"Daphne's new broom" short film finished!

[ivanisavich]

Bahahah!! That was incredible! One of the best AM shorts I've seen--not to mention, when compared to non-AM shorts, one of the best shorts period!

Wonderful characters, environments, gags, rendering--and most importantly, animation!

You've done a great job!

[My Fault]

Stunning work Ales, an extraordinarily well done short. There really wasn't any part of it that wasn't top notch. Will be front page here in no time!

[ssycko]

That was very good.

The only thing that stuck out for me. There was a shot when the witch had gotten control of the broom, the one where she realizes that she had control for the time being. It just shows the top half of her body in the frame. That really stuck out, because we can't see the broom, which is the whole point of this story, right?

I would just pull the camera back so that we can see the broom while she's riding on it.

Other than that, very good job.

[liquidik]

great job man! good luck with everything

Gian

[mattmos]

You already know what I think so I'll just say - frontpage!

Well done for finishing again and handling every aspect of the short yourself - looking forward to your next film!

[torresmedia]

That's some amazing work! :D Love your frogs :P I'm traying to make my own frogs for a short movie I'm making :) Nice work!

[husainsheraif]

Excellent work. Congratulations!

[pixel-shock]

Awesome! I love the detailed facial features of "Daphne" and I love the frog at the beginning and the end.

Tino

[DeFi]

Excellent! :thumbsup:
Very good use of cartoon physics. Animation is top notch. I can't see a single thing that seems to move in a wrong way.
Perhaps her head could have some more polys in the close up shots, because her cheeks an ears sometimes look a little edgy. And in the last shot, where Daphne closes the door, her hand first seems to grip the air to close the door(there is no door handle) and then penetrates the door for a short time.

[Booyah]

AMazing, I have been watching your flim update for weeks, and It turned out great :thumbsup:

[RobertoOrtiz]

Wow great short!
Plugged
Thanks to Brian Nicolucci for the heads up.
-R

[Ajouz]

very beautiful; nothing to crit, i love the models, and very smooth beautiful animation.
congrats

[ArneK]

Congrats Ales! Great to see it finished. It turned out fantastic!
You did a great job on everything and the sound design lifted it up yet a notch.

Wonderful! :thumbsup:

[sandidolsak]

uf, kapo dol.

[orbitalpunk]

Yeah! A fellow AMer kicken butt!

[Issam-Z]

Congrats Ales!!!
Great short! you should be proud of yourself :)

_Issam

[AFarrell]

That was amazing! Very well done, love the environments and great animation!

[Dervish]

hey, this is indeed good animation, not superb but its solid, same goes for most of the artwork, so since you guys at AM and learning specifically animation, ya did your job well enough. and now i really dont want to spoil your day, just give a honest crit in case ya wanna improve.
on the storytelling and dramatic aspects, there can be a lot of improvement yet made ;)
besides the hole plot being clear right away ( actually already from the title ), the comedic turning points in the microstructure didnt really have much of an impact ( read, wasnt really funny, rather try hard ). also theres elements that dont contribute to the story at all, like the frog being hit by the door, but are rather an effect. if ya wanna improve in this part of the field, id suggest getting some material on dramaturgy and storytelling, theres some really good resource out there. would be too much too give you a troughout analysis now, thats what you pay your mentors for ;)
in summary, this film can get small children entertained, but on several aspects simply isnt up to standards.

cheers mates :thumbsup: and never stop learning, for the starts of your careers ya are doing a fine job

as a sidenote since this forum is actually about graphical art: that kind of music can be used on arcade games, but is absolutly not fitting any comedic scenario, i know music for comedy is hard to do, so it goes along well enough.

[Geta-Ve]

Indeed great job, I really like the sets and enviro's. The voice didn't match up a whole lot (as in what I thought the witch should sound like) but it was most defenately passable. :D

Awesomeness!

[BColbourn]

wow, I am thoroughly impressed. amazing work you've done here!

[Anil-Kapoor]

Hi Ales,
Very impressive work. Great animation. Keep up the good work.

rgds
Anil

[Capn_Camo]

hahaha! That was truly wicked man,

A solid inspiration for all of us!

Top stuff!! :D

[BigMouth]

very impressive. i can't imagine the amount of time and effort that must have taken!

[Nostalgia32]

Congratulations, that was a very impressive short. I can't even imagine the amount of work that went into it. :thumbsup:

[jtvergarav]

wow man, I really liked you animation. The movements of the main character are very nice, the expressions too. As a piesce of artwork I think its pretty nice too.

