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shakeelnoor
10-30-2006, 10:59 AM
Hey Everyone,

Recently I graduated from Animation Mentor, It was fun learning animation from awesome animators I have finished my 1st shot film my mentor for film was Mark Bhem, the project was 6 months long 3 months I worked on pre-production, story boards and animatics and 3 months on animation. please check and give your comments.

Direct Link
http://www.shakeelnoor.com/short_film.mov


Website
http://www.shakeelnoor.com (http://www.shakeelnoor.com/)


File Size: 26mb
Format : QuickTime 7

Thanks,
Shakeel
SKraft
10-30-2006, 08:39 PM
Hey Shakeel, Good work. I like the story and I think it comes across well. Overall you've got some strong animation here.

There were a couple spots that caught my eye. Here are some nit-picks.

1. Just before he jumps in the dumpster, he point at the robber. That's not really clear to me what he's doing there. Why does he point at him?

2. Right after that he puts his right hand way back and then jumps in the dumpster. When his hand goes back, I expect him to grab the broom, and when he doesn't, it catches me off guard.

3. When he runs across the street and slingshots through the sign I see a couple spots where the curves could be cleaned up a bit.

But yeah, overall good stuff!
shakeelnoor
10-31-2006, 06:41 AM
I'm glad that you like my animation. Thanks Sean Kraft for your encouraging comments and critique really appreciate it .I will try to improve my animation.
sachin3d
10-31-2006, 12:34 PM
nice story and nice animation. only thing that i would like to say is that at places timing is little slow. i think u need to look at that part. rest looks good to me. keep it up man.
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