lumberjack girl

[Greenham]

Here's your image (You need a direct link, quite often not the one your image hosting website provides you):
http://i137.photobucket.com/albums/q220/goodninja/SEXYLJ_10.jpg

Code used (less apostrophes): [img']http://i137.photobucket.com/albums/q220/goodninja/SEXYLJ_10.jpg[/img']

A quick couple of things I noticed:


Her left (as viewed) elbow is wrong. It needs to be moved right so her arm bone is straight - as it should be, instead of bending at some unnatural angle. You also need to redo the shadows of her . . . elbowpit? (the bit on the inside of the arm where the elbow is.) Bend your own arm and use it as reference; take a photo if you have to.
Why are her legs bent slightly? And what is the saw resting on behind her back? If it was heavy enough to bend her knees, there's no way she could be holding it one-handed.
The strap over her right (as viewed) shoulder doesn't bend to with the shape of her breasts and flattens the image.
Her lower body doesn't quite match the upper body. Her legs are in a stance almost facing right at the viewer, yet her hips and shoulders are facing towards the right (by different amounts, I might add.)
Depending on what effect you're going for, the hair is too flat and well-shaped. At the very least, add some rogue hairs.
There's something about the position of her head that seems stiff and unnatural. What expression were you going for? I'd lift the head up to a more natural position.
The breasts may be a little low. I'd move them a little higher, but I'm not quite sure.
Where you have the chain sagging upwards, it should be sagging downwards.

[dolemite]

thanks for the feedback, I can't wait to get home and work on it some more.

[Ninjas]

Yeah, I think those crits are valid. Keep it up. It will be good to see more work on this.

[dolemite]

http://s137.photobucket.com/albums/q220/goodninja/LJ-concept-01.jpg

hi,

again thanks for the crit. I decided I'd be best served by starting over. Since my problems are mostly with proportions and anatomy, there's no need to practice blending and all that.


Here's the new pose I'm thinking about. I want to work this out before i go on to other steps.

thanks again!

[dolemite]

http://s137.photobucket.com/albums/q220/goodninja/LJ-concept-02.jpg

I started working on a new pose.

[joeian]

i think her leg is short.......

[dolemite]

here's an update.http://s137.photobucket.com/albums/q220/goodninja/LJ-concept-04.jpg

[dolemite]

and another update.


http://s137.photobucket.com/albums/q220/goodninja/LJ-concept-05.jpg

[Tymotzues]

Whoa! slow down there tex
IMO unless she's a dwarf or ten years old you might need to revise her height. Seems you're missing a head length or two.
What happened to the chainsaw? rather than the spanner?
And out of the three I liked your second version the best, it had more movement and life to it, I know it wasn't as posed as the other two but I guess it depends on what feel you're going for.

[Greenham]

Anatomy is still off. Take a look at this pic for a rough guide for body-part proportions (result of a quick google search):

http://www.80stees.com/images/products/Wonder_Woman_Blue_T.jpg

[dolemite]

thanks for the feedback!


Yeh, I decided to leave the chainsaw out, just so i could focus on the character. I think maybe if I thin up the arms and neck it will help. Also I'll see about making her legs longer. I was working from a photo, but somehow it isn't coming across well. :(

I'm thinking of changing the arm to have it more like the original where the chainsaw is resting on the shoulder.

[dolemite]

here i added the chainsaw, and I find myself back where I started. I'll be painting over the chainsaw to make it matchup with the rest.


http://s137.photobucket.com/albums/q220/goodninja/LJ-concept-07.jpg

[Ninjas]

Good progress with some persistant issues. I think the design itself is pretty strong. Lots of iteration usually helps the elements of a design gel.

I am interested to see you push the presentaion even more. Play around with some texture overlays, and graphic elements for the presentation.

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