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03-12-2008, 08:54 AM
Enjoy C&C apreciated!
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03-12-2008, 05:51 PM
Nice start, but it's boring, because everything looks the same. All the lights in all the windows are the exact same shade of gray. All the buildings are basically the same height, and the same width. You can almost draw a straight line across the tops, with only a very few areas taller or shorter.
This is also the weirdest city I've ever seen, with what appears to be about a dozen tall buildings, and then a bunch of wasteland. The centermost buildings appear to be in a straight line, with the other buildings in 2-3 rows behind them. There is no sense of distance within the city, with far too much of the background mountains visible.
Then we get to the title..."Dawn on Darkcity."
Dawn is not a yellow spot off to one side in the background, filling that portion of the canvas with yellow, while the rest of the image is a weird gray/bluish mass. A SIMPLE google image search for "city at dawn" will show you various ways the skies fill with early sunlight. This one (http://www.canada-photos.com/data/media/7/city-skyline_709.jpg) is pretty good, as is this one (http://www.bridgeandtunnelclub.com/bigmap/outoftown/thailand/bangkok/skyline/03peninsula.jpg)... A sun shining from behind is going to backlight your image. You will not see a lot of lighting in windows, although you will see some, but it will vary in intensity.
It's a good concept, but you need to work on the general composition, perpsective, proportions, and lighting.
03-13-2008, 02:09 AM
In addition to the more empirical concepts CybrGfx presented you might also try and intensifying your narrative a bit by making the "city" overall more dark and gritty when you start reworking your sky.
In this way you're juxtaposing the two different stylistic choices against each other and it starts to feel like a place where there's a story going on. Battles being fought over right and wrong, good and evil, life and death while the world keeps tumbling through space.
03-13-2008, 02:09 AM
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