As someone pointed before, you should feel proud about yourself! I think lot of us would love to make that level stuff

[Maciek Gliwa]

Hey Ales!
I think I already told you that some time ago, when the shortfilm was still in animation stage, without sound, nice renders etc. that it was my favorite AM shortfilm. What can I say now, with the sound and amazing rendering this shortfilm simply ROCKS DUDE! Fantastic work! Very funny, very well animated! Daphne is full of character and appeal, frogs are super awesome too!!! I like everything about this short. It has to be amazing feeling to see your hard work finally on the big screen, fully rendered etc. :). You deserve a huge beer buddy, and probably some more sleep :). Again, great and very inspiring work! Congrats!
Oh, and again, FROGS ARE SUPER AWESOME!

Maciek

[AikoWorld]

Excellent Work, congrets.

[melica]

SUPER!!!:thumbsup:

[ThePredator42]

Ales buddy!

haha, i remember how you did that tailor intro as an animation test about 2 years ago. Even back then I was already blown away by your talent, and back then it was only bouncing balls :)

You pulled off a HUUUGE thing with this short, kudos for making it such a masterpiece.

Micha

[professorx00]

hey ales,

glad to see it done.... it looks awesome.. just like all your other animation... congrates on completing it.

dave

[alesmav]

Whaaa, guys!

Thank you sooo much for all this extremely positive feedback. You have
no idea how much energy this gives me for the future. It's been crazy
2 years for me, doing my job AND animation mentor. My nerves were really
starting to give up on me in the past 3 months. But it was worth it, every keyframe of it...

And now...

...I can finally shave.

Ales

[Finotti]

Simply amazing.

No crits. Just appreciate. Is a bath for the eyes. Colours, Texturing, rig and animation.
The broom really is alive.


Cheers!!!

[neilparkinson]

This is great work. I can really appreciate the ammount of work you have put in on it. I particularly liked the lighting and look of the film. I wondered if the stick was going to fall down too at the end but the frog gag was a good ending.

Animationwise I really liked the bit where she dances around with the broom at the beginning and the karate reaction to the brush landing on her head at the end.

Inspiring stuff.

[KalaisOkudama]

nice job, good animation, textures and design

only thing i didnt like is face of main char, it looks semimale and semifemale

well done short,
cheers

[Anil-Kapoor]

Whaaa, guys!

It's been crazy
2 years for me, doing my job AND animation mentor. My nerves were really
starting to give up on me in the past 3 months. But it was worth it, every keyframe of it...

Ales

Hi Ales,
I can understand your situation (i have also been thru ) and well there is some cool and fantastic animations in your portfolio. So keep up the good work. btw, i will be shortly putting my short film , so keep an eye for that:)

rgds
Anil

[SueHouston]

Wonderful work. Ales!
Wow, great stuff! :applause:

[pochat]

Ales!

Great Film, I like it a lot!

My favourite is the karate pose after the broom lands on her head. Its hilarious.
The background/environment is fantastic, I love the trees design and the clouds.

Congratulations on such a fine piece!

Mario

[Justame2002]

Nice animated short, i really like the animation and overall design, makes me want to finish my own animated short film, as you obviously might have found out yourself it takes some serious time and effort to actually finish an animated short film, unfortunately i lack both time and money, i've still got hope though, ow yeah and a written script, wich always helps LOL, nice work man.

[lutonomy]

Hey Ales! Great job man, I remember back when you started this and it turned out fantastic! Congratulations on a huge acheivement!!

[MartinK]

Freakin' awesome!
Love it! Congrats Ales!

Martin

[Remi]

Really nice. Liked it a lot. Would you happen to have any of your pre-production stuff that you could post? Storyboards, concepts, etc. Again, great job.

[DaddyMack]

very well thought out and implemented:thumbsup: I'd also like to see any pre production

[methodz]

haha i thought this was pretty awesome. good job i like the style, just curious if you still have your story boards?

[d_jnaneswar]

now i got one more thing to brag about..

"i was in the same class with Ales learning animation.."

Great work dude!

DJ

[silent_soul]

Great Job, Ales!

Big fan of the character and her environment. Job well done and well thought out!

[BradRegier]

So wonderful, Ales. The frog killed me. Such a funny finishing touch. (Beautiful soundtrack too. The motor-scooter sound and the country music were perfect.) You should be so proud of yourself. I fully expect to see this in the SIGGRAPH theater.
It was an honor sharing a classroom with you.
bRaD

[TheMiyamotoMusashi]

Can someone provide direct download link please?

[radmirg]

Extremely well done, great job I really enjoyed it :)

[aes]

Great Job Ales, looks fantastic. I love the frog. But hey, shouldn't Moby have gotten a credit too ;) ? Congratulations man, looks beautiful!

