Critics on small teaser

[pixel1]

hi Thomey, it looks a bit busy. The other words are distracting. Maybe fool around with some text effects and animation, then bring StrongMocha in at the end. Remember a teaser should be between 5 - 10 seconds.

[Mylenium]

Hi,

if you have a moment I would appreciate some feedback and critics on a small teaser I did produce in AF CS3 you can find it on
www.strongmocha.com (http://www.strongmocha.com%20)and click on the PostProduction tab to get to it.

Thank you,

Thorsten

Short answer: Boring.

Longer answer: Poor choice of typeface and lack of discernible structured motion. If you're not willing to animate each word individually and rely on cheap pseudo-random motion and effects, then don't attempt this in the first place.

Mylenium

[m|3]

I second Mylenium's comment.

After about 1/2 second the swirling words becomes monotonous.

[beenyweenies]

A fundamental requirement of most animation is motivation. Your text has no obvious motivation for its movement given that it's in a sky environment. Your choice of animation style would work in an underwater environment since currents would pull the text in and out like that, but even then it is a bit heavy handed in terms of extreme, over-reaching motion.

You might want to focus on making the animation either much more subtle or changing it altogether to something more random and wind-inspired given its environment.


As a side note, harsh criticism is to be expected on forums like this since most of us can spot (and will appreciate) animation that took real effort to execute. Whether true or not, your animation looks to be not much more than a copy/paste of the various wiggle scripts that are widely available and take a few minutes to implement. Nothing wrong with that, but expect the worst when posting on forums like this!

Good Luck

[thomey]

Hi,

thank you for the good feedback. I will make some changes and get it shorter, a better story and less content show at once.

Cheers,

Thorsten

[Rickmeister]

And you might want to consider to fade out the text in the background at the end, that way you have an clear free shot of the actual word "Strongmocha".

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