my animation ( 4 learning purpose)

[sunimaion]

plzz reply and help me out i my faults... so tat i can learn more

[LiannaS]

you could stand to exaggerate the part where he notices the tp stuck to his foot a bit more. Same with the door swing. Also the music detracts from the animation quite a bit. Maybe you should leave it M.O.S. that's all I can see, good work! :)

[sunimaion]

hi lianna.. thanx 4 ur advise.... and m really thanxful 4 ur gr8 adv.... newaz...

tell me plzz abt the sound..ya i know sounds use to distract animation but ... sorry 4 that....newaz.. hai tell me .. ok i could feel the exaggerate is less in the openin shot... but plzz tell me how do show more exaggerate when the guy notice somthin in his feet... plzz advise on tat shot.. tell me how the scene must be done... ..plzz

and thanx 4 ur advice.. plzz tell more of my faults.. cause i cant be perfect in one day , i want to learn a lots.. newaz thanx

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[sunimaion]

thanx to all

[sunimaion]

HI TO ALL...
after getin som valuable comments and critics ... heres is the updates fo my clip shrekira......
plzz critics again and again... and show me my faults... and i vil be gr8full ever..

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IHCAPm9Q57k

PLZZZ show me my faults

[HEKTOR]

Hello!



Animation is not bad, but i really don't like that moment when that guy a landing on right foot, because that stylization of landing is for heavy character, that guy is slim, his landing must be subtle.



I have hope, you understood me :)



Really sorry for my English!

[sunimaion]

hai hector.. thanx 4 the comment..
and...
actualy it was a analyse shot 4m shrek film... so i 1st done the shot as shrek done in the film.. and then go on changin in my way.... so may be tat time i done that mistake,
the character is light... mmmmm actually tat thing missed by me... actually i got shrek only in my head , so done that... newaz thanx for showin the faults ... thanx...
i vil be workin on that also .....
and plzz tell more where i can do some more correction...

[HEKTOR]

If you change that moment with landing, all animation will be good. But I thing you should change a last moment when he touch his hips on end, I don’t like the hand position, and hands will be little faster land on the hips, only change that speed when hands going down.

Something is not o.k. whit the left hand 5 second when it come down, I thing you rotate this to much. But this all is only my suggestion :)



Change the music on that form Shrek and show on what you do :)



Bye!



Sorry for my English!

[sunimaion]

hi... thanx 4 the valuable comment... and ya i vil work on the landing position and also the last end position as u told..... i vil fast the timing and his hands tooo... i think ur comments vil really help me makin my reel.... thanx again...plzz advise me future also

but as u told durin the 5th sec the hand position is bad..... when the left hand comes down ... in that postion u told me to work or som twist u saw in that .... but actually i cant get that .. wat u suppose to tell...plzzz can u explain me in details plzzz..... i cant get it rite wat u said..plzz tell me ..

and rest i can get it well.. and i vil be workin on that soon ...

thanx 4 ur advise and keep showin my faults again and again...

thanx again

[hakanpersson]

Have you ever seen there's a letter "s" on your keyboard...?
Anywayzzzz, I got 2 main crits, those obvious I recognised instantly, it looks as if he scratching his ass very hard, honestly it just gets me wondering what he is doing..? And aswell the way he points his fingers in the end, when he relaxes his hands on his legs, it looks as if he is really pointing at something.

Otherwise some motion could be slightly less exaggerated. But theres some nice things, like how he balances on one feet, could be a bit more "twitchy", but I still like it. Also the paper and how its gets stuck on his foot looks realistic. Overall good with space of improvement:)

[sunimaion]

hi... ya i got ur points..... it vil help me...

abt the scratch point - it should be less exxacturation or more... actually i cant get u wat u suppose to say.. plzz tell me in details...

2 - abt the last postion the finger one... ya its look ocward.. but its saa analyse shot 4m shrek.. adn there itself shrek does the same shot .. so i hav to do that.. but if its llokin coward then mmm i need to change.. newaz thanx 4 ur valuable stuffs

and thanx 4 watchin ma vdo... and plzz show more and more of my faults...

thanx

[eagleeyeadvertising]

all the scenes you modified are good and lets try to modify them as per all of us told you keep animating... :bounce:

[sunimaion]

hello eagle sir (ashu) , sir thanx 4 ur suppose and help....

i vil be workin on it sure..

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