Eyes

[PowderMonkey]

this is really nice, but one thing to keep in mind when you do this sort of stuff is the direction that the light is coming from.
the face looks sorta flat, but if you had the light coming from one side and then put some shadows in, it would lift the whole image a bit. you don't need to be extreme, it can be very subtle indeed, but i think that's all that's missing here.

by the way, i love the highlights on the eyes, top job :)

[Greenham]

I don't understand why you entitled this work 'Eyes.' If you were studying eyes, why cover them over with hair?

The eyes themselves look good - or, at least, what I can see of them looks good. You might want to add some shading to the whites around iris to give it depth. Only in extremely harsh lighting are the 'whites' of the eyes completely white. Make your shading subtle though. Your shading should still be closer to white than grey.

Although the proportions and positioning of the facial features looks pretty good to me, I have no idea if this is a male or female I'm looking at here. The eyes and hair look feminine to me while the nose and lips (perhaps a little too close to the nose) are masculine. If it's a woman, I'd narrow the nose a little and make the lips thinner, more dainty. I'd also make them (the lips) paler. If this is indeed a male, make the hair coarser, bolder so he looks less like a shampoo advertisement.

Lighten up those shadows defining the bottom of the nose. They're far too dark for the same lighting conditions as the rest of the face.

PowderMonkey is correct, also. You need to keep in mind your light source and shade your shadows and highlights accordingly. In particularly those cast by the hair; around the nose; and around the eyes. The right eye (left as viewed) appears to be more shadowed; this would suggest the light source is to the right of the image, yet the rest of the image doesn't reflect (no pun intended) this.

Good luck.

[draftbeer80]

Hi guys! Hey, thank you so much for the comments. You know what now that you've pointed out the flaws of this artwork, now I can start correcting them. I looked at the artwork this morning and I thought there's just something missing and when I read your comments I realized that it does lack depth, due to the annomalies of the shadow placement. That is probably due to the lack of planning. As I have mentioned, I only drew the left eye initially and when I did that, I decided the light is in front of it. When I blocked the face, that's when I got confused with the lighting. And to Greenham, I just realized that yah, why the heck would I call the piece "EYES" if I'd have to cover it with hair! Hahahha. Excellent point greenham. I think I'd just have to change the title huh. And about the real gender of the character, it's supposed to be a female. Actually, my friend also thought she looked a little "masculine", maybe because of the nose. I'm going to take note of your comments guys, ama post a new version soon. Again mucho gracias!

[draftbeer80]

ok, so, I've come up with an improved version of the above artwork. I've improved the shadows and the features of the character's face. I hope u like it. Thanks for the comments guys! More comments are most certainly welcome.

Here it is...

http://images.draftbeer80.multiply.com/image/5/photos/14/orig/3/Eyes3-lowres.jpg?et=fyS%2CeJkY5z4PSS15y7MoQg&nmid=93287251

[Greenham]

This is a vast improvement on your previous version.

A couple of things I noticed:

Your highlight up and down the bridge of your nose is too strong and too defined. Add some more subtle shading/colouring in there to give the nose more shape and realism.
For me, your shadows around the left (as viewed) eye are still too dark; as is the one below the nose.
Get rid of the black outline around the eyelid. That black outline you might see is the eyelashes and doesn't extend all the way around to the tear duct.
Your eyelids are too wide - unless this person is extremely surprised. You usually only see about two thirds of the iris. Also, your iris is just a tad elongated. The iris must be exactly round, as should the pupil.
Give the eyebrows a bit more definition instead of just leaving them furry blobs. Also, make them less distinct. Few people's eyebrows start and stop so suddenly. Add a few rogue hairs.

[PowderMonkey]

for what it's worth, i think this is great.
maybe tone down the highlight a touch on the nose, but people's noses are more shiny than the rest of their faces, so it isn't too bad as is. in my opinion, any adjustments you make from this point are really about preference - if you want to modify it, then do, but if you like it, leave it.

melikeylikey :bounce: (could you please post a wallpaper resolution pic of this?)

[draftbeer80]

Thank you so much for the comments again guys! Ama do some more improvements on it. Then ill post it here. To PowderMonkey, I have it posted in deviant art. It's here (http://draftbeer80.deviantart.com/art/The-Stare-84114188). Again, thank you so much.

[draftbeer80]

This is probably my last revision of this artwork. I am now giving it the title "The Stare". I am coming up with a new artwork. Tentative title is "Sunset angel". I'm posting it here sometime today. It is still in it's rough stages. So hopefully, you guys could also help me out in finishing this artwork. Thanks a bunch!

http://images.draftbeer80.multiply.com/image/2/photos/14/orig/5/Eyes4-wallpaper.jpg?et=QrApOsDeNe7YOYORgYDUxw&nmid=76403469

[cutepoison]

the mouth should be more to the left..how could u miss that..its like 1cm wrong,to the right now...

[Greenham]

Haha, cutepoison is correct. The cupid's bow (the dippy bit of the lip) should line up with the center of the nose. That certainly slipped my notice.

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