A short film I made

[droidoz]

Hey man, I like the pasing of your short, its got a very nice rithim, not only in the music but in the speed of the camera moves and the editing
The modeling, lighting and rendering need a bit more work and i'm not talking about the bike, it looks great (except for some smoothing problems on the exhaust) but more about the intro shots. They lack contrast and that makes them a bit dull to watch. I do like the way you work with open frames (not showing everything at once) but the camera moves could be a bit more natural, more like there was an actual camera. Now it feels like a computer visualisation, very technical, it decreases believability. For instance, when you pan towards the bike for the first time the pan suddenly turns into a tilt in a very weird way, like there was no gravity on the camera. I do think its great how you leave the viewer guessing for a few seconds before showing the bike, that increases involvement whitch is always nice!

I also think its very cool that you've done the music yourself, wish I could do that. Take care!

[Animals]

thank you for commet I knwo that a lot could be much better but since I hade dead line and only 5 weeks to finish I had to be harch and cut a lot of detail and be little fast

but I really apprciate you answer.. but I wanted to know more about th lack of contrast in the begingen I justt wanna learn you know.. give me some exampel so I can understand you better:)

[droidoz]

hey mister animals, I've made you a little drawing to show you what I think conrast can do for your movie. First a bit of text...
Contrast makes us look at things, if everything is grey, there is nothing to look at. Same in music, if al you'll here is a monotonous drone, you'll fall a sleep. When there is constant change and variation it suddenly becomes interesting. Same goes for images. The images in your films beginning lack contrast, its not very clear what's important and whats not. This not only makes it harder to read but also uninteresting. People enjoy contrast wether its in images or in their daily lives. Hell is repetion right? So images with a natural looking and focused contrast are way more pleasant to look at then grayish images without a clear point(s) of interest.
I made a little drawing to explain a bit more, ofcourse its a bit exagerated to underline my point.
The first image shows the original and the way I read it, there were many things my eyes were drawn to. It took some time before I understood the oilcan was leaking. The second image shows exagerated contrast and the third shows how it reads.
Again this is an example and i'm by no means implying your movie should look like this. I'm just trying to explain contrast. Thanks for listening

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