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actionbrad3d
08-30-2006, 01:13 AM
Hi there!:)

This is a short film I made last year as my final project in animation school. I made it on my own over a period of six months.

Looking at it now, there are probably a few things i would work on a bit more if i had the time.

All the same i would be interested to know what people think of it!
just go to this link :

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3bVf1qzxlP4

cheers !
derbyboy20
08-30-2006, 10:12 AM
A very good concept, which actually made me laugh out loud at the end...It was nice to see something different with a bit of originality about it.

I think the animation of the characters could have been smoother in places, but I realise that there were a lot of characters to animate, and it doesn't detract from the overall film. So thumbs up; really well done!
John Keates
08-30-2006, 12:55 PM
I really liked this. It is true that the animation isn't amazing (not than I can do better) but it gets the job done and it is a good job. I laughed out laud at the end.

I aggree that it is nice to see something original. This is exactly the kind of short that animation is good for.
HenningK
08-31-2006, 02:18 PM
Nice concept. Yeah, animation could really use some attention, maybe just at the beginning where there are only a few characters to look at.
But the tale is told through sound, and to venture a crit in that department... some of the mouths say their word too clearly for having just fallen ten stories. It would be a lot funnier, and true to the concept, if they wheezed and coughed their word out, obviously hurt after their struggle.
love,hen
actionbrad3d
08-31-2006, 02:59 PM
Thanks heaps for your comments guys. :thumbsup: I really appreciate your honest feedback .

I can definitely see what you mean. The animation was all a bit rushed toward the end there and this was my first really big animation project so it ended up being a bit rough. I want to have a look at polishing it up a bit, so over the next few weeks will ahev a look at those parts that i think need the most work.
as henningK said it needs a bit of attention particularly at the biginning. If there is anything else that particularly stands out , let me know.

cheers!
echoBars
08-31-2006, 10:07 PM
Agree with the general comments so far-Original and entertaing concept with room for a little clean up on the animation, but you mentioned you already know this it seems you've got a handle on what you're doing. A very promising first film. Keep up the good work

For a laugh, check out http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1eNqFibM7Ig
revolutionzen
08-31-2006, 11:21 PM
Agree with the general comments so far-Original and entertaing concept with room for a little clean up on the animation, but you mentioned you already know this it seems you've got a handle on what you're doing. A very promising first film. Keep up the good work

For a laugh, check out http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1eNqFibM7Ig
will regarding the animation of this thread..i agree 2 with most comments regarding the animation ...but personaly i didnt like it ...
anyway dude that utube movie is realy funny....
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