Woman on the Bridgeside, Robet Shi (2D)

[hasanaliakhtar]

Hey ur artwork is simply kool..I really like those colors which u have put in there..Well trust me when I was seeing it first I have felt that fresh atmosphere as I was also part of the scene..These things can add a great touch in the paintings:thumbsup:..In my humble opinion some depths on her face are missing..U have painted a water reflection really good..God bless u..Keep sharing..Take carez..Cheers

[usernamen]

awesome composition and colors! The painting has a really nice feeling to it, fresh, it reminds me of a nice, warm day in spring.
as for improvements, i would suggest more hard edges. For example on her dress, just a few dark blue strokes to emphasize the folding more. Besides that, the lightening on the different objects is well done, but the overall lightening bothers me a bit. The shadows from the big objects like the forest or the wall should be bigger and darker, i think.

[RicoD]

Okay, sunny, nice and quiet feel to it, but there are some things I'd like to point out.

There's no fall off anywhere, which makes the picture look rather flat. For instance, everything that's further away should be less in contrast, detail, saturation etc. The grass has much more detail than the trees, which could use more definiton.

The umbrella (or what it's called, I don't know) is probably a bit translucent, in which case some of its color would shine through. In any case, it's blocking out most of the sunlight, casting a shadow on her. Even if it would be very diffused, you would still see it. Her face is brighter than her right hand, which would be more affected by the bounced lights. Also, the sticks in the umbrella could use a bit more mass. I could be wrong, but I think the perspective is off. Also, her left hand isn't anatomically correct, so I advise you to get some reference on that. It also has a different perspective than the bridge. There would be more wrinkles near stress areas like where her arm bends.

The spattered pattern on the rocks may help make it nice and gritty, but at the top it lacks definition. Now it has no mass, like a fading 2 dimensional sheet of sand that gets blown away. The plants hanging over the rocks would cast a shadow, but now it kind of looks like they're behind the (dissolving) rocks. Also, there are grooves between the stones of the stone wall on the side, but not on the top. Is this supposed to be like that? Also, the bridge looks a bit 'wavy'. I think this is primarily caused by the top, which looks thinner and thicker and different places.

I hope you look into those things. It would be such a shame to leave it like this.

The waterfall could use some directional indications. Some line flowing in the direction that water would go would help. The foam could use some more spatters and the water would have more wrinkles there.

Also, overall composition would be better if you removed part of the left side and some of the bottom. I'd also move the waterfall a bit more to the left, but this would depend on how much you'd remove from the left side. You see, currently, there's nothing interesting in the focal points composition wise (trees and a piece of the umbrella and pieces of the wall). I assume you want her to be more of a focus. I think she would be if you moved her closer to a focal point.

[Zorrino]

Nice colors and composition, but I find the picture somewhat dull and monotonic. I would try to break the homogeneity of shadows everywhere, specially in the tree groves.

[WhiteGuardian]

I have fixed many mistakes from my artwork.

hasansgrafix = Thx you Mr. Hasan. Btw, i also had seen you artwork at Deviantart and i knew you best in photo manipulation. That's great talent. Please give comments to my other artwork that posted here.

mellowpurple = Thx for your critics Mr. Daniela. Some part i had fixed. Please tell me again if you have found something wrong in my artwork.

RicoD = Much thx i have to say to you Mr. Ricardo. So many critics came from you. You have great sense of art. But all of your critics are right. I have done much mistakes in my artwork. Wrong here wrong there. But i studied your critic and tried to fix it. So far that's the result. And 1 more time i really need your critic to this artwork. Maybe there're other mistakes that i don't see it. Thx again Mr. Ricardo.

Zorrino = Thx Mr. Fabian Fucci for your critics. I have fixed it. Please take a look in my fixed artwork again.

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