View Full Version : First Matte, demo reel use
11-07-2007, 08:20 PM
It's my first time posting here after browsing around for months seeing the awesome work that's displayed here. This is a piece I'm working on to put on my demo reel. I'm coming up to the end but to me, I think it's a little boring... I'm hoping to get some crits and maybe suggestions of what i can add, maybe a few birds flying or something, I don't know
Thanks in advance for your crits and comments
11-08-2007, 07:04 AM
Hi ! you're welcome to post anytime, well I have a few suggestions for this image
I like the idea and mood , you know about color palettes and composition too ,but this can be improved, first of all I would get rid of the glows in the lamps, and add more detail in the shadows the would project in the architecture, highlights here would be very important, start with a nice highlight on the water from the sun and then some more detailed highlights from the lamps as well, the left trees looks like they have a bad cut off, that strange bright rim ( maybe on porpouse of a rim light from the sun ) it looks bad, I would leave them totally black, this would make the exposure stronger and more correct, the buildings are to sharp in their edge, try to add a little bit of blur, also I would add some distant mountains or further background trees,just to have a nice sens of scale and depth, the birds sounds good, add them and don't forget a motion blur on them,I maybe would add a glare from the sun , that can invade the middle ground a little bit ,and some other foreground elements , maybe some bushes or another architectural details qould help the composition.
I hope I made myself clear
I'm looking forward to see how you improve it :thumbsup:
11-08-2007, 07:45 AM
Yes....jamesvfx is right...the first I saw is that the house (edges) is too sharp...but i like the mood:)
11-08-2007, 08:26 AM
Thanks very much for your replies, there's a lot of helpful tips in there that I will try to work with to improve this piece...Here's an update of some small changes I worked on in class today before I read your reply, so I havent fixed the trees and lamp glows, or added any trees/mountains in the bg, but I did have a chance to add some birds and I think it really adds to the piece, but no motion blur on them yet..
I'll have another update after I take your tips and implement them..
11-13-2007, 07:21 AM
Here we go, this is the most recent update, and I'm pretty happy with it. I got a lot of professional crits and it's always been good ones so that makes me happy.
11-14-2007, 02:01 PM
I like the concept, it looking good so far too. I think to help the image a little you could slightly desaturate it (particularly the building lights) and maybe lighten the whole thing a touch? Try it and see how it looks :)
11-14-2007, 05:14 PM
Hi ! well you did some improvements but I still think you need to fix other thing I already mentioned,
furst of all I still think youo need the background mountains it looks that anything elses exist beyond the architecture, take alook at this following references ,
in the first one you see a high contrast photo just like you're atempting to achieve
the background mountains look inside the sun's glow or halo and gives the image a nice sens of depth and scale
some glow to the sun would help look more realistic , giving a nice gradient color to it and not that sharp vector look it has now,
take a look at the strong highlight on the water from the sun, it is not that you have to do it exactly but it gives you and idea
the birds atill need motion blur, and the glow on the lamps is too much, glow is only needed when there's for or mist, change the glow for some lens flares and they will look better
I hope you can show us a higher res version, and I hope this helps
keep it up!!
11-16-2007, 12:44 PM
NIce examples jaime, just please dont paint the flaring (diffraction) on your image ie the last photo. It is a camera effect (caused by diffraction of light on the aperture blades at around f22). I love the matte done I would go personally with the fog type effect this will soften the image and give it a cooler contrast.
11-16-2007, 12:44 PM
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