
I wouldn't have posted my first work with photoshop if someone would have had a gun pressed against my neck. =)

Then again, it wasn't anything even close to this work of yours. Actually, it was a gray blob. And I was impressed I can actually draw to a screen with this pen I was holding. It was 1990 and at friends father's Macintosh with Wacom pen. Don't remember what was the version number of Photoshop.

Welcome to forums!

[degsieger]

Thank you!

Of course I had some experience with corel Photopaint 9, and when I think of my really first attempt on a commodore 64 drawing in amica paint... with a joystick ... 16 colors, ... I also wouldn´t show this here.
As well this work isn´t verry professional, compared to the most of on the CG Society shown work. But I had to make a start. Also going out and show my doodle public is important for me.

[kevline]

Good for your first :)

I want to test me so I'll put some critiques to see if others are agree and what I miss.
-Put a foreground (object,builds,foliages...)
-For me i think lightning light everywhere in this picture not just only and your far parable.
-Maybe it's little too empty, and the line between two parables it's too straight
-I think your center of interest it's the small building so try to focus on it with colour, light, or another lightning point on it
- The light come from the right for your hills (maybe you can put rebounce light but not strong) , and another for your clouds.
-your two parables are too similar =) yes, but maybe try to break this (flip or rotate the top of the second).
-Lightning is too vertical for me, try break it little or add another, i don't know what to say ^^
yes perhaps the light of the lightning in the clouds is more important (go see references)

I stop here =] It's a nice picture and I hope you'll post another update with the advice of everybody.
And sorry for my poor english :p

[degsieger]

Hmmm... my english isn´t much better either ;-)

- you are totally right with the foreground, and there is still a possibility to put something in, especially to selll more depth.

- i have posted this Pic. in a another Forum. And the composition is like ... ping pong (table tennis)... the watcher is caught between the two parables. So I must tell the truth :-) ... I didn´t make a concept. I found the reference photo years ago, and I wanted to take it as reference for an acrylic fantasy painting. (Never came to it...). So two month ago, I got my photoshop and wanted to make mattepainting. So I took this reference Pic. and made this of it. I think I got a slave to the Photo (... hehehe think this DVDs of Mr. Cole are really helpfull and informative)

- The building in the middle should be more complex and much more like a "scifi-matrix-starwars" structure to rescue the watcher out of the "Ping Pong" *lol*

- the two parable has to look in the same dircection. I´m thinking of the Big Radio Array Telecopes where more parables are interconnected... "hmmm... so I need one or two parables more to sell this effect ..."

- And yes the lightning would effect more strong lights and schadows in clouds and on the landscape.

But to do all this I better start from zero. Because i did a lot of beginner mistakes... now I know the meaning of "Non destructive" Work. :sad:

Thank you for your critique. I helps a lot when other people look at a painting and tell their opinion. :)

[JJASSO]

welcome to the forums!

I agree with some comments above here are my comments

first I think the composition is boring, no real focal node , I just see 3 elements that could work as focal nodes
you have to be careful with the dark and bright levels, as some of them are wrong talking about depth and atmosphere effect
the aereal perspective or blue fog in the distant rock does not match your mood
that lighting would create some hard key light with strong highlights on the rock and some hard shadows as well
the perspective on the building is totally off
the reality that your rock textures has , make look very sketchy your clouds, you can see the contrast right away
the clouds need to be lit with the lighting illumination as well
you need to work more on the rain , right now it looks more like a canvas texture effect than actual rain
and if it is raining the rock should have that wet look

[degsieger]

Thank you Jamie!

I think it´s better to start a new project to have a fresh motivation. Later I can come back to this basic Idea, but also start from the beginning, because a rescue Attempt would make no sense to me.
Maybe starting from a concept painting, where the composition and color pallete is ok, and then searhching for photo refference and not the reversed way?;)

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