High School AP Studio Art

[Zarathorne]

sorry to bump, but, no critique or comments for me?

[Naisart]

Hi,

There are some problems with anatomy. First of all her neck seem very long and she also looks stretched. Her left arm seems way too long and her left leg is bent in a very strange way. I also think you should change the form of the breasts, they look like balls now.

For the hair, try not to draw every strand. In the angle her head is right now all hair would probably drop over the face.

If the sun is behind her, she should be in shadow, maybe you could change the position of the sun. Also try some darker shadows.

For the composition I would probalby show the whole figure and maybe more background under and to the right of her.

Hope this helps and keep working on it!

Also, she is missing nipples, but I guess you have just not drawn them yet :)

[Serkeien]

Are you turning in the portfolio at the end of the year?
I'm in highschool AP Studio also.

If you're doing this for the portfolio, is this for the concentration or breadth and what is your topic?

As for general critique on your painting, I agree with a lot of what Mumphy said. The things that I would work on are the anatomy and composition. Look at the anatomy threads or take a couple of refrence photos. The hair is a little stiff and I would look at how it would fall onto and around her neck and shoulders, instead of just letting it hang in front and behind.

The only other thing I notice is that the orangeness of the skin doesn't really add to the mood you have going with the background colors. Try sticking with the colors you've used on her right arm. (the one angled down)

I like the way you've painted the skin and I think that this piece has a good start, just needs to be tied together now. Good luck!:thumbsup:

[Zarathorne]

Yes, and this is for the concentration part. I'll keep in this thread with all of my concentration pieces. My teacher said not to use digital in the breadth because the judges don't like it.

My concentration is female fantasy/anatomy in digital.

Thank you both very much for the critique, hopefully this will help a lot.

[Noctourne]

I definitely have to agree with previous critiques here, she looks a bit enlongated. The thumb of her right hand also looks very long, if that hasn't been pointed out yet. :) First and foremost I'd definitely look into working on her anatomy, then I'd work on the lighting of the piece. :D

Her arms look a little long, the elbow of a person tends to fall in the curve of the female's waist, the tip of mine being just a little higher than my belly button. :) The foot can always fit perfectly from the wrist to the elbow, and her hand, fingers stretched, should just cover her face. - Just a couple anatomy tips. Obviously, anatomy varies from person to person, but those are just sort of basic rules to follow. :D

You're doing great though!! :D I can't wait to see the piece finished! Love her expression. :)

[Zarathorne]

My latest update on the piece.

Took into account a lot of the critique, still obviously not finished.

Am I on the right track with the anatomy now? (aside from missing hand and foot)
Now covering the nudity with a piece of cloth. How do you feel about the color?
I wanted to make something stark and contrasting wrapped around her, any suggestions on that?
http://img329.imageshack.us/img329/5182/angelgu9.jpg

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