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TBart
12-20-2007, 03:34 AM
Alright, it's time to post my first animation. This will be part of a larger project, but I want to see what others think so far.

http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/th_jump1.jpg (http://s22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/?action=view&current=jump1.flv)
http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/th_jump2.jpg (http://s22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/?action=view&current=jump2.flv)
http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/th_jump3.jpg (http://s22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/?action=view&current=jump3.flv)

TBart
12-21-2007, 02:18 AM
I understand that crits take time, but even a simple good/bad comment would help me out.

jesusguijarro
12-21-2007, 08:37 AM
Hi, I like all of it except the front left paw when is suppended in the air

KyleG
12-21-2007, 02:51 PM
The jump feels a little slow, especially the fall I would try speeding this up a bit, and remember the jump up and fall down isn't a constant speed, the jump starts fast and looses speed as gravity takes over and vise versa for the fall, it starts slow at the top of the arch and gains speed the farther he falls

TBart
12-22-2007, 10:15 AM
Thanks, I'll see if I can make it better.

Kid-Mesh
12-27-2007, 02:46 AM
Goes by really fast :sad: (wish it were Quicktime)

From first glance...I dont really get a sense of the energy that is being built up or anticipation for the animal to actually leap. It just kinda ends up there.

You'd probably be best served to find some reference footage on youtube of a cat jumping. That's if you havent all ready.

Aside from that, I can appreicate what you went through to get this far. Just a few more tweaks and it should be ok.

It's not a bad start at all...:)

TBart
12-29-2007, 12:57 AM
Thanks kid-mesh, I tweaked my animation before I read your post, but we'll see if this is any better.
http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/th_jump5.jpg (http://s22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/?action=view&current=jump5.flv)
http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/th_jump4.jpg (http://s22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/?action=view&current=jump4.flv)

TBart
12-29-2007, 01:08 AM
Goes by really fast :sad: (wish it were Quicktime)

From first glance...I dont really get a sense of the energy that is being built up or anticipation for the animal to actually leap. It just kinda ends up there.

You'd probably be best served to find some reference footage on youtube of a cat jumping. That's if you havent all ready.

Aside from that, I can appreicate what you went through to get this far. Just a few more tweaks and it should be ok.

It's not a bad start at all...:)
I would put time into developing anticipation, but the only part of the animation that will be seen is the upper half of the jump, really. Is there a way to post quicktimes without having my own website? I don't want it to be a hastle to see the animations, so places like rapidshare are out for me. Also, it's a dog (boston terrier, which do look like cats, actually). No biggie, just might change how you look at it.

Kid-Mesh
12-29-2007, 04:54 PM
Well you can always get a Blog at wordpress. They give 50mb free storage. This way you could upload it (zip it) and then link it. No need to leave files up there that are constantly being tweaked. Plus, QT files are pretty small so it will be awhile before you hit 50mb.

When you start to get close to the limit just delete some old files to free space.

Then, once you feel like your animations are final....post them on youtube and link it to your blog :twisted:

Cheers,

.....I almost forgot you posted an update to your animation...

Man, this is really awesome. Much better anticipation this time too. Without being able to scrub through the frames here is one thing that you could do to even push it further.

A good rule to remember about anticipation is that the smaller the anticipation the smaller the action the larger the anticipation the action should match. That usually works in *most* cases.

Anyway, make the anticipation hold just a tad longer to emulate the building up of even more energy. And....hold it just a enough for the viewer to register what is on the screen so we can identify with the action.

Nice update :thumbsup:

TBart
12-29-2007, 05:47 PM
Thanks mesh, I appreciate the feedback. Will be posting more stuff soon.

TBart
01-13-2008, 07:50 PM
Ok, here's an update. I really need to post better clips than these, so bear with me until I figure that out. The dog will be running through tall grass, so that's why there is a screen blocking the lower half. I think there might be too much time in between the 1st and 2nd jump, but I'll let you be the judge.

http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/th_3jump.jpg (http://s22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/?action=view&current=3jump.flv)
Here's a closeup of the 2nd jump. It's not a jump though, the dog will be standing on a large rock, so that's why it's not simply an up and down motion.
http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/th_2ndjump.jpg (http://s22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/?action=view&current=2ndjump.flv)

lime324
01-15-2008, 11:15 AM
yeah, QT would be great, so we can see it frame by frame.
I think you right, there is too much time between 1st and the 2nd jump, I tought it was a pause for a moment, hehehe.. about the 2nd one, what do you mean by standing on a big rock? is it like standing on its 2 feet?? if so, I don't feel like its standing, it feels more like it stuck on something then fall down... well, that what I saw it...

Good job, man! I think this will be a good project based on your animation.. :thumbsup:

Cheers!

andybrun
01-15-2008, 04:17 PM
I really like it, feels lovely. I don't think you really need to change anything, but if you're keen to experiment you could offset the feet a bit and pick the front paws off the ground earlier (you're pushing off the back legs for the jump).

Also, why is the dog jumping? Is it trying to catch something in its mouth? Is it sniffing something? I'm not sure...


Good work!

TBart
01-15-2008, 06:41 PM
yeah, QT would be great, so we can see it frame by frame.
I think you right, there is too much time between 1st and the 2nd jump, I tought it was a pause for a moment, hehehe.. about the 2nd one, what do you mean by standing on a big rock? is it like standing on its 2 feet?? if so, I don't feel like its standing, it feels more like it stuck on something then fall down... well, that what I saw it...

Good job, man! I think this will be a good project based on your animation.. :thumbsup:

Cheers!
Thank you. Yup, it's standing on 2 feet. I'm sorry, it isn't very clear what is going on right now (hence my need to explain it), but I'll iron all of those kinks out later.

TBart
01-15-2008, 06:47 PM
I really like it, feels lovely. I don't think you really need to change anything, but if you're keen to experiment you could offset the feet a bit and pick the front paws off the ground earlier (you're pushing off the back legs for the jump).

Also, why is the dog jumping? Is it trying to catch something in its mouth? Is it sniffing something? I'm not sure...


Good work!
Ok, I'll see where that leads me. And yes, it is trying to catch something in its mouth (a bug), which I'll add in later. Like I said in my previous post, it's not very clear right now, so a lot of imagination is required. Thanks for the reply.

TBart
02-04-2008, 10:56 PM
Well, everything is coming along now. There are still a few things I have to do, but here is a single render that I just did. The final render will have more grass, but my computer couldn't handle any more in one pass, and I don't know how to do multiple passes or composite yet. As always, any crits are welcome.
http://i22.photobucket.com/albums/b336/bart0469/everything20050min.jpg

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