-Alonso

[roger1o]

Great Everything, very...very inspiring, I'm doing my short at AM-class 6 ;)
Congrats Man!!! and Keep Rocking!
®©

[roja88]

Ales congratulation for superb animation and front page.

I love the colours, light, simplicity of the story, which brings out the great animation...

Torej se enkrat cestitke, vidi se, da je bilo vlozenega veliko truda, ljubezni in potrpezljivosti, vse to pa je sedaj poplacano s super izdelkom.

Jana

[overcontrast]

I'm really lazy to write comments, but this really made me do it. Awesome work my friend! THe animation the lighting/rendering is all so very sweet.. Simply the best made short I seen in a while! all the best mate!

[jojo1975]

i'ts extracool :)

[musk]

Awesome short. Nice story, greate sets and animation that makes it all come to life. Waiting for your next short

[MasterZap]

LOL, loved the moped sound effects.

Unfortunately the deadline has passed (http://www.siggraph.org/s2008/submissions/juried/caf/) :( or I would suggest you'd submit it to Siggraph animation theater!

/Z

[Kekec]

Simply awesome. :bounce:

[ThePredator42]

And now...

...I can finally shave.

Ales



WHAAAAA????? I´d never thought I´d see the day!

Is that a tear rolling down my cheek?

:-P

[Wilson-3d]

Great work. Of of they ones you want to watch again as soon as you see it the first time.

[tracip]

Really really awesome job! Great animation - great characters. The frogs were super cute. Outstanding all the way around! Congratulations!!!

[AkinYaman]

great animation talent. some good timing

[king21]

UIIIIEEEEE!

That is super amazing. One of the best shorts i saw on animation mentor. Great character design and great animation. U really unleashed the talent here bravoooo.


Jure

[Obinet]

Iskrene cestitke - predvsem za dokoncan short, animacija je pa itak perfektna!

Samo

[Djampa]

Fantastic ! :applause:

Congratulations !

[alesmav]

Thank you for soooo many good vibes! This will keep me going for months! I really appreciate all the comments.

As far as preproduction material goes, I am afraid I'll have to dissapoint you, since there is really no fancy concept art that will make you go WOW! Just a few pencil sketches. I can look around and scan some final sketches that I used as a reference while modeling the characters&environment or show some images from the storyboard. But there was no time to do fancy color studies and gazillion witch and frog designs.

Ales

[splintah]

ales !!!

saw your short on bobbies blog

awesome work bro !


i remember your dedication to this story
when everybody said "cut it down" you just went "i really want to do this"
great to see it ended up in such a nice piece
congrats !

kris

[viiltaja]

Hahaha great! Women and motor vehicles don't fit together, atleast my wife :D

[DB5BOND]

Wow amazing work :D and made AM's News :)

[alesmav]

Heya,

Like I said nothing fancy, but here's some preproduction stuff I found.

This is the sketch I used as a reference when modeling Daphne. As you can see the final version turned quite different especially in terms of proportions. This is how like to work when modeling my own designs. I only use the reference in the early stages of modeling. At one point I drop the sketch and concentrate on what feels right while turning the model around, scaling different parts of the body up and down, pushing vertices around, etc...

http://i8.photobucket.com/albums/a26/alesmav/DaphneConcept.jpg

This are the two sketches I used as a reference for head modeling:

http://i8.photobucket.com/albums/a26/alesmav/DaphneHeadConcept.jpg

The frog (much more similar to the final version )

http://i8.photobucket.com/albums/a26/alesmav/frogConcept.jpg

The only environment&color test in did in Photoshop (almost forgot about it - a bit too moody, isn't it :)

http://i8.photobucket.com/albums/a26/alesmav/swampEnvironmentConcept.jpg

...and a few situations that were not realized...

http://i8.photobucket.com/albums/a26/alesmav/DaphneSituation1.jpg

http://i8.photobucket.com/albums/a26/alesmav/DaphneSituation2.jpg

http://i8.photobucket.com/albums/a26/alesmav/DaphneSituation3.jpg

Ales

[andy_maxman]

Hey Ales,

Huge congratulations on completing this film buddy....

You should really enjoy these moments, there will be a time couple of years down the road where you are going to look back and think...man, how did i get that thing done with so much on my hands......

so once again, be really proud of all the focus and hard work you put into....kudos!

while you get that shave, i'm sure you will now have time for shower too....

;) cheers!

andy

[Gazzamataz]

Well I love withcy things - I even done my own - but it ain't as good as this flick, although I am working on it.

Great sets, animation, models - everything! I might get my own stuff to this level when I finish my sentance at Animation Mentor even :-)

[joaquin3d]

Wow!! good Job Congratulations! :applause:

[psone]

Hey absolutly loved it! made me smile from start to finish!

psone

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