Please some critics and tips

[CybrGfx]

You show a good aptitude for human anatomy, something many people struggle with.
You need to study and work on General Composition, though.

With blue center lines on your image, the woman is almost centered on the canvas. This is visually boring and static.
With yellow lines on the image where visually the line extends, you can see how the arm on the left aligns with the corner of the room, the shoulders align with the mantlepiece (?), and how the round shapes of the picture intersect with the top of her hair.

If you move your subject off of the centerpoint, and eliminate the distractions by enlarging the image, there is a much clearer focal point for the viewer's eye.

The question you have to ask yourself (usually BEFORE you start painting) is "what is the subject being painted?"
Is it the woman? The gown? How important are the surroundings?
You then need to create a composition that makes the subject the most visually dominant part of the painting. Lines need to help direct the eye to the subject, not off to other parts of the canvas.

The last two versions change the focal point from the gown on the girl, to the girl in the environment, and the girl as the focal point, wearing a gown.

I hope this helps give you some ideas.

~C

[jKick]

Thank you,i just concentrated more at her look and colours than at the background and composition,i will fix that(if i can handle), your tips are great and i will folow them in all my paintings(if will be more paintings),now i'm going to look at some books about general composition and fix this mistake.

[maceska]

Well CybrGfx told the whole story. Should you need more material for your visual essays, jKick, feel free to browse to Female Anatomy For Artist (http://www.female-anatomy-for-artist.com)

concerning this composition - I believe it is a very good start, indeed

[jKick]

thanks about good start,since i don't used reference on this painting it looks some kind unnatural(the neck is too long,eyes are far from each other, nose is awfull),i'm working on that so your link is great,thanks one more time

[CybrGfx]

Thank you,i just concentrated more at her look and colours than at the background and composition,i will fix that(if i can handle), your tips are great and i will folow them in all my paintings(if will be more paintings),now i'm going to look at some books about general composition and fix this mistake.Do not task yourself too hard to "fix" this one. Finish it with some minor adjustments, and move on to your next work. No "if will be," WHEN will be more paintings, okay?

Each painting will teach you something, never will one be finished without doing so. Learn the lesson, and then start the next piece to show what you have learned, and begin the next lesson...

~C

[jKick]

http://img143.imageshack.us/img143/700/somethingwipnr2byjkickao6.jpg
I was out for last 2 days so i din't have time for painting,after CybrGfx's tips i decided to change the place for making a new composition(she is still centred on canvas),her hair is looking awefull,i think that i will change position of her head and maybe a little bit of her body,now i'm going to put some work on it,still if you have some advices please say what you think(i will check this thread daily)
sorry for my english

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