Character: Apocalyptic Overlord

[Hickory]

Hows about Start over. The depth of the image is nonexistent.

[Hickory]

If this is in layers, then you don't really need to start over. Just you need to work on the depth. I feel like the whole thing is just sitting on top of the paper. Maybe some mountains or drop him further back in space. But the image is pretty flat.

[BiTMAP]

uhh Hickory2.5, Really if your not going to try and at least seem positive, please refrain from posting?

[camilkuo]

It's good that you drew these details. I like the background, but I think the hands are a bit too small:).

[baglunch]

Hickory isn't p.c., but he tends to give valid points. I think it's funny and useful, but I see how it can bruise. It's not like he just says, "it sucks": he gives constructive criticism. I think his feedback is a lot more useful than the half-hearted, "yeah, cool" posts that clutter up the boards.

All that said, I don't think the original poster is looking for feedback on his 2d technique, but advice on how to improve his character and overall mood of the piece.

So, do you want this guy to look impassive, calculating, machine? Or terrible, cruel, savage? I could see this design going either way, but additional refinement is needed to push it one way or the other.

[Picster]

Thanks for the helpful comments!
@Hickory: hm, the thing is layered, so i will try to add some things to add some depth to the image.
@baglunch: the guy should look pretty dark and somewhow like some military unit (gasmask thingie, googles)...


i will work on the image when i get home from work...

Picster

[Hickory]

Tip: It looks like your character is standing on the bottom edge of the picture. Lifiting him into the page will help a little. framing his head about 2/3 of the way UP the page will help the presentation a bit.

His arms are flat off to the side of the body like he was squished between 2 pieces of glass. Maybe if you could turn them and make them more deminsional. That will also help to increase depth.

baglunch: Thank you for your support, I couldn't have said it better.

Bitmap: :)

[BiTMAP]

good boy :) lol I know your trying to help, I was in a partnership with a british fellow who was very negitive in his help, he would make simple people do amazing work, but I couldn't handle the negitivity :S...

[Hickory]

Originally posted by Picster
baglunch: the guy should look pretty dark and somewhow like some military unit (gasmask thingie, googles)...

You said googles... :)

[baglunch]

Googles are a powerful tool for helping you in your searches.

Bitmap: Perhaps you should take it out on British people instead of negative people. heh. :thumbsup:

[Picster]

i mean googles... those eyeprotection thingies :)
P.S.: the tool is "google", not "googles"

[baglunch]

It's "goggle". :shrug:

Ask your friend (and mine) Dictionary.com (http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=goggle)

[Picster]

hmmm uhm,... ehm.....
ok he's wearing one google on his head and another in his bag :D ;)

however, ... i cant work on him this weekend because i'm going to visit my GF. So Sunday is the earliest date :)



P.S. sorry for my english ;)

[Daveaustin]

ok this is gettin stupid.... just to clear the whole thing up...

The Guy/machine is wearing GOGGLES
not goggle or google or googles.. GOGGLES!!

Picster, i like the design of the character, but as a few people have commented on b4, you need to put in a lot more work before it works properly as a composition :shrug:
I think the shadow blur on the outline of the character doesn't help at all, all it does is bring the sky/background a whole lot closer to him, also.. i was wondering what the red 'fire' was in his goggles? is it the colour of the lens? or a reflection.. either way it might be nice to see a contrasting colour than that of the sky...
Also goin on the rule of thirds as Hickory said, if you split the image up into 3 sections horizontal and vertical that will give the ideal proportions as to where to place the key elements.. such as the horizon and the character..

hope this all helped :wip:

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