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desktopepics
09-20-2006, 12:27 AM
Hello all...

Just finished a brief animated promo for myself and was seeking a little critique. Any would be appreciated....

http://www.desktopepics.com/sfx101/intro_B.jpg (http://www.desktopepics.com/sfx101/opener_med.mov)

A larger version of this can be found by clicking here! (http://www.desktopepics.com/sfx101/opener_hi.mov)

Thank you in advance!

CBAnimator
09-20-2006, 04:03 PM
Hi Desktopepics (Corey is it?) welcom to the boards!

I took a look at it, and i have a few suggestions for you..

Firstly, Id improve the lighting.. the underside of the arm is really dark, itd be nice if we could see the whole thing when it comes into the spotlight.

The hat explosion isnt bad (and is certainly unexpected!), but some of the flying pieces bounce really high while others fall flat.. it looks a little odd. Id fix the settle in, and have them all act in more or less the same way.

Also, the hand's final pose looks really painful, i dont think anyone can get their hand to go 90 degrees straight down like that. Id go back and re-think that pose.

The animation of the hand rocking back and forth at the end could be better. At the moment, theres no real follow-through to it. You could try adding some sway to the fingers to get that kind of effect.

Anyway.. I hope that helps. I like what youre going for, and your definitly on your way.

Broesworth
09-22-2006, 10:02 AM
Hey desktopepics, cool idea, i have a few suggestions >

Have you considered having the explosion directly after the hand flattens the hat? IMO the hat rising from the squash doesn't add much, and neither do the bouncing hat parts afterward. If you cut straight to the logo after the explosion i think your opener would be a much tighter piece, as 15 seconds without logo is fairly long for a production opener anyway.

Hope that helps.
The idea is pretty cool, good luck with it.

desktopepics
09-22-2006, 01:24 PM
I really appreciate and soak in your responses. As I tell my children in regards to critiques, it's not about thinking "my work sucks! People think I suck." ... it's about listening to what they have to say collectively, come outside of ourselves and learn from it.

And I am learning every day thank to comments like these. I really appreciate it and look forward to posting more things shortly to show that I have been paying attention to your words.

Thanks!

DesktopEpics
(yep! Corey...that's me)

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