nightscene in the house, TeohWeiLiat (3D)

[pbalsic]

I like your work, nice rendering.
Try to make a little bit darker shadows...

[JWcph]

Nice scene, good rendering indeed.
I agree on the shadows - most noticeable seen under the plate; in a room this dark it would be almost pitch black under there.
Your textures are great, and also the displacement on the metal can, I would recommend some dirt, grit, chips and dents pretty much on everything - used sparingly, though, but enough to take the almost über-clean CG look out of things (look at the coffee mug, the plate under the stick-thingies etc.).
Maybe look a bit at the DOF too, it seems that the distance blur is almost equal for the glass & bottle, and the chair & desk which are significantly further away.
For a photo like this (if it was a "real" photo) the focus area would often be quite narrow around a near object such as the can, and objects as far away as the desk would be all but unrecognizable blurry shapes.

Keep up the good work, good luck with college!
'best
Jesper W. of Cph

[thegodlouis]

i like the mood you create in this room...........well done........

[Wiro]

Did you intend any kind of main attraction here? The composition leads the eye to the can but there's nothing there. There's a warm light in the background that catches the viewer's attention yet you blurred that area out so what we're left with is a picture with no main focus and no story.

It would be far more interesting if the can contained some cookies, maybe one that's nibbled on, giving the picture a bit of life and a backstory. Or turn the chair on the side, maybe the occupants had to leave in a hurry? Or have the coffee cup steam as if someone was about to have breakfast.

Whichever you do, make the lighting work to bring out the can which seems to be your main focus. What's happening in your picture? Is the warm light from the moon or from a lamp? If it's to be a mysterious picture then make it moonlight, casting shadows from the windowframe onto the table.
If it's a calm, cozy evening, increase the light and make it a lamp's, casting stronger shadows and bouncing light around.
Bring out the reflections in the can and cutlery.

Wiro

[ccbteoh]

wiro:thanks for the good critique.Actually in this picture i porposely make the can as the main focus.It is because my shortfilm is about an old people live in a small and messy house.In order to show his life is boring and nobody cares,i porposely make it empty to show he don't event care his life,is it make sense?:)and the warm light is actually a small mentol souche at a corner.thx

thegodlouis :thx!

JWcph :thanks for all the suggestion,i'm appreciate it:)

pbalsic :I agree with you about the shadow,thx!

er....i would like to make the shadow more obvious in this scene,but i don't intend to increase more lighting intensity to create the shadow....can anyone teach me how to cast shadow on an object without increasing light intensity in lightwave?thx:)

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